*blinks* Whoa. There are no words for how amazing that was.
*blinks* Whoa. There are no words for how amazing that was.
This was truely beautiful, but, alas, there is a tiny flaw. Lily and James said that Harry would still have three men, Sirius, Remus, and Peter to love him almost as much as they did (or do, rather). But since Lily and James were using the Fidelis charm, and Peter was the secret keeper, they would have obviously known that Peter had been the one to betray them. Sorry to nitpick like this, but I myself like people to give me constructive criticism rather than a plain simple one liner that doesn't tell me what's really on their mind, ya know? Lol. I'm rambling. A wonderful peice, very well written. Great choice of song. AFI is my personal favorite band, and that song fit exceptionally well with your theme. --Samantha
This was truely beautiful, but, alas, there is a tiny flaw. Lily and James said that Harry would still have three men, Sirius, Remus, and Peter to love him almost as much as they did (or do, rather). But since Lily and James were using the Fidelis charm, and Peter was the secret keeper, they would have obviously known that Peter had been the one to betray them. Sorry to nitpick like this, but I myself like people to give me constructive criticism rather than a plain simple one liner that doesn't tell me what's really on their mind, ya know? Lol. I'm rambling. A wonderful peice, very well written. Great choice of song. AFI is my personal favorite band, and that song fit exceptionally well with your theme. --Samantha
This was truely beautiful, but, alas, there is a tiny flaw. Lily and James said that Harry would still have three men, Sirius, Remus, and Peter to love him almost as much as they did (or do, rather). But since Lily and James were using the Fidelis charm, and Peter was the secret keeper, they would have obviously known that Peter had been the one to betray them. Sorry to nitpick like this, but I myself like people to give me constructive criticism rather than a plain simple one liner that doesn't tell me what's really on their mind, ya know? Lol. I'm rambling. A wonderful peice, very well written. Great choice of song. AFI is my personal favorite band, and that song fit exceptionally well with your theme. --Samantha
This was truely beautiful, but, alas, there is a tiny flaw. Lily and James said that Harry would still have three men, Sirius, Remus, and Peter to love him almost as much as they did (or do, rather). But since Lily and James were using the Fidelis charm, and Peter was the secret keeper, they would have obviously known that Peter had been the one to betray them. Sorry to nitpick like this, but I myself like people to give me constructive criticism rather than a plain simple one liner that doesn't tell me what's really on their mind, ya know? Lol. I'm rambling. A wonderful peice, very well written. Great choice of song. AFI is my personal favorite band, and that song fit exceptionally well with your theme. --Samantha
This story was really good. I like your imagry and when Sirius joined them I almost cried. Very beautifully written.
I'd offer my profuse compliments, but my simple words could never do your narrative justice.
