Like my prior reviewers, I too don't find free verse as my cup of tea, but this wasn't bad. I'd work with the formatting a little bit, everything is rather choppy (especially where you'd put one small word on a line of its own) and loses the flow of the poem. Your descriptions were good, but I'd work with the sentence structure a little to keep it interesting. Other than that, not bad. Good job. And I hope the other poem gets out of the queue.

Author's Response: I'll re-read my poem and keep an eye out for things that I might change. Thanks, I enjoy receiving constructive critism. I hope also that my poem will come out of the queue; I'l' re-review your poem to let you know when it has. Thanks for reviewing!

I love the way this one is written! It's got a good style.

Author's Response: Thanks so much! Another free verse poem, entitled Taken to Azkaban, is in queue, and has been since the 2nd. Argh! Am I the only one who has to wait a week for updates? Anyways, thanks for reviewing (you're the first reviewer, you know ;) ) and I'm going to go review your story now. *I try to review authors' stories when they have reviewed mine* Thnaks for the compliments, and check out my other stories!