Reviewer: Hedwig with a quill
Date: 09/09/06 17:33
Chapter: Memiors of a snake...

I nearly suffocated laughing! I would have put you up on a murder charge!
1. Nagini should play the tapes
2. Rita will double-cross Nagini by embarrassing HER.
3. Nagini returns to Voldy and begs 4 help.
4. they kill Rita together(MWAHAHAH!)

Author's Response: I hope you're okay now. :-) Thanks for parting with your two cents. Judging by the reviews so far, I think I have most of the chapter plotted out. :-)

Reviewer: Luna_Goddess
Date: 09/09/06 17:00
Chapter: Nagini Tells It Like It Is...

I almost passed out for laughing while reading your story! Great job!!!

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked the story!! :-)

Reviewer: jpkitty
Date: 09/08/06 16:10
Chapter: Nagini Tells It Like It Is...

1. Yes. She didn't technically do anything. Voldy made her try to kill Aurthur.
2. H*** yeah! It'd help the final battle end for everyone to realise what a dork voldy is.:-)
3. I hope not. You could have her go to Harry and become a Harry groupie and then have fun having voldy dissing conversations. Then you could have her be friends with Hedwig.

Author's Response: Thanks! Also, thank you for filling out the questonaire. Once I get final tallies, I'll begin writing more of the final chapter. :-)

Reviewer: purplepanther
Date: 08/12/06 22:30
Chapter: Iíve like, so had it here!

Good job! Please update soon! The thought of Voldy and Bella is rather disturbing. I love the way you portray Nagini!

Author's Response: Thanks! And Nagini thanks you too. ;-) Yeah, Voldy / Bella is actually quite disturbing. Thankfully, chapter 6 is almost finished. I just have to add a few things to it before I send it to my beta. But it will be here soon. :-)

Reviewer: The_Obsessed_One
Date: 07/21/06 15:41
Chapter: Iíve like, so had it here!

Very creative. I almost chocked on my sandwich from laughing! Keep it up!

Author's Response: You poor thing. Hope you're okay, now. :-) Thanks for reviewing.

Reviewer: LalyW
Date: 07/16/06 15:17
Chapter: Iíve like, so had it here!

Oh,I laughed so much!Very nice and funny!

Author's Response: Thanks! :-)

Reviewer: voldymoldy13
Date: 07/06/06 8:39
Chapter: Say It Ain't So!?

Voldy! Day 807 - I saw a rather cute boy snake today out in the gardens. I went to go meet him, but Voldy saw me and grabbed me...
Because of it, he now won't let me out of his sight and has me locked up in the mansion. He can take over the world, yet I can't have a boyfriend. Jeez! What gives?!
you should be ashamed or maybe jealous!

Author's Response: I think Voldy's jealous. Nagini's his girl, and he doesn't like other people messing with his things. Though I'm sure Nagini will eventually get fed up with that crappola.... lol

Reviewer: voldymoldy13
Date: 07/06/06 8:32
Chapter: Memiors of a snake...

hah ha ha i really needed that that was great i fell of my chair
I eally can see Voldy singing Macho man

Author's Response: Glad you liked it. :-) Though, why Voldy picked that song is a mystery. Maybe he likes the Village People... :-/

Reviewer: phoenixfeather_quill
Date: 06/22/06 14:08
Chapter: Iíve like, so had it here!

Whoa. This is making me laugh so hard... I really like it, but I think Chapter 5 went a little overboard... otherwise, it's pretty cool!

Author's Response: I promise, chapter 6 won't be so "overboard." lol I'm really glad you like it, though. :-)

Reviewer: kumydabookworm
Date: 06/21/06 22:17
Chapter: Memiors of a snake...

This was hilarious. I liked your interpretation of Nagini. She manages to be wicked, but still hate Voldemort - which makes me like her. She's dlelightful!

I liked that she didn't know what "poison" was, and that she left different "presents" for people she didn't like. That made me laugh.

Your formatting seems a bit strange though, and I would definitely have someone look this over for errors. You had tiny little errors every so often.

The Voldemort singing Macho Man was a bit over-the-top. That was more cheesy than funny. The part that made me laugh there was the burning eyes reference. But I would have Voldemort doing something more mundane like coming out of the shower or something.

Nice work, dear.


Author's Response: The formatting was supposed to be in a diary-like format. But unless you mean the spacing itself, I'll have to look it over. The errors - this was submitted before I found my PI Beta. Everything after chapter 2 was looked over by her. Maybe if she's not too busy, I can get her to look over this chapter. Glad you liked the stroy, though! :-)

Reviewer: Nerevar_Reborn
Date: 06/19/06 20:12
Chapter: Iíve like, so had it here!

ewwwww.... bella gave voldy a love potion... gross. bad images people. bad images. LOL ITS HILARIOUS BAD IMAGES THOUGH!!!!!!!!!!!!!! omfg, nagini and fawkes!? LOL! (no really, most people just write that as in "oh that's funny but i'm not really laughing" but I am laughint here lol!!!!!!!!!!) Omfg rotflmao!!! i liked the beach scene as well, it was pretty funny, he taking them to the beach to swim lol... omg nagini and fawkes... lol. omg i cant get over how FUNNY this is!!!

Author's Response: Bella + Voldy = truly bad, but hilarious images all the same, lol. I'm glad you really like the story! The beach scene is one of my faves, too. :-)

Reviewer: Krys
Date: 06/18/06 16:21
Chapter: Memiors of a snake...

That is an awsome story. wow. i didn't want to stop reading!

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked the story. :-) There are a few more chapters already added if you want to read them. Chapter 6 is in the works, so that one will be added soon, too.

Reviewer: Amethyst Zaira
Date: 06/18/06 14:34
Chapter: Iíve like, so had it here!

Hahahaha! Voldy and Bella!!

No, wait. Nagini and Fawkes! Hahahaha!

*Wipes tears of laughter*

This was great! You made me laugh... you made me cry... you also disturbed me (pink gardening gloves). I loved this one!

Author's Response: Thanks! Glad you liked this chapter. :-) Yeah, the pink gardening gloves are a bit disturbing, lol.

Reviewer: Elyon Fawkes
Date: 06/16/06 19:07
Chapter: Iíve like, so had it here!


Author's Response: Thanks! :-)

Reviewer: grangergurl
Date: 06/14/06 17:35
Chapter: Iíve like, so had it here!

lol. AGAIN!!!! 1000/10. what more can I say?

Author's Response: Aww... thanks! :-D

Reviewer: grangergurl
Date: 06/14/06 17:31
Chapter: Constantly Gardening

lol, a Dark Lord gardening? What a thought.

Author's Response: He needed to focus more energy on something constructive rather than on Potter, lol.

Reviewer: grangergurl
Date: 06/14/06 17:28
Chapter: Itís a Mad, Mad, Mad, Mad World!!!

lol, AGAIN!!!! Who would have thought that Nagini had so much personality! The Parseltounge part x-s out my previous review.

Author's Response: That's Nagini for you, lol.

Reviewer: grangergurl
Date: 06/14/06 17:24
Chapter: Say It Ain't So!?

Again, LOVE THE HUMOR!!!!!!!!!

Author's Response: Thanks! :-)

Reviewer: grangergurl
Date: 06/14/06 17:21
Chapter: Memiors of a snake...

lol, I love the humor that you entwine! but Voldy is a Parslemouth, so couldn't he speak to Nagini?

Author's Response: He could speak to Nagini, but she often ignores him.

Reviewer: Periwinkle
Date: 06/14/06 16:18
Chapter: Memiors of a snake...

Goodness, you made me laugh! This has got to be one of the funniest fics that I've read here on MNFF. You've got a real knack for turning ordinary things into something extraordinary.

Take the Firewhisky, for example. "Glass tubes." Huh.

This is a very unrealistic story that's quite OOC, but you pulled it off splendidly. A few authors try their jab at humor, and only wind up having it unrealistic and not funny. Humor comes to you naturally, and it shows through your writing.

A couple things that I want to point out -

One is that your use of ellipses and hmms sort of ruin the story, in my opinion. They destroy the flow of the story, and dilute the humor. It would be much better without so many of them.

Two, you take Voldemort and make unnecessary comments involving him, in my opinion. For example - the one about him singing Macho Man. The humor just dies there, and makes us readers rather cringe than laugh. My advice is to take everyday things and interpret it through Nagini's eyes, and not adding silly things that don't turn out well.

Otherwise, I very much enjoyed this story. Two thumbs up!!

Author's Response: Thanks for the insightful reply. I'll definitely keep what you said in mind when I go to write chapter 6. :-) I really appreciate what you had to say.

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