Wow, I really like the detail in this story. It's going really well, I love Sam's character.
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it. :-) I'll try and add the third chapter soon !!
Wow, that is a really interesting idea for a story! I'm looking forward to reading more. Well done!
Author's Response: Thanks !! :-D
This is a super story. Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Thanks !!! :-D
A different take on Tom Riddle with a sister as a character? It's different alright but it kept my attention. There were certain places were a comma would have been nice and you also mentioned her eyes as being green then emerald green. I don't think a ten year old would describe her eyes as emerald green. There were a few other words I think were too mature for a ten year old girl such as commanding authoritarian vicious confrontation infliction regarding Then again maybe she had something other children there didn't. Maybe she found books to read or something. Besides those things I thought the story was very well written and the children's reactions to Hogwarts weren't out of character for children. Especially coming out of an orphanage. I'll give this a 9/10.
Author's Response: Thanks for the info. :-) I'll definitely keep it in mind. Also, just to mention, Miriam's a bit brainy (like Tom), so that's why she uses big words. :-) I've just resubmitted the second chapter after having some "paragraph & spacing" problems with it. Hopefully it'll be up soon. :-)
I think this story is awesome! You definitely have a creative mind that can see past the already done, and venture into the less tread road of the new! The writing is excellent! Keep at it, you're doing great!
Author's Response: Hi !! I'm thrilled that you enjoyed reading it. I've recently submitted the next chapter, so hopefully it'll be up soon ! :-)
I think this story is believable. Tom Riddle couldn't have been evil as a child. He more or less seemed resentful and hurt about his father leaving him. Instead of forgiveness he chose revenge and hate. I don't think he was evil all of his life and that is why I think your tale is fitting. So I give it a 10.
Author's Response: Thanks !!!!! :-D I'll hopefully be updating it soon !!!
This is a really interesting story, I'll be watching for an update. Is this one of those 'this-is-why-they-are-who-they-are-now' fics? I love those. I guess it seems a little weird to me because I've only ever seen Tom be evil, so it's very different. But I'd very much like to read more. 9/10
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it !! Yeah, it is one of those 'this-is-why-they-are-who-they-are-now' type fics. :-) I know, I never really thought of Tom being nice myself either..... lol