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Reviews For Distraction

Name: Binka Fudge (Signed) · Date: 07/02/08 17:03 · For: The Storm
What a wonderfully, disturbing and satisfying story. I'm left with quite a lot of mixed feelings. Telara seems like a great person and I'm glad Voldemort is gone, but she drew on his power, she's not going to end up turning into the next Dark Witch in later life is she? And I'm not sure she should have a relationship with Draco, maybe a brief talk to settle thier differences and leave Draco a better person. Anyway, I really enjoyed reading this fic as it made me feel so many different things, something I cherrish in a story.

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it. There were a few things I didn't flesh out like the Draco/Telera storyline. I was halfway through posting this story and 80% through with writing it when HBP came out. It took a lot of the wind out of me. I don't think Telara became a dark witch. She had too much love in her life. Thanks for taking the time to leave a review!rnrn

Name: JasperEvans (Signed) · Date: 05/13/08 12:04 · For: The Storm
I like this and please do a sequel not a one shot.

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm glad you liked it.

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm glad you liked it.

Name: Lupins moon (Signed) · Date: 06/30/07 18:48 · For: The Storm
Its a wonderfull story very well written and i loved the idea of father and daughter betewn Telara and Voldemort except i found it ended alittle too quickly. Loved the story. ~Danielle

Author's Response: I agree - HBP came out around chapter 5 of my story and pretty much blew it out of the water. So I was ready to get the story done. Thanks so much for the review! I'm glad you liked it.

Name: libbypotter (Signed) · Date: 06/10/07 8:44 · For: The Storm
I really enjoyed this but I admit I'm disappointed there was no Telara/Draco. Please can I request the one shot!

Author's Response: Hehehehe...I never did get to that did I? Maybe I'll have to do a rewrite one day and get that in there. Thanks for all of the reviews - I'm glad you liked it.

Name: libbypotter (Signed) · Date: 06/08/07 15:26 · For: The Calm Before the Storm
Sorry forgot to add thanks for the extra long chapter

Author's Response: Hey - no problem. It was originally three chapters but I was in a hurry to wrap up the story after HBP came out. Thanks!

Name: libbypotter (Signed) · Date: 06/08/07 15:25 · For: The Calm Before the Storm
Wow I thought so even if I hoped I was wrong. Poor Telara.

(I love the name Lucy for the cat, I don't know why.)

Author's Response: I know - it's terrible. : ( Thanks for the review!

Name: libbypotter (Signed) · Date: 06/08/07 8:28 · For: Dark Arts and the Potions Master
I just knew there was going to be more 'interaction' with Malfoy and Snape didn't critise her!

Author's Response: : )

Name: libbypotter (Signed) · Date: 06/07/07 18:08 · For: Classes Begin
Is it the darkness in her drawing her to Draco?

Author's Response: Hmmmm...maybe...I'll have to remember that if I ever add more to the story and actually get them together.

Name: libbypotter (Signed) · Date: 06/07/07 14:46 · For: Arrival at Hogwarts
Hmmm darkness within. Just who was/is her father!

Author's Response: Again - mwaa haa haa : )

Name: libbypotter (Signed) · Date: 06/07/07 14:42 · For: You Can Go Home Again
I can't wait to find out who Telara' s parents were, another great chapter

Author's Response: Thanks! You'll see - mwaa haa haa

Name: libbypotter (Signed) · Date: 06/07/07 13:58 · For: The Past Always Catches Up
Wow an interesting start, I can't wait to read more (but I'll have to my kids need baths & bedtime stories)

Author's Response: Thanks! I'll be looking forward to hearing your thoughts on the rest of it.

Name: CraftySlytherin (Signed) · Date: 04/07/06 11:50 · For: The Storm
AGAIN!!! Another story of yours I should have reviewed!! What's wrong with me??? What kind of reviewer am I??? *sobs hysterically* Oh, and by the way, I love the idea of the spell Telara uses on Voldemort.

Author's Response: Thanks - I'm glad you like it. I'm so glad to have a new review!

Name: HanilarLion (Signed) · Date: 12/15/05 15:50 · For: The Storm
Wow! You sure know how to end a story with a bang! I really loved the story, however, I feel I must do some nitpicking. 1. I might have missed it, but did anyone ever tell Telara the prophecy? I know she gave Voldemort a version of what happened, but is it true? When she and Harry were in the kitchen, it seemed as though someone had told her all about the prophecy. 2. I know Harry and Telara are probably of age, but it seemed that at the end they both suddenly knew how to Apparate. Okay, done picking at nits. Great story. I look forward to reading more of your work.

Author's Response: That's true - I didn't put in how she learned of the prophecy. I'll have to add that in. I guess since they are old enough to Apparate, I just skipped over the learning process. Thank you for the advice. Thanks for reading Distraction. It was my first fanfic so it's near & dear to my heart. And thanks a million for all of the reviews - I appreciate the time and effort you've put into them!

Name: HanilarLion (Signed) · Date: 12/15/05 14:02 · For: The Calm Before the Storm
I liked this chapter alot. Telara is coping remarkably well for having just learned that the evilest Dark wizard of her time is her father. I won't go into nitpicking here (because I have a terrible memory and can't remember the mistakes I spotted), but you need to proofread a little bit better. I caught a few mistakes.

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked the chapter. I'll go over it again, but my beta is an english teacher so I doubt I'll find anything she didn't. Thanks for another review!!!

Name: HanilarLion (Signed) · Date: 12/14/05 19:43 · For: Classes Begin
I liked this chapter overall, but I have a bit of nitpicking: 1. Harry and Ron don't take Muggle Studies. Hermione was the only one of the trio to take it, and she dropped it after third year. Harry and Ron would probably be going to Divination, or a free period. 2. I know this is really unspecific, but I caught a typo: you had 'though' where you should have had 'through'. Sorry for lack of specific information on placement!

Author's Response: Thanks for the sharp eye - and the continued reviews. I really appreciate it!

Name: HanilarLion (Signed) · Date: 12/14/05 19:32 · For: Arrival at Hogwarts
Loved the story, as always. I like the name Telara, too. It's such an unusual name, but I like it very much. One little mistake that you made is that Dumbledore's doorknocker is in the shape of a gryffin, not a pheonix.

Author's Response: That's right! I realized that when I was rereading and forgot to change it. Thank you for reminding me! I was lucky to run across Telara's name - it seemed to fit well. Thank you for another review!!

Name: HanilarLion (Signed) · Date: 12/14/05 19:25 · For: You Can Go Home Again
I really liked this story and can't wait to read more. I hope that we'll see 'Gred and Forge' again, as well as the Trio.

Author's Response: Thank yoU!!!

Name: HanilarLion (Signed) · Date: 12/14/05 19:20 · For: The Past Always Catches Up
I like this story a lot. I can't wait to read more.

Author's Response: Thank you! I so happy to have you as a new reviewer!!!

Name: NoxSomnium (Signed) · Date: 12/09/05 14:24 · For: The Storm
Good work. I wasn't sure if you would be able to finish it that quickly without having it feel kind of crunched, as if the beginning were stretched but then the end was all squished together, but you didn't! It was right. This sentance "She felt good and stronger than she had ever been." is all off. Try "She felt better and stronger than she ever had." or "ever had before". Do you see what I'm saying? I can't really say it properly but good is not comparative and stronger is. Something to keep in mind.

Author's Response: I'm glad the end didn't feel too rushed. I was afraid it would. I'll go through and edit that sentence tonight. Thanks so much!!!

Name: NoxSomnium (Signed) · Date: 12/09/05 13:59 · For: The Calm Before the Storm
That was the single longest mugglenet chapter I have ever seen, SWEET. I LOVE long chapters. I openly admit that the length was my favorite part. :D

Author's Response: Thank you! That was actually three chapters put together. After HBP blew my story out of canon I wanted to get it finished as soon as possible. Thanks for reviewing!!!

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