ok, so i'm new to the mugglenet fan fiction world but i just spent the whole morning reading your whole story, putting off so much work that i have to turn in for my classes...... and i LOVE it!! good job!! - Meg
Oh my. ohmy.ohmyohmy... Amazing chapter..I love ur story.....Oh my. oh my. You have a big, HUGE, talent for writing. I can't wait until the next chapter.
that was great!!!! i luv it!! plz update soon
that was great!!!! i luv it!! plz update soon
sooooooo goooooood!!!!!!!! im want more!!!!! please please please update soon!!!!
BLOODY BRILLIANT! Iloved it loved it loved it!!! Please finish it ! Update sooooon!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Oh my word
This was glorious.
Favorite part: Everyone stared after her, everyone except Remus, who had been staring fixedly at Sirius throughout the entire scene. As Sirius’s eyes returned to his homework, Remus distinctly saw a tear slip down his cheek and drop silently onto the parchment.
I actually got teary about that. I always get teary when boys get teary about love interests. I don't know why, but I do. That part was just so touching; and it really gives us an in depth look at how much Sirius really cares about Jocelyn.
Yet another amazing chapter, I am so in awe.
My word, yet another brilliant chapter; at this rate, I’m going to have run out of nice things to say that can be worded in proper English by the eight chapter and the rest of my reviews will consist of “OMG!!!!!111!!11oneone!!1 I Love tHis store-ee!” (This will never happen, by the way. A very large part of me would rather shoot myself than leave a review like that – no offence to those who do review like that, of course).
Some favourite parts:
“If you’ve just figure that out,” Remus told him, “you don’t deserve to be a Marauder.”
“You don’t want Lily and James together, do you?” she said accusingly.
“Well…” he said awkwardly.
“Sirius,” she said warningly, eyebrows raised.
“Well, no!” he admitted. “Think about it! Padfoot and Prongs will have to make way for Lily and James! No more pranks! No more raiding the kitchens! No more sneaking to Hogsmeade! It’ll be the end of an era! And they’ll be… snogging all over the place! It’ll be weird!”
And I absolutely adored the way you showed the scene with Lily and Jocelyn, and then you mirrored the same scene with the Marauders and we got to see the difference between what Jocelyn says to Lily and what Sirius says to James. Brilliant, once again.
Hello trinsy! Well, I must say, I was thoroughly captivated by this first chapter and I thought you did a wonderful job. The first line snagged me in like a fish on a triple barbed hook and carried me through to find a wonderfully imaginative character.
I do have one teensy criticism, because I believe in constructive criticism, and that is that I noticed you make Sirius say “Oi” a lot in this chapter, and it gets repetitive. That’s all I have to complain about. Tiny, isn’t it?
Also, I noticed that you’ve had a couple flamers reviewing and I thought you should know that flamers aren’t accepted on MNFF and if you have any more you should report them straight away to a Moderator. Nobody likes getting flamer reviews, so why not stop him or her before they have a chance to hurt somebody else?
Anyways, I will be sure to read the rest of your chapters when I have a chance and leave reviews for you. This is an amazing story, don’t give up on it please! I’m going to add it to my favorites
you have an amazing writing style.! i'm so jealous of your writing abilities. D: awww. poor sirius and jocelyn. this chapter was the best by far. make more soon because i'm dying to know more. ps. awesome chapter again.
What a brilliant new chapter! The emotions in this were very real, and it was heart-wrenching to read. I hope they do work it out eventually! You write extremely well. Well done. 10/10!
Okay. I've waited until the last chapter to say this. You are a fanTASTIC writer. This, truely, is one of the BEST fan fiction stories I have ever read. You have portrayed the characters so superbly that you could honestly think that J.K. Rowling has written this. Just... Wow. WOW. That sums it all up. Update soon, please, for the sake of my SANITY. Rating? Oh, more than one hundred out of ten.
THAT WAS FABULOUS!!! sooo good post soon!
What a great chapter!!! I loved the interaction between Sirius and Jocelyn!! Gosh, he really does love her, doesn't he? Awww, that's so sad!! Poor Sirius!! Please update soon!!!! Please??? 10/10
That... Was... Incredible! Please update. The rift between Sirius and Jocelyn is... poignantly perfectly heartbreaking. I hope that something is resolved between the two of them. What can I say, I'm a hopeless romantic type. Please, update! -baconandlettuceandtomato
That was sooooo heart wrenching. It was your best chapter yet, even though I hated what obviously had to happen. Keep updating. You really did a great job with this whole story. 1,000/1,000
I LOVE THIS STORY! Its my favorite story on Mugglenet. Please hurry with the next chapter because Sirius and Jocelyn need to be together! Its a great chapter though. Please finish it!
Noooo!! Why must everything go wrong for them?=( Poor, poor Sirius!! It's so sad because they know they love each other but they can't do anything about it. Ahh, I need an update soon because I think I will go insane if I don't!! I loooove this story! Good job! 10/10
*whimpers* Oh. Poor Sirius. That was a good chapter. But it really makes me want to hug Sirius, then slap him silly, and then hug him again! grr. good job!
Aw, I wish Jocelyn'd give Sirius another chance! Come on, he's such a nice guy--except for that whole revenge thing.