Reviews For Canis Majoris
Reviewer: AILily
Date: 07/10/06 0:54
Chapter: The Greatest Crime

This is getting really sweet.

Reviewer: Jordez
Date: 06/11/06 4:59
Chapter: Beautiful

Ok starting to read now. Looking forward to it!!!

Reviewer: Jordez
Date: 06/11/06 4:49
Chapter: Jocelyn's Predicament

Starting it, now I havn't started reading it yet because Dad doesn't let me on the net for too long i copy it all then read it so i will reveiw at the end.

Jordez

Reviewer: jamesnlilyforever
Date: 06/08/06 21:33
Chapter: Jocelyn's Predicament

Okay, this review has nothing to do with the actual story because I already reviewed for that. I just want to compliment you on the awesome blend that you made for this story. It looks really nice!! I only wish I could do that as well as you. =)
P.S.
I wish you would continue this story!

Author's Response: Thanks, but I didn't make it. My very talented sister did! (I wish I could do it too) =D And your wish will almost certainly be gratified! I'm intending to make this into a series, as soon as I'm out of school (one more week! =D)

Reviewer: MissPriss86
Date: 06/01/06 22:10
Chapter: Beautiful

wow... its so.... heart-wrentching. is it over? it cant be over... -Missi-

Reviewer: MissPriss86
Date: 06/01/06 22:10
Chapter: Beautiful

wow... its so.... heart-wrentching. is it over? it cant be over... -Missi-

Reviewer: Crazy Rat
Date: 05/23/06 21:05
Chapter: Beautiful

Yay!!!!!!!! I understand about the school thing. (It's like they want to pile on as much stuff as they can while they've still got you captive)

Reviewer: Crazy Rat
Date: 05/23/06 17:19
Chapter: Beautiful

Really? wow. sorry if i was was wacked. (my brain's fried that lte at night) so are you going to write more about Sirius and ---I can't spell her name? (Please do!!!!)

Author's Response: yes, but not until school gets out ;)

Reviewer: Crazy Rat
Date: 05/22/06 15:54
Chapter: Beautiful

I was so sad when I saw how it ended. i've been following it for a while and I really expected them to end up together. Oh well, it was really well written.
p.s. you probably don't remeber me, but i'm that crazy girl who reviewed (or whatever you call it) on your live journal. (you told me about "que".

Author's Response: Thanks! And I totally remember you! :D

Reviewer: hpgirlbizarre
Date: 05/06/06 14:55
Chapter: Beautiful

r u crazy! u dont end a story with sirius and jocelyn especially like that! wat happens to them do they get 2gether r u that crazy!?!?! dont answer that but it was a great story but u cant end a story un answerd unless u make a sequel when they come bak!

Reviewer: rita_skeeter
Date: 04/22/06 17:06
Chapter: Beautiful

I've really enjoyed this - that was such a beautiful, bittersweet ending. The way you manipulated the words was magnificent. Well done on a fantastic story.

Reviewer: callmehermione
Date: 04/20/06 23:22
Chapter: Beautiful

Sirius watched her go, feeling that the great pain in his chest had lessened slightly. Dear Lily. I'm going to miss everyone! And Hogwarts. This chapter is so poignantly written, it makes the READER miss Hogwarts!


“Isn’t she beautiful?” James breathed.

Sirius was gazing at Jocelyn nestled under Hector’s arm.

“Yes,” he whispered. “Yes, she is.”



Did you MEAN to make us cry? *sighs from the unrequietedness*


Wow, so you knew this was the first fanfiction I read... EVER. Back in chapter eight or something! Isn't that wild? Thank you! For all of it!

Reviewer: callmehermione
Date: 04/20/06 23:06
Chapter: You and Me

Poor, dear Sirius! I feel terrible for him. And he has to lose Jocelyn again. It's so sad. This was an excellent chapter! I loved that Jocelyn and Sirius finally got to talk things through! Even though the ending was sad. Excellent writing, and one more chapter!

Reviewer: callmehermione
Date: 04/20/06 21:14
Chapter: The Summary

Wait.. so can we or can we not tell when Bellatrix is smiling? It describes the movements of her mouth, but she is wearing a mask.


“Why did you tell your master” — he laid careful emphasis on the words — “I was the greatest threat to his power? You know it’s a lie!” This was an amazing twist! Voldemort got it from Bella, all along.


Whew, that was a near escape! Can't wait to read the rest!

Reviewer: callmehermione
Date: 04/20/06 20:55
Chapter: The Legend

i.e. writing Sirius’s instead of Sirius’ {incidentally, I have been writing in English for well over a decade, and while I am certainly not an English major, I am well aware that both are correct; however, I have always felt that the former sounds much better, and prefer to use it; besides which, the latter is usually only used for historical/mythological figures [i.e. Achilles]} First, I commend you for clarifying this! Most people don't realise that saying "s's" is actually correct. Thank you for pointing that out, and for making the extra grammar effort.


Goodness! Remus seems quite angry here. “Jocelyn’s dead, all right?” he snarled. “Jocelyn’s dead, Sirius is dead, and yes, maybe it is our fault, maybe it’s my fault, but unless you have a time-turner there’s absolutely nothing we can do to change things, so either take James’s advice and shut up, or leave!” The little touch of OOC-ness shows the reader how different losing our friends can make us.


The secret chamber was a brilliant invention! Something only the Blacks would know--excellent.


Now for the legend...

Reviewer: callmehermione
Date: 04/19/06 14:27
Chapter: Of Trust and Promises

Jocelyn’s pace quickened. There was still time to keep that particular promise. Poor Jocelyn! You've really accentuated her dilemma well. She's feeling guily about ever letting Sirius go.


Its sad that Sirius keeps getting angry with Jocelyn to try and protect her. That's a brilliant way to portray Sirius, though! It makes the reader feel even sadder for Jocelyn. Sirius can't seem to get past his worry to understand that Jocelyn isn't going to let him run away on his own.


Then, as they argue, Jocelyn questions that Sirius actually cares for her while Sirius, probably, is asking the same question. The way you stay open to everyone's POV is very interesting.


He saw everything in that look: her hurt, her confusion, her pain… but mostly, her rejection. This sentence is so sad! I just have one little picky suggestion. It makes it sound like it's Jocelyn that's doing the rejecting, is all...


What a powerful chapter! Sirius and Jocelyn just seem to keep going in circles with their relationship. It makes it even sadder that we know how it ends! Great job, and I can't wait for more!

Author's Response: Thanks! About the sentence where you say "It makes it sound like it's Jocelyn that's doing the rejecting": that's intentional, because Jocelyn is doing the rejecting. Thanks again!


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Reviewer: lillede
Date: 04/15/06 14:11
Chapter: Beautiful

so they don't get together???? no!!!! that's awful!!! i hate hector!!!! why'd you have to do that???? i mean, i guess i understand... can't wait to read the sequel... they better get together in this 1 though. loved your story though. you have an amazing writing style... kept me itching to read the whole thing. excellent, simply superb

Reviewer: dreaming
Date: 04/14/06 18:33
Chapter: Beautiful

OMG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! i've been reading this for so long, i can't belive it's over!!! such an unexpected ending! i love it!!!! 10/10

Reviewer: MissPriss86
Date: 04/11/06 23:44
Chapter: Beautiful

its over already?!?!?! now im definately going to have to read your one shot. by the way, great way to close the story. that was enought to make anyone say awww! but i was pretty upset that they didnt get together...well, ill just have to read your oneshot! -Marissa-

Reviewer: TeenageWitch_1992
Date: 04/11/06 22:10
Chapter: Beautiful

That was one of the best stories I've read on fanfiction!!!!!!! There has to be a sequel! IT can't be done already!!!!! REALLY GOOD STORY!!!!!!!!

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