oh you must update
This was my first time ever reading a D/G fic, and I have to say that this prologue threw me off a little bit. I really liked the mystery of it all, but it got to a point half way through where I just couldn't figure it out. After thinking for a little bit, I finally understood, but for next time I suggest making it a little clearer. There were some puncuation erros, especially with puncuation in quoation marks. I suggest this thread in the beta forums http://www.fanfiction.mugglenet.com/forums/viewtopic.php?t=3684 written by Alexis Taylor. It's very helpful on that subject. You should also remember that only one person should speak in a paragraph; even when two do speak in one paragraph, it's extremely rare. I really liked the new idea of Platform 8 2/4, but I suggest changing it to Platform 8 1/2 because it's the same thing, except a little less confusing. I really enjoyed your writing style. It's complicated and simple at the same time. Great story! ~Eponine
I have to admit, you caught me off guard with that prologue there. I didn't expect those two characters to be in it and i cannot wait to find out who trhey are. I definately got lost wiht some of the names in the middle, (Daphne and Matthew), but I'm sure I'll understand it all later on
Great plot, it brought tears to my eyes. *10*
I love it so far. Do write more. A forbidden love, makes it all the more interesting to read!
Amazing! Simply incredulous. I love the way this story is turning out. Write more soon!
young love.. so strong! So are these two ancestors of Ginny and Draco? or descendants... tho she wouldn't be a Weasley then... you've got my attention now!
i like it, very diffrent. ahhh young love, mean parents... what doesn't this story have?