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Reviewer: Ashlynne
Date: 07/12/10 4:06
Chapter: Prologue: Heartbreak

oh you must update

Reviewer: Eponine
Date: 06/20/05 20:47
Chapter: Prologue: Heartbreak

This was my first time ever reading a D/G fic, and I have to say that this prologue threw me off a little bit. I really liked the mystery of it all, but it got to a point half way through where I just couldn't figure it out. After thinking for a little bit, I finally understood, but for next time I suggest making it a little clearer. There were some puncuation erros, especially with puncuation in quoation marks. I suggest this thread in the beta forums http://www.fanfiction.mugglenet.com/forums/viewtopic.php?t=3684 written by Alexis Taylor. It's very helpful on that subject. You should also remember that only one person should speak in a paragraph; even when two do speak in one paragraph, it's extremely rare. I really liked the new idea of Platform 8 2/4, but I suggest changing it to Platform 8 1/2 because it's the same thing, except a little less confusing. I really enjoyed your writing style. It's complicated and simple at the same time. Great story! ~Eponine

Reviewer: starlettem1
Date: 06/11/05 14:26
Chapter: Prologue: Heartbreak

I have to admit, you caught me off guard with that prologue there. I didn't expect those two characters to be in it and i cannot wait to find out who trhey are. I definately got lost wiht some of the names in the middle, (Daphne and Matthew), but I'm sure I'll understand it all later on

Reviewer: TiffanyRuth
Date: 05/10/05 16:04
Chapter: Prologue: Heartbreak

Great plot, it brought tears to my eyes. *10*

Reviewer: SorcressSkye
Date: 05/09/05 20:37
Chapter: Prologue: Heartbreak

I love it so far. Do write more. A forbidden love, makes it all the more interesting to read!

Reviewer: Miss_moony
Date: 05/02/05 17:15
Chapter: Prologue: Heartbreak

Amazing! Simply incredulous. I love the way this story is turning out. Write more soon!

Reviewer: Kerian
Date: 04/30/05 18:32
Chapter: Prologue: Heartbreak

young love.. so strong! So are these two ancestors of Ginny and Draco? or descendants... tho she wouldn't be a Weasley then... you've got my attention now!

Reviewer: paintball chick407
Date: 04/29/05 21:34
Chapter: Prologue: Heartbreak

i like it, very diffrent. ahhh young love, mean parents... what doesn't this story have?

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