i like the first chapter...i really do..hope dthe other chapters would be breathtaking...
She will never think that among those most trusted beings surrounding her uncle is one waiting for my order to attack.”
how could that be its so evil to happen taht way he doesnt look evil at all hes all good and will change please dont make him voldemorts follower
Lily had no idea that the weight on her heart would only get heavier until one fateful night in the Gryffindor Common Room in their Seventh Year. Then and only then would Lily reveal anything about that weight.
whats that suppposed to mean it gives me goosebumbs thinkking about what might happen !!
i love the end of this chapter riley is excatly what the kids need right now i love them all
i especailly adore your writing its amazing specatcular actually
i hope you update soon enough
maybe make the story show the marauders and Lily more because this story is starting to get boring
I love this story soo much!!!! You create an entirely separate world really successfully.
This lets out all of the anger the reader has built up with such bitter tension. Wow! You’re an amazing writer!!!
Just began reading this book, and I must say the first chapter has got me hooked! Great job on this!
This is an amazing start to a story. I really loved how you gave us every character’s thoughts instead of just focusing on one. It seemed shaky at spots, but overall the good definitely out weighed the bad. This is a great start!
As much as I hate trials and courts - you have done a great job with this! It hurts to read parts of this - but it is so true to life....
Being 12 and totally in charge is rough - but Jesse is doing admirably. Keep it up!
Dang it - there you go again - giving a REALLY good cliffie. The complete and thorough trial description is so full - it feels real.... let me know if you need anything!
This fic was to good to wait for updates- so went to fanfic for more.Love it . love it love it
It's been so long! Why isn't there a new chapter?
Author's Response: I've got chapter 13 over at fanfiction.net. I was trying to publish it here but ran into some difficulties. As to why it's taking so long - I've been running into some real life difficulties along with some major computer issues. But if all goes well in the next week or two (God willing), I should have chapter 14 out in the next week or two.
this story is brilliant and i love it. it is the best fic i have ever read. 10/10
Just caught up, its been awhile since I've been on here. I Love this story still, definetly one of my favorites. When I first red this story i dedicated my whole day too sit on the computer and read it. I'd do it all again if I still had the chance=) Keep up the great work!
This fic is so amazing, please put the next chappie up soon. When it's accepted can u email me at firstname.lastname@example.org. Thanks, I think you're an amazing author!
groovy. absoloutly groovy. where can i read the rest of it, cos it hasnt updated on this site 4 a while now. im soz, im so impatiant, must o wot happens,...., :P
Author's Response: I had to put chapter 13 on pause for a bit because of finals. I'm going to try to finish editing it today though (it's got like three more pages to edit of a 44 page chapter). After that, it goes to beta then you guys. Sorry that it's going to be a bit late :(
Sorry about not reviewing here, I've been following your story at the other fanfiction boards. Its progressing beautifully and I truly love it!
Author's Response: No problem. It gets updated at fanfiction.net before anywhere else because that's usually the quickest. I'm glad that you still love it. :)
Wow! great suspense! I have only just worked out how to review(I know, stupid,) but i've been reading this story for a while. Keep Going! Apart from some dodgy facts(sirius' family etc) it is really good, and u hav developed ur characters really well. Keep writing please!! :):):):):):):):):)
Author's Response: It's not stupid that it took you a bit to figure it out. I bet it took me longer when I first started on reviewing (and I have to learn it again for new sites! LOL). Thanks for the review. I'm glad you're enjoying the story, despite the fact that some of my facts don't keep with J.K. Rowling's awesome stuff. I created most of this story after only reading two books. I didn't publish it until later and so was able to encorporate a lot of the new facts as I read through two more books. I only include many of the facts from Book 5 but not all of them because, in the course of my fan fiction, I won't include the events of Book 5 as they are. My fan fiction will fit better into the universe that way. Again, thank you for the review. I do try otherwise to keep religiously with the facts (other than the few I change). I hope you continue to enjoy it. I love writing it, so it's fun to share :)
I really enjoyed reading this chapter.Especially when the Lucius got cursed that was classic. Good work and keep it coming.
Author's Response: Glad you liked it :)
Woo-Hoo! Its up its up its up!! I loved getting some more background on Gary! And now Jessica and Severus are talking again and she has hopefully told him her story. I still love the way Jess and Casey interact! And it amuses me completely the way all of the teachers at Hogwarts were spending their time talking about those two kids! Great great chapter and I cant wait to read the next!
Author's Response: Woo-Hoo! I'm glad you liked it. There will be three more parts coming up, but it will take awhile. Yes, Jessica told Severus her story, the whole story of Christmas Day, which is more than she will tell other people.