So whose side is Rampton on anyway?!?!?! He's too evil to be on the good side. For the first time ever, I am pitying Snape, and pity for characters does not come easily from me. It was definitely excellently written
Oh - My - Gosh! Snape actually, truly loves her! I'm in complete shock! And it was so beautiful. Maeve lashed out at her love when she was expected to fall trembling to the ground, just another brilliant twist that, once it's done, makes me wonder: How could I have ever expected anything else? I have never, ever, thought I could actually like Snape, let alone love him, and today I do. This story has come so far from "Flight," it's amzing. I disliked Snape so much then! But I have to remember that your Snape has developed in a way Jo's may not, and I'll have a hard time hating him when he does something else despicable in HBP. :-) I also agree with Beney, this is an experience like reading a best-selling novel. Though here, we have to wait longer than we would like to turn the next page and reach the next chapter. I am completely intrigued by Maeve's necklace now. It stopped her from hurting Snape more, though she practically mutilated him in her anger and pain. I also loved her yearning for her brother, which also seemed surprisingly ironic considering how Remus feels about her. I will confine in you, and everyone that reads your reviews of course, that I was in a rather bad traffic accident on Good Friday. In fact I may have scars from when the SUV I was iriding in rolled over. And I was nearly brought to tears for the first time since the accident when I read Maeve's reaction to Dumbledore's revelation. Her happiness was shattered and she could not see how she could go on. The entire passage was very similar to how I feel about the accident that could have killed me and my parents, while it would have left my brother alone. I'm in awe at your skill as a writer and how your descriptions of pain can bridge tremendous gaps of emotion and circumstance to embody a sort of pain everyone can somehow relate to. I thank you for that. Perfection. 10.
What a brilliant, moving chapter! Poor Maeve, nothing works out for her, but she should remember her father's advice. Roderick is as confusing as ever, and Dumbledore is worryingly feeble. Your story keeps moving and I can't wait for next chapter!
I really love this chapter! You managed to make me cry, which is a very rare occasion! I never really took much to Snape in the books (as I tend to see in black and white as Harry and Snape do), but you have managed to make me feel compassion and pity towards him. All I can do is thank you for giving all of us the pleasure of reading this story.
Harry! Naughty, naughty boy! He should know better than to pinch magical items that don't belong to him! His almost maniacal zeal to help Remus is clouding his judgement, and I hope he and Hermione don't do anything foolish. I about fell off my couch with the re-appearance of Roderick Rampton. What a flamboyant and colourful character! He always makes me smile. His background story was also quite amusing. I'm curious about the pranks and how they relate to the coming danger that surrounds Maeve. Your story is murder on my fingernails, love!
WHEW!!! Thank goodness Arthur is alright...well, relatively alright! You had me very frightened last chapter, but much relieved in this one. It was nice to see Maeve getting some of the comforts of home, especially the portrait of her mother. I also like that she now has Liam. He will be a great sounding board now that Remus is away. I thought you crafted the suspense expertly in this chapter. Your descriptions of Bellatrix through Niall's eyes are brilliant and spot-on. I can't wait to see what's become of Maeve's book. That, to me, is more nervewracking than wondering what will become of Arthur!
Wonderful!!! I was so happy to see that you updated so quickly. Once again, you've written Snape perfectly. I love the way he witheringly revealed the Drooble's list and how he took the news of his father: "Severus hadn’t allowed Dumbledore’s words to reach anywhere important inside him yet." It was such a telling contrast between Snape and Maeve as to how they deal with their emotions. But then when Snape did let his emotions out.... "'SPEAK TO ME!' he shouted, shattering the silence into a million screaming fragments of love." Wow! That was an incredibly powerful display of his passion. I also love how you've fleshed out Filch, even though he is a repugnant little man. And poor Dumbledore, losing his edge. That made me sad. He's always the one you can count on, and now his reliability is fading. I liked Bella sizing up Edward's importance and then deciding to brush past him. That was a perfect depiction of the way she thinks. I also liked Lucius wanting to tell her "that he wouldn’t have to see her haggard face with [the mask] on." LOL! And Mave... poor, poor Maeve goes through so much! I wanted to cry when she asked for Remus. She was so sad and helpless, and I'm glad she still loves Remus as a brother. I really loved the line "looking out across the water had become too painful in its simplicity." That was beautiful. There were a few typos, which I've listed. I hope it's not obnoxious to list them all out, but I don't want typos to intefere with your story. Drooble’s best = Drooble's Best, Of it will be nothing = Or it will be nothing, leaving in her hunched = leaving her hunched, Voldemort says irregardless!!!, the idea if the warmth = the idea of the warmth, very gave mistake = very grave mistake, that is my question = That is my question, sent him crashing to floor = sent him crashing to the floor, “Where you attacked?” = "Were you attacked?" Looks like you might have been in a hurry. :) So in closing, since I can't end on silly typos, great story! Great characters! Great lines! Great humor! Great mysteries! And though I've resigned myself to the fact that Maeve and Snape belong together, please bring Remus back soon. I miss him, and so does Maeve. :)
you have a great story in here. its like reading a real novel and not just a fanfiction at all.you developed your charters well and your main char remined me of a female and older harry potter. im not reaaly a snape fan so it kinda hard to imagine him and maeve kissing(eww). just cant w8 for the next chapter. (btw it took me almost 5 hours to read all your chapters and my eyes is kinda blurry now.)
Author's Response: Thanks for the review Beney! Wow! That was a marathon reading session and thanks for sticking with it. Rest those eyes! Snape's grown on me throughout this fic...I have to picture Mr Rickman rather than canon though when I write any smooching!
Okay, Im going to rush through a couple of crits, because if I don't start with them, I 'll never get to them. I feel like Lucius and Voldemort are out of character. The scene in the caverns made Voldy seem like some villain out of an old Batman cartoon. And I don't think Lucius is so bumbling. Ambitious, yes but not stupid.
Okay, that's over with. Idon't know where to begin. Snape's father? My heart dropped out of my cheast when I read that. Wow. And Dumbledore's faults. While the adults hold him in high regard, they are adults, not children. I think you have masterfully shown us the Headmaster through an adult perspective. That he makes mistakes too, and misjudges... wow.The duel with Lucius was exciting and very well done. We still don't know about Roderick. I hope he's on their side of the fence when it's all said and done. And Severus admitted he loved her, I gasped and waited for her to crumble and she didn't, she lashed out. It was perfect, absolutely perfect. Snape, as you portray him, is absolutely beautiful. i have fallen completely in love with him... and would happily become a bat on the wall!I get so caught up in your characters, you've truly made them your own, that I just lose track of everything else. I don't know how you mangae it, but you hook me every time and the world around me dissolves until I'm in the one you've created. Masterful writing. Beautiful, haunting and tense. Thank-you.
Author's Response: Voldemort is a truly evil creature, but I like to think he's not without his comical side...well, what we would consider comical. he's a pompous swine with a tendency to let others do his dirty work. Don't worry though...he will emerge at his evil best later. And Lucius...I hate Lucius that I have such a hard time writing him in a detached manner! Bear with me....I needed the baddies for light relief in this chapter...everything els got so stressful! I've fallen in love with Snape too...I didn't intend too quite so much but I love his character and at the moment he is on fire in this story...not literally!! And thank you for your constant support...without my two bats where would I be???
how? that is all i ask! how? chapter after chapter, time after time you enthrall me! i cant quit reading, and i cant function without a new post so please do so soon!!!! 10
Author's Response: By slaving over a hot keyboard and concentrating very hard! LOL It will be at least wednesday before you get an update, sorry...Easter and all that! Thanks for another review, you have been one of my most loyaly reviwers and it's great to have your support.
WELL WHERE DO I START..................THERE IS NOTHING ELSE TO SAY OTHER THAN BRILLIANT, I AM SPEACHLESS!!!!10
Awesome chapter! I like how Snape acted in this, it was perfect. 10!
Author's Response: Thanks, Lily
In my opinion, your story has only got one single fault - the chapters are too long for my time! :) No, don't get me wrong, I really do love them, the longer the better - I just wish I had more time. Now, there is something I'm wondering about. Percy seems to be on good foot with Dumbledore, but why would Dumbledore take Percy "under his wings" if he was still such a git about his family? Dumbledore is, after all, a close friend of the Weasleys... I suppose the story will give me an answer, in good time. Until then, I'd like to remove my hat (although I'm not wearing one) and bowe in a very Robin Hood-like way to salute your story. It's very cool indeed! ;) /Fantasium
Author's Response: You will have to wait for the explanation for Percy's presence. It may even not be explained in this story but in its sequel....I can hear you all groaning at the prospect of another monster fic! LOL. On the plus side percy will be glad to be written into the background a little at this point because I was going to kill him. he's been spared for now!
Since I don't trust you to ever post, I'll review here. *sighs* That was incredible Maeve. So romantic and not at all smutty. Might even be postable on MNff. it was everything I wanted it to be, but couldn't imagine. So There. Thhhppppt!
Author's Response: Well it will be posted, but you already know that! I'll be editing it tuesday... when hubby is safely out of the way. And I won't go to Playwitch...not even once!!!
I only review so seldom because I don't want to repeat myself all the time. I am definitely, definitely still reading your story and still thoroughly enjoying it. I don't really have anything new to say, but what the heck: I really like your writing style, you have an ability to create very vivid descriptions of something in just a few words. You keep all the characters in... well... character which is really remarkable because most of Rowling's characters are very complex and already very "established". And I have to agree with everyone else: GO NEVILLE! It's a new thing to see him being so headstrong and standing up to Snape (even a Snape without his grandmother's clothes!), but it's not unnatural at all because Rowling herself has been hinting at such a development. I haven't really made up my mind apropos of Rodrick.. I mean, I have never really liked him (and after him slandering Maeve in his argument with Snape I definitely dislike the guy!), but he's probably not all that bad - just not strong enough to break with everything his father was. The whole chewing gum affair is very well thought out. And I just love to hate Bellatrix! And it serves Lucius right to live so miserably! Ok, maybe I should stop myself rambling! I have said it before and will again: great, great story! I often praise Rowling because she possesses the (in my opinion) rare combination to be able to write wonderfully AND have a great imagination. Apparently, you do too!
Author's Response: I don't mind ou not reviewing all the time if this is the sort of review you leave when you do! :-) Thank you so much... I hated Roderick too when he had a go at Maeve but I wonder...did he really mean it? He's a strange one that's for sure! I am going to be completely mean to lucius....he deserves it!! I look forward eagerly to your next review...whenever it comes. :-)
It's a lovely, sunny day down in Hampshire, but am I outside with my dog friends? No, I'm glued to the pc screen, reading. :) I must apologise for not reviewing again until now - I've enjoyed every chapter so much, it's almost unbelievable how good your story is - never a dull moment, but at the same time it doesn't stress me and nothing happens without a reason. There is no perticular reason I chose to review this chapter, I keep going over the whole story in my head (and the dogs throw me odd looks when I glance over and suddenly smile). I wonder what's going to happen with Maeve romantically, although that's not so important. I think about that man she met on the train, when he is going to re-appear. And I clench my fists when I think of Niall (luckily the cheysuli one was nicer...), what a horrible man you've made up - I hope he is made up? I suspect I will see Alice sooner or later in your story and I wonder what you will do to her? She's not much use in her current state, but will she "be back" or will her son take her place? And most importantly, at the moment, I cross my fingers and wish that Arthur isn't dead - because you actually didn't say so, did you? But on the other hand, why would Molly cry so badly again if not? Oh, this is no good, I must continue reading. All the best, /Anna
Author's Response: Niall is more or less made up....but I've known people with some of his traits. I am undecided about Alice at the moment. She's playing her part...albeit a non-speaking one and Neville is getting involved with the story more and more. As for Maeve and romance...well all I will say is it's not going to be an easy ride for her. I am really glad you are enjoying the story so much because it gives me so much pleaseure to write it.
It's a pathetic reveiw, but...AWESOME CHAPPIE! lol im such a dork. 10!
Author's Response: Thank you!
So what happens next? That was a cliffhanger to end all cliffhangers! We demand more.
Harry's scar hurting, Severus' brand burning... so expertly written and of course it has me on the edge of my chair. I loved the bubblegum recipe. Seems that the magical world is more closely linked to the Muggle one than ever if wizards put equally disgusting stuff into the things children eat. You continually out do yourself with each new chapter and this is no exception. I tend to steer clear of such long chaptered fics, not because I don't have the attention span, but because their authors don't... yours is the exception. You can make this as long as you like and I will still be sad when it ends.
Author's Response: You might regret saying that when we hit chapter 50!!LOL i loved the idea of making that gum contain horrible things. It's a really hot topic at the moment and it's probably as well Hernione doesn't know about it or she would be off on a crusade!
Well written. I like especially how you establish setting, i.e. "rain lashed against the castle with all the ferocity of an angered god..." Very descriptive. I also like how you've managed to keep everyone in character--I don't know that I've seen anyone manage Harry's reaction to Ron and Hermione so well.
Author's Response: Ooh, thank you. I'm glad you think I've got it right...I find the three of them so difficult to get right, especially on such an uncharted issue.