Reviews For A Complete Life
Reviewer: gryffindork_2006
Date: 06/09/06 18:59
Chapter: A Complete Life

I LOVED IT!!!! you should soooooo do more stories

Reviewer: fluffahoy
Date: 04/25/06 4:52
Chapter: A Complete Life

haha! Beautiful...*sniff sniff*, but can help but think the baby in her stomach was going to like, change the world as they knew it...

Reviewer: gategirl324
Date: 12/30/05 14:05
Chapter: A Complete Life

like! like! like! like! i like. :) sorry, but I LIKE!!!!!!!!

Reviewer: Quiditch fan
Date: 11/08/05 6:38
Chapter: A Complete Life

this was such a cute story!!!! i loved it. 100/10 cause that was really well written and it was just really good.

Author's Response: Thank you for the 100. Highest score I have gotten I believe.

Reviewer: PheonixAnimagus
Date: 11/04/05 22:11
Chapter: A Complete Life

that was cute. i normally love one shots, they can be so simple and deliver a very powerful blow. I liked this, but I thought it was kind of... lacking. somewhere. maybe the characters were a bit "flat" as my English teacher would say. But, I think it was more the topic than your writing style. I was in the mood for a one-shot, this was the first I saw, so I clicked on it... and here we are. I don't know... Lily finding out she's prgnant is original, but not too much action. 7/10. good job! (plz r/r my lily/james, Last Chance! I definately accept harsh criticism, I love it cuz it makes me a better writer. I'm not trying to be mean with yours!!!!!) ~luv, mary kate~

Author's Response: Hmmm... I understand what you are saying, that there is no action, but it's morning sickness. It's in the early morning. Not quite sure how you could apply action. Well, thanks for the review. :)
Grrr, just got Avada-Kedavra'd. What's going on?


Author's Response: Hmmm... I understand what you are saying, that there is no action, but it's morning sickness. It's in the early morning. Not quite sure how you could apply action. Well, thanks for the review. :)
Grrr, just got Avada-Kedavra'd. What's going on?

Reviewer: gottolovesirius
Date: 11/02/05 14:00
Chapter: A Complete Life

I love this story! I had no problems with it I think its so perfect. Did you have to make it a one shot * sigh* I would love to read more. Anyway thanks for making me smile

Author's Response: Your welcome. Thank you for reading my story! And yea, that's all. A short and sweet stories are the way to go sometimes. Thanks for the review. :D

Reviewer: gottolovesirius
Date: 11/02/05 14:00
Chapter: A Complete Life

I love this story! I had no problems with it I think its so perfect. Did you have to make it a one shot * sigh* I would love to read more. Anyway thanks for making me smile

Reviewer: Neli P
Date: 10/28/05 13:53
Chapter: A Complete Life

Excellent one-shot :) Your first fan-fic, really? Wow! I especially liked the "pregnancy test incantation", very creative ;) Write more, OK?

Author's Response: no, not my first fan-fic. Thank you, that was a fun part to write. :)

Reviewer: bluelady15
Date: 10/26/05 3:14
Chapter: A Complete Life

Your first try, eh? 'Tis nice... beautiful really.!!!^_^ you definitely deserve a 10!!!! It's really,really beautiful!!!! that story made me smile...!! hehehe... keep up the good work! kudos!!!!!

Author's Response: Yep, my first try on an one-shot! Thanks for the 10 and the kudos! :)

Reviewer: AlexisTaylor
Date: 08/28/05 13:52
Chapter: A Complete Life

I remembered coming across this story quite some time ago, and only now got around to reviewing. Now, before I forget, I’ll get into some things that seemed a bit off. Then I’ll get to the good stuff.

”The only reason she was having milk was because of her mother. She had called her mother earlier in the day, telling her mother of her odd night sickness. Even though her mother had sound concerned, she also seemed a little excited but wouldn’t explain why.”

There, ‘mother’ was repeated four times. I thought perhaps some descriptives or pronouns could take the place of some of them. “ …telling the older women of her…” for example.

”Though the milk had help, which surprised Lily…”

You will probably want to change that ‘help’ to ‘helped’.

Normally, I’m not keen on rather light, fluffy romances. Some lines in this fiction reminded me of the others, but given the context, they were perfectly in character. I love that you didn’t make Lily entirely comfortable with the thought of pregnancy right away. It’s very realistic that she would be afraid. I think if you went a little deeper into why she is afraid, you could really bring the whole story into the context of the war. Connecting it to ‘current events’ is what really helps tie a story together. That’s an option if you wished to expand.

I also enjoyed how you had James out late despite Lily’s illness. It’s a realistic way to look at responsibility in the adult world. Also, James staying home when he merely thought her sick would be a bit too romantic for him.

I also like how you’ve made him as arrogant as ever…”Your handsome husband…” but he’s a more likeable kind of guy. Their banter and the way they associate with each other is exactly as it should be with newlyweds. You seem to have a solid idea of how their personalities work.

I think you’ve got a lovely one shot written here. It’s perfect for someone who just wants something warm for the belly.



Author's Response: :tears spring to eyes: Omg, I have been waiting patiently for a review like this! Thank you so much!
Hmm, I didn't realize I used so much 'mother's'. Heh. Thanks for pointing that out. Guess I should fix it up now.
Mega thanks for the mega review!


Author's Response: Comments like these warm my belly. :)

Reviewer: 9fawkes9
Date: 08/23/05 22:37
Chapter: A Complete Life

i was just looking for a one-shot and i found yours. i was wondering when i would finally find one where it's when lily finds out she's pregnant. thanx for reading my mind!

Author's Response: Ah, I always knew I was a seer. ;)
Wow, I'm still getting review? But-but it's so far away! Ha ha! Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: fungygrey
Date: 07/29/05 0:23
Chapter: A Complete Life

Wow! This is the most sweet story I've found here! ^^ Nice! You have a 10!

Reviewer: QuandoGirl
Date: 06/25/05 0:22
Chapter: A Complete Life

k one question, how can you make the world a better place? anyway that was a good chapter... review sssssooooonnnnn I beg of you ... I give this 101000101010111010100101001... anyway, later dude

Reviewer: HPluvr46
Date: 06/17/05 20:01
Chapter: A Complete Life

I loved it. It was funny how Harry threw a tantrum in her stomach. I really liked it. Thanks for the great story.

Reviewer: pheonixtear
Date: 05/15/05 13:27
Chapter: A Complete Life

it was so sweeet! i loved it.

Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: i love sirius black
Date: 05/07/05 16:06
Chapter: A Complete Life

i love this story.. definately a 10!! i love stories like this!!!!!!!!! its so cute.. i was smiling the entire time i was reading it!!! i love it so much!! youre an excellent writer!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! Oh, and wonderful use of the exclamation points! J/k. I love them. :)

Reviewer: Kerian
Date: 05/05/05 17:45
Chapter: A Complete Life

I thought it was very cute! I liked the note that James sent to Lily and his reaction to the news. Minor Note- I found a few times where you wrote in present tense even though the story was in past tense, not a big deal but just an fyi. It was a very cute one shot and I liked your portrayal of Lily!

Author's Response: I know, I know. I always have problems with those. Thanks for the review.

Reviewer: Kestrel
Date: 05/05/05 8:20
Chapter: A Complete Life

I had read this before; I didn't review it, I think I didn't have time. Now I'll do the story justice. This was so sweetly written! The descriptiveness... just right. 8/10.

Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing and the 8! You are so nice. :)

Reviewer: CLY
Date: 05/05/05 0:37
Chapter: A Complete Life

This is very sweet. I have read it several times on different web-sites, and I must say, it is still good. Keep writing! ; )

Author's Response: thank you! Hmmm, the only other site that I can think of that you must have read this was on Bolt. I made some changes to it though...

Reviewer: SiriuslyPadfoot12
Date: 05/03/05 20:59
Chapter: A Complete Life

AWWW! That was so SWEET! A ten! A ten! I loved it! ::beams uncontrollably:: ~*~Mischief Managed~*~

Author's Response: A ten? A ten! For me! *dances around the room* Yea! Thanks. Lol, you are so nice!

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