Reviewer: grindelwald
Date: 06/05/05 6:46
Chapter: The Three Attacks

o wow, bloody brilliant, superb chapter. Liked the way harry got tortured, well not really but it was interesting to see snape loosing his temper.

Author's Response: Lol, thank you! Praise indeed - reviews like this always make this story seem worthwhile :) I'm glad you like the bit with Snape!

Reviewer: padfootprongs4eva
Date: 06/05/05 1:59
Chapter: The Three Attacks

whoa that was hecka scary!i thought it was really kool, but hella scary. i cant believe that snape would ue the curatios (or whatev) on harry! that was (again) scary. any way, please update asap!!!!!

Author's Response: I'm so glad you liked it! lol, it scared me when I wrote it; I didn't realise I was that evil! Chapter 11 was added to the queue so fingers crossed that it'll get accepted soon...

Reviewer: pgeraci
Date: 05/31/05 9:16
Chapter: First Game

Good story. I've just read the 9 chapters all at once. I like the way you are developing the Legilimency with Harry, Voldy, DD, and Snape. I'm looking forward to reading more of this story.

Author's Response: Thanks for the comments! I really appreciate them and chapter 10 has been added to the queue so I hope you don't have too long to wait.

Reviewer: pgeraci
Date: 05/31/05 8:46
Chapter: The Clamcelo

I like this story, but you gotta tell me about "brainbox" I've not heard anyone use that term here in Ohio. Must be a British thing. Is it a word you just made up for the story or is it a term people use in England? What would it be in Latin? :)

Author's Response: Right then - 'Brainbox' is a sarcastic, and very English, term for a know-it-all, that's all. Oh and I didn't make it up, either!

'cerebrum' is brain in Latin, box is 'arca', so brainbox could be 'cerebrumarca'? Lol, the term didn't exist when Latin was used so I'm only guessing.

Reviewer: malko050987
Date: 05/26/05 4:38
Chapter: First Game

It does sound better. I'm glad i could help. did I ever mention that I hate waiting? Now I'll snap at everyone and build impossible scenarios in my mind about Harry and Ginny, just because of some of your words. *sitting anxiuosly on the edgs of the seat* Another ten. (I can't help it, and this is the third time i review this particular chapter. And it's not like i could give you something less.) Bye! Thanx for considering my opinion! It's good for a writer to get reviews, but it's better for the reader to see his questions answered. Right. I'm rambling again. Sorry. Bye!

Author's Response: I'm glad you like the changes I made. I'm hoping chapter 10 will be accepted really soon and thanks for the reviews! I love it when people let me know what they think and I really hope you'll like what's coming...

Author's Response: PS: the next chapter's over 3500 words so I hope the wait'll be worth it!

Reviewer: gredxandxforge
Date: 05/25/05 18:58
Chapter: First Game

it didn't work out the way you wanted it? Well don't worry the story is really good so far so keep udating

Author's Response: Thanks, that chappie just didn't really work the way I wanted it, that's all. I'll update as soon as the mods accept chapter 10!

Reviewer: malko050987
Date: 05/24/05 5:49
Chapter: First Game

Ahhhh!! The bit about Cho and Marietta wasn't like H/Cho, H/Marietta. It was just that io wanted info on them. Guess I put their names in the wrong context. Are you going to give Harry a girlfriend? Because he needs someone, or he'll go nuts. Somebody strong, who can handle his moods and get him out of his shell. If she has experience with possesion *hint! hint!* it's even better... Right, now don't take this wrong, I'm not telling you what to write (yeah right!). I'm a crazy H/G shipper, nothing i can do about that. But if your giving Harry a girlfriend, make it a temporary fling (if you plan on voldie to survive to a sequel) or something permanent (e.g. true love) woth somebody that loves him, and that he loves. From my point of view, Ginny's great for this (in OotP she is the only one who treats him normally, not like he's a walking bomb, and she has experience with getting rid of tom.) Sorry if i confused you earlier, it's my nature to ramble. I'll give you another ten cuz the chapter is great! (Not my fav chapter either, but that's cuz i hate the thought of Voldemort possesing Harry *shudder*). See you later! Hope the next chapter gets up soon!

Author's Response: Lol, I laughed when I read this review! (In a nice way!) :)

I think you're gonna like chapter 10 - I'm just finalising it and I'll add it to the queue in a minute. I'll add something about Cho/Marietta in a later chapter though. Don't worry, you're not telling me what to write but if you're a H/G shipper something tells me that after the next chappie you're going to be happy... :)

Author's Response: Oh, I forgot to say, if you want to, reread the bit about Dumbledore's explanation again - I changed it a little so it explains it a bit better ~ Stormy x

Reviewer: malko050987
Date: 05/23/05 5:05
Chapter: First Game

Great chapter! The possesion was creepy, but it's good that Harry told people. About Snape, are you going to turn him evil (I mean, against the Order?), or Voldemort doesn't know about it? And when Harry was being possesed, didn't Voldemort have acess to all his memories (I don't know exactly what happens during possesion, is the possessed mind locked in a corner, or it just loses control and doesn't remember it?) And there's a problem. In OotP, Duimbledore said that Voldemort couldn't posess Harry for long because he was grieving for Sirius. And Harry knew everything then. The 'exercising of his possesion skills' could explain it, but still, we want a better explanation. More questions: Harry and Ginny? R/Hr is already obvious. Cho? Marietta? why didn't you say something about them in connection with the DA meeting? My mum's yelling at me to turn off the computer, so I'll save my other questions for the next chapter. Great chapter! 10!

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing and I'll answer your questions as much as I can. Right then...:

Whether Sanpe is gonna turn evil is quite important later. All I'm going to say is Dumbledore thinks Snape is a spy for the Order while Voldemort thinks he's a spy for him. Harry isn't sure which way his loyalties lie.

When Harry was possessed, Voldemort did have access to all Harry's memories but anything important (the Prophecy) was in the Clamcelo so Voldemort didn't find out anything he doesn't already know. As for what happens during possessions, I assume that the person just can't remember what happened to them at the time; like what happened to Ginny in COS.

Er, *cough* guess who'd forgotten Dumbledore had said that... the reason Voldemort could is that harry wasn't emotionally charged at the time and, because he was thinking about the D of M but NOT Sirius, Voldemort could control him a bit. Mainly though, all that happened was Voldemort basically could just make Harry forget what had happened, nothing more.

Right with R/Hr, but Harry and Marietta?! Why would Harry go out with the person who got dumbledore sacked and Harry nearly expelled? And I don't think Harry likes Cho any more - he wasn't exactly friendly towards her during 5th year. As for him and Ginny, Ginny certainly fancies Harry but true love? I'm not sure... I don't think Harry would want to drag her into the whole equation with Voldemort...

As for why I didn't mention them, I'd added a bit about them later on - more will be coming I promise.

Right then, sorry if that was long winded and confusing but I hope that explains it a bit better. Not my best chapter, lol.

Reviewer: bellatrixls
Date: 05/22/05 23:05
Chapter: First Game

I love the story, voldemorts' possession of Harry is written great, and it's a great storyline too!!

Author's Response: Thnak you! Chapter 10 is coming soon...

Reviewer: padfootprongs4eva
Date: 05/19/05 0:58
Chapter: Unwanted Power

wow. that was totally awsome. that was hella scary when he was like get out tom. i was like ahhh! omfg! its tom!lol. sry for the hyperness. i am feelin craaazzzyy!! anyway, i just read 1-8 and i love it alll!! yessss!o please update really really really really really soon. that would be totally awsome. u know it would be. so update really really soon.

Author's Response: Thank you! Chapter 9 is in the queue so it should get updated soon!

Reviewer: dmc
Date: 05/18/05 15:28
Chapter: Unwanted Power

I am thoroughly enjoying reading this story and cannot wait for the next chapter. This is one of the more original plot lines I have read so far and cannot wait to see where your story ends up. I like how you are using latin based words and not just making it up it keeps it more in tune with the series. Keep up the good work

Author's Response: Thank you! I hope you enjoy the other chapters as much - I'm hoping to get the whole story up before HBP comes out. Thanks for your review, one like these always makes my work seem worthwhile.

Reviewer: bacononastick
Date: 05/15/05 18:56
Chapter: Not a Threat, But a Promise

yeah thanks!

Author's Response: No problem :)

Reviewer: kime
Date: 05/14/05 10:53
Chapter: Unwanted Power

Well, I just found this story and I am enjoying it greatly. There are some well-written stories on here, but they are based on recycled ideas and plot lines. Your story is among the selective few that I never mix up with others. You have a lot of very original ideas and are a fabulous author. In some cases, more detail could be added here and there. Play to your strengths and keep on writing for the sake of enjoyment. Reviews are nice, but aren't everything. People are reading and you are enjoying yourself....that's what counts. Overall, I really am enjoying reading your story. Keep it up!

Author's Response: Thanks a lot - I'm so pleased that you like it! As for me being a fab author, lol, I'll leave that to others to say whether I am or not!

Thanks for your comment about detail - I'll try and add a bit more although I don't really want to end up with around 10,000 words a chapter as it'll take too long to write! As for the reviews, I just like to know what people think - I write for myself mostly but it's great when others say what they think too, and say where I can improve.

Once again, thanks for your comments and I'll do my best to add a bit more detail. ~Stormy

Reviewer: bacononastick
Date: 05/13/05 14:12
Chapter: Not a Threat, But a Promise

great chapter, you're an amazing author. One thing I didn't get though, Harry was possesed by Voldemort, but then at the end it said: He couldn’t know that at that moment, Dumbledore was wholly appreciating what Severus Snape was putting himself through in his role as a spy against the Dark Lord’s dominions. An Occlumency shield strong enough to deflect the Legilimency powers of Lord Voldemort, even when they were directed wandlessly through a sixteen year old boy, was close to being impossible. can you explain please?

Author's Response: Yay, thank you for the compliment! And as for your question...
Harry doesn't know that Voldemort had just possessed him, so he didn't know Dumbledore was worried about what had just happened. When Voldemort put up his own Occlumency shield - to stop Dumbledore detecting his possession of Harry - Dumbledore's own Legilimens spell was thrown back onto him by Voldemort. I did say a few paragraphs earlier that Harry couldn't finish the memory of the Prophecy as he was 'pulled away from it' by Dumbledore's Occlumency.
Snape, in his spying role for the Order, has to shut down his feelings so Voldemort doesn't detect his double agent role. Since Volemort would be with Snape when he used Legilimency, Voldemort would have used his wand. When he possessed Harry though, Voldemort couldn't use his wand as he wasn't physically there, meaning the spell was much weaker. Dumbledore found it difficult to resist Voldemort, even when the attack was through Harry so it is almost impossible when Voldemort attacks you in person directly - like when he's with Snape.
Does that make sense? Please let me know and I'll try and explain a bit better if you need me to. ~Stormy x

Reviewer: vigal
Date: 05/12/05 8:37
Chapter: Going Home

hey great chapter! I felt like I was reading the real hp! I am now off to read the other chapters!

Author's Response: Wow, thank you! I'm really pleased you think I'm writing like JKR! lol, she's still gotta be the best writer in the world though. I hope you like the other chappies as much!

Reviewer: malko050987
Date: 05/12/05 6:22
Chapter: Unwanted Power

Another great chapter, but we're already used to that aren't we? The Occlumency lesson was great, i would like more info on voldemort's intrusion on Harry's mind, and about Occlumency. Umm... what else... did I tell you it is a great chapter? and the contego shield was awesome, i believe Harry will use it more often than the other one...Again, keep up the great work! 10!

Author's Response: Thanks! And you want more on Occlumency?...hmmm...I'll think about that. Thanks for letting me know! And as for Voldemort's intrusion, just wait and see... :)

Reviewer: grindelwald
Date: 05/10/05 11:13
Chapter: Unwanted Power

That was amazing, i loved the acclumency lesson. Cant wait for more, more more and more

Author's Response: Thank you! The next chapter will be submitted shortly so I hope you don't have too long to wait!

Reviewer: malko050987
Date: 05/10/05 6:49
Chapter: Not a Threat, But a Promise

Grewat chapter! More long chapters! The longer the chaptethe more time it takes for me to start waiting for the next one! Now i'm going to read ch 8. See ya!

Author's Response: lol, the next has only got about 2800 words I'm afraid. You might have a bit of a wait too for the next chappie - I'm sitting a GCSE spanish exam tomorrow morning :( I hope you enjoy chapter 8 though!

Reviewer: jsmarriner
Date: 05/09/05 22:40
Chapter: Unwanted Power

AHA!! First to review. Ok Here goes... HOLY @#$% The attack durring the Occlumencey lesson was frightening. Astounding chapter. Bravo

Author's Response: *Laughing* I didn't realise that it was that scary! I'm so glad you like it - you've made my day! :)

Reviewer: jsmarriner
Date: 05/08/05 20:16
Chapter: Not a Threat, But a Promise

Another Supurb Chapter. Once again i am thankful i have added this story to my fav list.

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm really pleased that you like it enough to count it as one of your favs. :)

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