EEEEEK new chapter!!!! and oooomg it was sososo cute!!!! i loooved it. i totally love how you captured the whole pre-pubescent and confused emotions of the little boys for the girls!! soo adorable, ecspecially the one with james and remus and lily dancing, and all that jazz. keep up the good work, and preferably update SOONER. 10!!
Author's Response: haha, thanks. glad you liked it. just starting next chapter now. it'll be harder for me to do, 'cause i've got to mature everyone by two years and still make it realistic.
Oh, and I hinted at something in my other review. I'm not sure you understood it, I'll make It clearer here. I, Marie Elisabeth Bennington, think Remus should have a really cute, sweet girlfriend, I dunno someone that is kind of like me, *wink, wink* It would be an ultimate honor to be in your story, It is only like my favorite story on this site! I'm really not just saying all this, I do love this story and these characters. Thank you! : )
Author's Response: hint takem. not sure if i'll work it in though, sorry. i'm like pro-organized and have my story plan all set out already. no room for more people! i'm like 80% done next chapter. just have tons and tons of homework lately, so it's been going kinda slow. i'm hurrying!
Oh, I love it! This is such a great story, It's getting harder and harder to wait for the next chapter. Kind of like waiting for the next Harry Potter book. I think these relationships are so cute! I hope you will update this wonderful story soon, and I'm not just saying all this, I really do like this story a lot. Just a small fact for you: Remus is the best marauder! Sorry couldn't resist. Thank you for writing this story and reading my review. I, Marie Elisabeth Bennington, give this story a 1,000,000,000,000/10 Keep writing!
Dammit, leo sol, updaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaate!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: I'm working on it! Sheesh. Eager much?
i liked that. i like that alot.
Well Goy, i think you are a mean, egotistic, bastard. Sorry, but if you can't say nice things, KEEP YOUR TRAP SHUT! So anyway, leo_sol, i thought this was a really good prologue, well done. You should ignore, obviously blind and unimaginative people like this Goy, as he surely can't appreciate good writing. Otherwise, why would it be accepted? I checked out his profile and noticed he didn't have any stories submitted so NER to him. Please keep on writing it, i thought it was fabby, am off to read the next chapter.
TOTALLY FREAKING AWESOME!!!! You know- Sirius kinda reminds me of Jughead in the Archie Comics.. *sigh* kaNT W8 FOR THE NXT FEW chapters!
PS) by this, I meant this chapter, because it was my favorite :)
I feel so SpEcIaL... I'm the first to review this, though I definately shouldn't be. With the exceptions of a select few, you are one of the only writers on this website who can succesfully keep all of JKR's characters... well, in character, not make your original character a complete Mary Sue, make an interesting plot, and use proper spelling and grammar. Sorry if I sound like a broken record player- the reviews I leave for the aforementioned select few authors sound alot like what I just said. But hey! It's the truth. Anyways... I can't believe more people haven't reviewed this. It's awesome! I mean, the students you're writing about are in first year, and you make them act like they really are eleven and twelve. (James and Sirius don't know what they're feeling when they look at Lily and Allene, but they know it's good. Awww!!!) I'm sure that you'll continue to do the same when they're older (act their age, I mean- not act like they're eleven and twelve. You get it.) You said the next chapter's going to be Halloween. Wicked sweet! But does that mean we won't get to see our favorite characters go to the ball? It doesn't matter- I just thought it'd be cute for Jamsie and Sirius to "not know what they were feeling, but know it was good" when they saw Allene and Lily in their purty dressy things. LoL. Update soon!
Author's Response: Thank you! It's for reviewers like you and Azkaban13 that I like writing this stuff. And thanks for noticing my grammar, one of my pet peeves is bad spelling! So I try to be good at it. I really appreciate your input, ALL OF YOU, and my next chapter (which I should probably go finish now) is dedicated to you.
wow! good job.i cant wait until its full moon and remuse will be all 'i got to go visit my sick mother' and everyone will be all ' you visit her about three times a month every month' and then he will get all scared, and then they will be all 'remus we think your a WAREWOLF' and he will be like u dont want to be my friends anymore' and u know the rest. sry i had to put that in there. i am kind of bored and need to kill some time. neway i hope u update soon, and..........yea.
CONTINUE !!!!!!! ineed to know what happens next... i didn't register earlier .... but i tought that it was a pity if i couldn't read the rest of the story.... so i registered CONTINUE !!!!!!!!! give it a TEN it's well worth it ! update soon!
I think that was well written. You haven't taken the time to lay down th foundation of their characters yet, But they are only in first year, so... I'll be loking forward to your next chapter.
Good story! Your a good writer, but your a bit off character. Sirius was known is school as more of a player, and one ho was know to hold grudges, and make jokes i think. Lily absolutely hated James and James was madly in love with her, but pretented to hate her. Also, Peter was included more, remember, he is a marauder. But it's your story (Good too, might I add) and you can do as you want. I just think it's a bit off character. Your a good writer, and I'm glad to see someone finally writing something centered around Sirius (not all 4 marauders, but mostly just Sirius, because hes my FAVORITE character!) keep up the good work, and update soon!
Well, I agree that the characters are a little off, but it still seems like a wonderful story! I'm confused though, are you going to pair Sirius up with Lily?
Author's Response: No, I'm not. Believe me, it'll all become clearer eventually.
I hate it. Love, goy
Author's Response: Why thank you.
Woa, nice story, but i'm not sure sirius and james were that nice to lily in the first place... :( it's a bit out of character, but i think that it's way kool that Sirius goes ahead and explain everything about the wizard world to Lily:P