Reviewer: BornToRead333
Date: 02/17/11 3:03
Chapter: Wisdom of Dumbledore

well this fluff was well needed!!
very good :D

Reviewer: BornToRead333
Date: 02/17/11 2:53
Chapter: Frozen Tears

this is awesome :D love love love it
halle needs to be more apologetic but besides that its AWESOME!!! :D keep writing!!

Reviewer: BornToRead333
Date: 02/17/11 2:44
Chapter: Flower and Prongs

sooo offing sweet XD james is perfect and so is lily!!!
no changes :D

Reviewer: BornToRead333
Date: 02/17/11 2:40
Chapter: Memories Not Forgotten

james should have been more surprised when she kissed him, more speechless and all and there should have been a moment where they didn't speak. cuz its like james dream and stuff to have lily and now she kissed him and is willing to go out with him :)
overall i loved it :D
cant wait to finish this "book" :)

Reviewer: BornToRead333
Date: 02/17/11 2:34
Chapter: Truce With The Enemy

the end part was very fast
a bit too fast
halle should have been shocked when sirius said that he loved her becuz she didn't believe it
and sirius should have been speechless
and they shouldn't have just separated after they said all that!!! D:
(my personal opinion! don't listen to it if you don't want to)
it would have been better for them to have chatted a bit more b4 going off :)
great chapter!!! loving every minute of it!

Reviewer: BornToRead333
Date: 02/17/11 2:27
Chapter: In Your Arms

totally sweet!!! did voldemort rlly kill lily's mom? lf so, time would be needed, and for lily to tell james, it needs to be slower, she has to have that nagging feeling that she hated him and she has to spend some time with james before they actually end up in eachothers arms
and it would be more believable if lilly was thinking more "WTH??? why am i feeling what im feeling right now about james???" and stuff :)
overall it is very good :D

Reviewer: BornToRead333
Date: 02/17/11 2:20
Chapter: Lakeside Drama

this is really sweet :) this is the second time i've read this "book" and i love it!!
great! grammatical errors here and there but :D its good it really is!

Reviewer: Blinkdawg
Date: 02/08/11 21:31
Chapter: Change of Heart

This is just....wow. Its so...bland? I'm not sure what the right word is. Its just so un-original. They always have James and Lily get together. Then break up. Then get back together. And the wording in the dialogue is.....a bit more formal than it should(I mean that no one expect someone to talk like that in casual everyday life)(Unless of course said person is a snob.) be. But still correct. Good spelling & Grammar.

Reviewer: Blinkdawg
Date: 02/08/11 19:20
Chapter: Confessions

Everythings good. Cept' Lily.....hit Snape. Totally out of character.

Reviewer: iamtrelawney
Date: 01/10/11 12:52
Chapter: The Beautiful Friendship Begins

great start :D

Reviewer: katerinapatrova
Date: 01/09/11 19:20
Chapter: The Beautiful Friendship Begins

Okaayy
Overall it's a pretty good story with a great storyline
But I feel like the characters are too unreal, I mean Lily and James act so immature and snape should have had a bigger role since he was a big part of Lily's life
I think the way you portrayed Sirius was pretty believable but the lovey dovey-ness was so not him lol I just think you over did it with all the mushy gushy romance
But overall you did a great job :)

Reviewer: kksmile
Date: 01/03/11 9:39
Chapter: James is from Mars, Evil is from Venus

I doubt that Venus bitch can be as bad as Umbridge. Now, that woman was some serious trouble.

Reviewer: kksmile
Date: 01/03/11 9:07
Chapter: Homecoming

Omg.... This chapter made me cry. Especially when Sirius says he is going to defeat Bellatrix if it's the last thing he ever does. But what he doesn't know is that Bellatrix will actually end up killing him and he has no idea! He never gets to keep that promise! And I know it's not acually part of the real story of Harry Potter (written by JK Rowling) but it is just so sad. You are a great writer, I have to say. Keep up the good work! :)

Reviewer: kksmile
Date: 01/03/11 8:31
Chapter: More Drunken Tides

Well isn't it kind of obvious? Lily and James had drunken sex...

Reviewer: kksmile
Date: 01/02/11 17:58
Chapter: Mixed Emotions

What kind of crap is this? HA! That would never happen! I mean, Lord Voldemort dancing at a Masquerade Ball? Seriously, like come on. You can do better than that. Just ridiculous.

Reviewer: kksmile
Date: 01/02/11 14:30
Chapter: Truce With The Enemy

Finally! The story begins to develop! It sure has taken long enough though... Most people would have stopped reading by now. :/

Reviewer: Wanted
Date: 12/31/10 10:11
Chapter: Moving On

Great story. Venus Adams sent shivers down my spine, imagine whacking a 17 year olds head of a metal bar ? She was sick and twisted... I take my hat off to you for making such a brillaintly evil bitch! I'd of liked it better if Lily said yes to James's proposel and they didn't split up as much! I really liked Katy as a charector and I will always love James so I'd say they were my favourite charectors. Oh the Suspence in this story was BRILLIANT.. I kept reading and never wanted to stop! I'm looking forward to Catch My Fall!

Reviewer: tarheelgirl919
Date: 12/16/10 20:46
Chapter: Meeting with Dumbledore

Aw! he said "the girl" thats soooooo cute! *fangirl squeal*

Reviewer: tarheelgirl919
Date: 12/16/10 20:45
Chapter: Meeting with Dumbledore

Aw! he said "the girl" thats soooooo cute! *fangirl squeal*

Reviewer: harry potter lovee
Date: 12/14/10 17:04
Chapter: Moving On

that was an amazing story! i loved it sooo much! u r an amazing writer!!

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