Good story - short and sweet. (I know what it is like to not have any reviews, and if i would have read your story sooner i would have given it a big long review) I'm glad tha Alice was Happy (for the time being - knowing that we all know what happens later **sniff**) Neville was so cute and innocent. Anyways keep up the good work and keep writting!!!
I don't know why you don't have more reviews! My only criticism is that a few of the sentances are clumsy (repitition, etc). I also think something you could have done was have Alice be more jealous of Lily for having a good marriage. Other then that, there was genuine emotion in the story and it wasn't overdone. Something about Neville as a baby really is touching. With a small bit of revision, I would give this a ten!
haha! I don't blame you for reviewing your own fic, I would have done the same early on. Be patient m'dear, this story is original and good and is definitely review worthy. However, it seems to drag on in some ways. If this was a one shot, I'd say good (9 or 10) but if you plan to make this a multi chapter fic, then I really don't know what you'd use for material, in that sense this would be a 6 or 7, so to be diplomatic, i give you an 8. Good effort, nicely thought out, and if there's more to come, I'll certainly check it out. Hope I helped some, and I'm proud to be ur 1st real reviewer, hee hee. -Amalynne
I'm so pathetic. I just couldn't stand seeing my story without a review...