I really liked this poem. This is honestly shows what would probably have gone through his mind in a situation like a photo shoot. I also like how you managed to put some darker lines in a not-so-dark situation. Very creative. ^_^
Poor Harry. Once again every teenager that has read the series feels bad for you and secretly wants to be you. How sad for all of us.
I’m so sick of being here,
Pretending to be something I’m not.
Concealing all my present fear,
While posing for the photo shots.
The beginning was my favorite part. It proved a perfect picture in my mind.
Very nice. You do a great job of capturing Harry's frustrations. Poor kid stuck in the spotlight. Definately enjoyable. Well done. ~Ginny
Wow, this was great! I love how you did the rythem. The rhymes were great, too; I'm horrible at making things rhyme! I think that you did a great job of capturing Harry's emotions, and what he was feeling at the time. That just about sums up his feelings perfectly. Good job, Ana!
Excellent job! Your balance of describing what's happening around Harry and describing his feelings is perfect! Then you tie the two together and it just flows. The stanza starting with The light bulbs flash is the best example of this. It also happens to be my favorite stanza! Occasionally the rhythm threw me off, but I could figure out where the stresses were meant to go, and then it was fine! All in all, a wonderful poem!
I really like reading well done HP poetry; I have a great respect for people who write it because I find it very hard to do. Your poem really captured me, not to mention Harry's tumultous emotionsat the time. I thought it was well worded and descriptive. I enjoyed it very much.
Squeak! Squeak! Squeak! That was just the perfect length for my little rodent brain!You've nailed Harry's emotions just perfectly. I remember when I was a competitor for the Brits in the Undead Rodent Olympics of 2002. Back in the day, we used to say that the spectators had no idea the trials we overcame to provide those brief moments of entertainment for them.
Why, I remember when my coach, it was Jan back then, used to scritch behind my ears and dangle a bit of lettuce to help me run faster. (I love Jan.) But the 1-metre dash was never really my best event. I'm more of a hamster-wheel gymnast, myself.
All in all, a really excellent poem. It really brought back some good memories!
I dont read the poetry that much, but I found this,and really liked it. It is very well written.
Really well written! I truly loved it. The description was all very realistic and the style was definitely appropriate to your subject. They only thing I'd say about it was that sometimes you sacrificed the fluency of a line to incorporate a rhyme. Having said that, it happened very little. And my memories are a swirling fusion - definitely my favourite line; it's a lovely manipulation of words. An excellent and original work. Well done!
I loved it! I like that he felt torn apart and estranged at the same time he was being passed around from person to person.. excellent job. (brilliant!imma)
Very Good! The rythm is very good. You did a nice job of writing the thoughts of Harry. Bravo! 10/10
Well written, very consistent structure. Excellent imagery without resorting to wordiness. Some rhythmic flaws, but nothing too jarring.
Wow, I love how the poem flows like silk. You captured the thoughts that must have been going through Harry's mind perfectly. Well done, I hope you continue with other poems.
AWESOME!!! i loved it! good rhyming and good story shows what i think could have really been what he was thinking! good work!
wow, i loved it, the rhyme was really good and i loved the words u used. to me, it was full of passion, well done!
That's good.. it rhymes, the rhythm works most of the way through and it makes the reader think. Well done.
