Reviewer: PheonixFlamesForever
Date: 08/21/08 16:30
Chapter: Failure is Unacceptable

Okay, firstly, I must say, I do like the way that you have worked out how Hermione ticks. That thought hadn't come to me, but now I think of it, I can definately understand where you are coming from. However, I do believe there are other things behind Hermione's motivation, mainly her friendship and loyalty as well.

At times, the characters seem slightly OOC in the way that they socailise and react with each other, for example, I don't believe there was an instance in any of the books when Hermione was addressed as 'Mione. I think this is especailly apparantly when Ron first kisses Hermione, as I believe he wouldn't be quite as cocky. :)

Sometimes there seems to be an over-use of punctuation, especailly with exclamation marks. With a beta, you could straighten these little mistakes out, and make it an even better fic.

You do provide excellent description and I have a very vivid picture of how they are interacting with each other. Overall, very cute fic. :)

Reviewer: Hermiones BFF
Date: 05/10/08 13:31
Chapter: Failure is Unacceptable

AWWWW!!!! That was cute!!! What happened to Luna though??

Reviewer: moldy999
Date: 12/04/07 6:54
Chapter: Failure is Unacceptable

aaaw i love it nice one well done i need to remember to read it again sometimes

Reviewer: Mina44
Date: 01/17/07 20:34
Chapter: Failure is Unacceptable


Reviewer: Palmtreegirl2
Date: 11/21/06 21:38
Chapter: Failure is Unacceptable

Great story. I really liked it!

Reviewer: Palmtreegirl2
Date: 11/21/06 21:38
Chapter: Failure is Unacceptable

Great story. I really liked it!

Reviewer: hermionelove
Date: 11/14/06 10:53
Chapter: Failure is Unacceptable

A very cheesy story. =P

Reviewer: daddys_little_girl
Date: 06/27/06 12:45
Chapter: Failure is Unacceptable

very cute

Author's Response: thanks very much. im really glad that you like ny story, and i can't tell you how happy i am that my first fan fic on MNFF was greeted with enthusiasm =)

Reviewer: FionaMalfoy
Date: 06/16/06 7:01
Chapter: Failure is Unacceptable


Author's Response: thank you.

Reviewer: daddys_little_girl
Date: 06/07/06 16:38
Chapter: Failure is Unacceptable

this story is adorable!

Author's Response: thank you =) i know it is kind of fluffy, but i had that story bouncing around in my head for ages, and i decided that a little fluff couldn't hurt. im glad that you liked it.

Reviewer: grangergurl
Date: 06/06/06 20:21
Chapter: Failure is Unacceptable


Author's Response: interesting is good i glad it wasn't boring =)

Reviewer: confidentialroze
Date: 05/31/06 6:31
Chapter: Failure is Unacceptable

cool write more!!

Author's Response: thanks, im planning too! i havent realy been on MFF for a while, but im going to write a lilly/james fic soon.

Reviewer: Lenny123
Date: 04/27/06 22:13
Chapter: Failure is Unacceptable


Author's Response: =)

Reviewer: obsessedwithron
Date: 04/16/06 21:19
Chapter: Failure is Unacceptable

Ahhhhhhhhhh!!!!!!!!!!!! I love it!!!!!!!!!

Author's Response: thanks so much! im glad you liked it =)

Reviewer: The Scarlet Quill
Date: 03/03/06 23:20
Chapter: Failure is Unacceptable

Wow! This was, wow. I really enjoyed it! I could only scrounge one criticism...Harry and Luna? Other than!

Author's Response: I know, I know, Harry and Luna aren't really a popular couple. I'm actually a Harry/ Ginny shipper myself, but I wanted to add in a relationship that hasn't really been accepted mainstream. I could never turn away from Ron and Hermionie would be like abandoning my baby. =). I'm glad you liked the story though!

Reviewer: Auror81692
Date: 10/25/05 18:30
Chapter: Failure is Unacceptable

I don't think she's failin

Author's Response: Well, she at the end she wasn't failing at love, but the "failure" in this story more deals with the fact she can't controll her emotions for Ron.

Reviewer: Auror81692
Date: 10/25/05 18:30
Chapter: Failure is Unacceptable

I don't think she's failin

Author's Response: really only responding to this twice because it's annoying me that this is the only review without a comment. =P

Reviewer: tuttifrutti193
Date: 07/07/05 22:55
Chapter: Failure is Unacceptable

awwwwwwwwwww i got butterflies in muh stomach wen deyy kissd... idk y.. LOVE IT!!!

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I've been trying to evoke emotion in my readers, I'm so glad I finally accomplished it! PARTY! =)

Reviewer: Emily Vance
Date: 07/04/05 9:58
Chapter: Failure is Unacceptable

I like it. I really like it. make it longer next time.

Author's Response: Thanks. I'm working on another fan fic, and I'm planning on it being longer this time!

Reviewer: Harriet Evans
Date: 04/27/05 4:18
Chapter: Failure is Unacceptable

Aaah, well done - that was very sweet. You write really well - I loved "sweep it under the rug of her subconscious". I think you're right - Hermione does find failure very difficult to handle. I was surprised when Ron kissed her right after saying that he thought there was no hope but I guess he decided to just take a chance! Keep writing - you do it well!

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the positive feedback! Yes, that's my favorite line in the story as well- it's based off of what I try to do quite often (needless to say, it doesn't really work!) I tried to keep Hermionie in character while dealing with her feelings, and I'm glad you think I kept her realistic! I admit, the kiss may have been spontenious, but really, I don't think Ron had anything to lose at that point.

Author's Response: Oh, by the way- I love your stories! i'm flattered that you think I'm a good writer! =D

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