hey good job writing the chapter.. its about time lolz i hope u update soon
I really like this story... can't wait to see what happens next... Poor Sophie!
Yay! Another chapter. I can't waitj to find out what this 'life-altering secret' is and I agree with Andrea. Revealing said 'life-altering secret' in the middle of class might not go well. Please update quickly!
wow an update worth the wait though the chapter was awesome plz update quick though cuz i wanna no wat the lighting bond is k? thnx
Before I read this tomorrow morning...let me tell you taht I had to do a double take when I saw that email saying this had been updated. I was all ready to go to the next email, when I reread the name. I was surprised. But pleased! I'll have to read it in the morning...afternoon...though. :-)
hey this is a great story i wish u would update soon im dying to know what happens next
i liie this story its the 5 year version of the HPB but from an other pespective
So, first off: SQUEE LAV-LAV IS IN THIS CHAPTER. She was so in character too. I've been searching for Lav!fics... they just don't seem to be around anymore I guess. *sighs and retreats to little corner* *calls from little corner* It's a bit dusty over here! *waves away dust*
Yes, erm, ok, enough seriousness. I really like this Neal/Alicia relationship dynamic is very interesting. I hope I get to see it develop in the future. :) AND FLET! NO! FLET, COME BACK! *goes off in the woods and chases Flet*
Nitpicks are a must, obviously. "“Big surprise there,” Lavender gigled." "Giggled" is missing a "g". "“My and Fred’s Secret Lab,” he grinned mischievously. “Bill told us about this place, the rest of the corridor is dedicated to Prefect stuff, bathrooms, common rooms, study rooms.”" This whole bit of dialogue reads wrong... I'd make "My and Fred's" turn into "Our", replace the comma behind place with a period, and take the last part and scrap it, or turn it around so it reads well with the rest of the sentence. :)
Great job as always! *hug*
Oh my gosh! I love this story. I'm dying to know what the lightning bond is. Please don't say this i sa story that's been abandoned because I have to know ho wit ends. Please write more!! It's a great story!
Coolie. Good job.
Really good, smashing!
that is great. wonderfully hysterical! (the end i mean) Again, good flair, and a good twist.
SEE HIM!!!!! I WANT TO SEE SIRIUS!
That was hysterical! Like i said, good flow!
That was so good. It was sweet and romantic! I like love stories! Keep it up!
very good. Glad they are togther, and, i expect you're tired of hearing this, but good flow!
Sooooo sad! That was a really god chapter. tos of tension, but not necessaruly bad tension, keep it up!
again, keep up the good work.