I am really liking this story! I think you're able to capture extremely well the tension and anger - not a lot of writers can do that. I'm hoping that things will get better for Laura though. Being miserable sucks. But your story definitely doesn't.
Author's Response: I'm glad you think that the characters' feelings are coming through, especially since their feelings are a major part of the plot. And don't worry. Things start getting better for Laura soon.
Nope, you hit the nail right on the head. Update soon.
A little confusing, but I still want to see where you're going with the story. 8/10, update soon.
Author's Response: The next chapter (which I'm almost done typing and editing... I have several chapters of this already written.) explains the relationship between Percy, Oliver and Laura. I wanted to show the strong dislike in their relationship before explaining what caused it. In other words, I was vague on purpose, but I may have been too vague. Thanks for the review and let me know if what I explained above isn't what you thought was confusing. :)