Reviewer: Avian020391
Date: 04/21/05 7:40
Chapter: The last sorting hat song

nice rhythm! Only one thing: In verse 6, the first line has 9 syllables and the third line has only 7. You could change that by making it "Now Slytherin's a cunning crowd" instead of "Now Slytherin - they're a cunning crowd", and then tweaking the third line so it has 8 syllables. But it's your choice. Great song, anyway!

Reviewer: juniorauthor
Date: 04/04/05 18:07
Chapter: The last sorting hat song

Oh, I love it! The rythm is so smooth, and the style is so...Sorting hat-ish! :) on a scale of 1 to 10...11

Reviewer: GryffindorGoddess
Date: 04/03/05 18:50
Chapter: The last sorting hat song

I just realized I hadn't read this poem before. I love the sorting hat songs, and you do such a great job with it :) 10!

Reviewer: Jade777
Date: 03/25/05 20:16
Chapter: The last sorting hat song

Mmm... I liked it because it's a new song that I've read.

Reviewer: Diamond Quill
Date: 03/22/05 11:39
Chapter: The last sorting hat song

This is the best try at a sorting Hat song I've read. It has a very solid rhythm that carries on the whole way through. The only place it slightly slips (in my opinion) is this line 'And help you when you feel weak' I think if you take the 'you' out after 'help' it might scan better. Great all the same.

Author's Response: Thank you so much. I am very proud of this piece of work and i agree with the change. thanks for the review.

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