Reviewer: d3pr3ss3dNhappy
Date: 06/18/05 10:23
Chapter: Forest Fight

Hullo, I'm back. This was a wonderful chappie. A few spelling mistakes (coincidence spelled "coicidence" and Hermione Granger without a space between the two names), but otherwise very enjoyable! You've done a wonderful job of keeping Dumbledore in character, many people struggle with that. You also are building up a very intriguing story. I too, am eager to know what the birthmark really is.

I have a few guesses. For one thing, it was probably Cody's tutor who told him it was a birthmark, which is why Cody believes it is one. But if half of it burned off, then it's obviously not really a birthmark, perhaps some powerful substance that attaches to the skin (and is waterproof, it stayed on in the shower)? Or maybe it's a curse? After all, hasn't his tutor been with him since he was a young child? He would have had plenty of times to apply it. I guess I'll just have to wait until the next chapter to see if any of my speculations play out...

Reviewer: sanguinequills
Date: 06/18/05 4:05
Chapter: Forest Fight

excellent. few typos , but nonetheless excellent. the twist is good, because you were starting to become slightly repeatitive, with all these cursed people around, but now, the purpose of it all is being revealed. carryon writing.

Reviewer: Eponine
Date: 06/15/05 14:17
Chapter: Forest Fight

Oh wow. This was a great chapter. I noticed there were a few typos, but nothing bad. Awesome twist at the end! Please update soon! I want to know what the "birthmark" is!

Reviewer: Eponine
Date: 06/01/05 13:33
Chapter: Dark Clues

Sorry I haven't reviewed in a long time, been so busy. But now finals and plays are all over so I'll have time to read. This is a really excellent story you have, do you know that? I like the possible romance between Hermione and Cody! I look forward to reading the new chapters. Good work. =)

Author's Response: Thanks again for reading. Finishing the last 2 chapters now...

Reviewer: wyrddsmith
Date: 05/29/05 22:25
Chapter: Family Secrets

I also want to add that I really enjoyed your approach in this story. Cody is a very interesting character, and the necromancy is fascinating. I am soooo looking forward to your next chapter.

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm having fun writing it. About 2 more chapters and it'll be done.

Reviewer: wyrddsmith
Date: 05/27/05 21:42
Chapter: Family Secrets

This is terriffic! A very witty story, and Cody is great. I laughed so hard reading this!

Reviewer: d3pr3ss3dNhappy
Date: 05/22/05 14:02
Chapter: Victims

Hah, wow, haven't read this story in a while. But I had two new chapters to greet me! Chapter 9 had almost a bit too much sexual innuendo for me and it sounded a little forced. Then again, I'm not (and never was) a pubescent boy so it very well may be realistic.

But Chapter ten was very good. I think the idea of Draco and Hermione unrealistic but you provided a lot of good reasons as to why it happened. And the ending was very good. I really like the whole Cody/Hr ship. Keep up the good work!

Reviewer: Wildklymr
Date: 05/11/05 22:51
Chapter: Victims

I think you have an amazing creativity, and are not afraid to tackle some subjects I'm sure J.K. Rowling would never touch. I was completely drawn into the character Cody you created. The entire series is astounding, and it is refreshing to not have a fanfic based around Harry all the time. I have to commend you on your work and will be eagerly waiting for your next chapter.

Author's Response: Wow!! Thanks so much for you nice words. I appreciate your reading it!

Reviewer: littlegenius
Date: 05/10/05 13:05
Chapter: Victims

cody and hermione kissing?!?!?!?!?! tht was tooooo funny. still laughing now

Reviewer: CCCC
Date: 05/02/05 9:31
Chapter: Assimilation

This is a sort of general sort of review of the first four chapters, so please don't shoot me if I wander between them. Firstly I really liked it, it's an original idea written very well. You've captured his loneliness very well. However, even thought it is a very good story, I keep wincing at the Americanisms popping up, the most obvious one being Cody, it's not a name that you'd expect to see in the Uk, and definitely not in an ancient family. Upper-classmen is also another one. Otherwise excellent.

Author's Response: Thanks so much for reading and your input. I liked the name Cody, because it paints a picture of a "deer caught in the headlights" sort of kid - which is half of Cody's reality. Also, since much of the character's actions are adult in nature, I didn't want his name to be too adult, too. (Have you ever really known a grown-up named Cody??). "Upper-classmen" is pretty common in America and Japan, what term would UK'ers more likely use?

Reviewer: d3pr3ss3dNhappy
Date: 04/26/05 17:29
Chapter: Dark Clues

How do you get your chapters validated so fast? Grr. Mine take forever. But this was very interesting. I like Cody/Hermione better than C/Ginny. "A boy in there? Bravo Hermione!" I laughed out loud. Your Dumbledore was also perfectly in character.

Author's Response: That's for the compliments! That last one spent nearly a week in the queue. Maybe because it was longer? The next chapter is even longer, but already in the queue...

Reviewer: SeaIsleWitch
Date: 04/26/05 15:03
Chapter: Dark Clues

Cody is sure a "fawn in the woods"! You've created an interesting and unique character that you can't help but like! Dumbledore's protection of him during the 'meeting' was well written. Nicely done!

Reviewer: Stormy
Date: 04/26/05 10:44
Chapter: Dark Clues

Very good - I can't wait to see what happens. I hope you update soon!

Author's Response: Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: SeaIsleWitch
Date: 04/18/05 22:02
Chapter: Confrontations

So glad you responded and didn't take offense! I meant to post the review in your last chapter, I don't know why it posted in chapter one. I'll look out for the update!

Reviewer: SeaIsleWitch
Date: 04/18/05 13:12
Chapter: The Dangerous Decision

Your story is well written and quite original. Normally, I don't read "dark/weird" fics, but this one is interesting. I had to laugh when Hermione gave Cody such concise information! I'm a little fearful that this story might go into a death/rape scene which I don't care for. If you are going in that direction, would you please give us adequate warning? The story so far is original and ties well to the Chamber of Secrets storyline.

Author's Response: Have no fear of anything really twisted like gross-out voilence, rape, mutilation, etc. I'm not into writing anything like that at all. The story is dark as it is centers around death-related magic, with some sexual awakening/humor in it. Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: d3pr3ss3dNhappy
Date: 04/17/05 17:39
Chapter: Confrontations

Good last sentence. It'll be interesting to see how Cody's arrival at Hogwarts twists the original plot of CoS.

Author's Response: Thanks for your continued interest! I made the corrections you mentioned last time.

Reviewer: d3pr3ss3dNhappy
Date: 04/13/05 18:11
Chapter: An Imposition

besides a few small grammar mistakes (first paragraph and the last sentence should have been in quotations), I loved it! Especially how Cody likes History. I also like the relationship that's developing between Cody and Ginny, and Professor Flitwick's search for new charms.

Reviewer: Eponine
Date: 04/13/05 17:09
Chapter: Dark Magic

Aww poor Wesley. I was wrong last chapter, now I feel bad for him. That was really clever about that 'practicing' thing! Ummmm I can't really think of anything else to say, but yay update soon please!

Author's Response: to be Wesley...but hey, those adult wizards and witches have to think about the effect of their involvement with Voldemort on their own family....

Reviewer: Eponine
Date: 04/11/05 23:38
Chapter: An Imposition

Ahhh! Bad Malfoy! ...or at least I think so. Mmm I don't like this Wesley kid, so far. Anywho, I loved how Cody loved History of Magic. Haha that's so cute. Just a few other comments, isn't the incantation for levitating feathers "Wingardium leviosa" not "Alohamora?" Sorry if I missunderstood. The students seemed rather advanced for their first day, also. In the first book, they didn't even start with levitation until Halloween... And on the first day of Transfiguration, they worked on changing matches into needles... Anyway, great chapter, look forward to the next!

Author's Response: Ouch...the wrong spell in the story was my bad. I corrected it. Thanks. As far as Flitwick's Charms class....since this is his Ravenclaw house, naturally they're on the fast track...hehe

Reviewer: d3pr3ss3dNhappy
Date: 04/10/05 12:54
Chapter: Assimilation

I too, am glad you chose Ravenclaw, I can't wait to see what Luna thinks of him. And I'm very curious as to how the whole "Heir Of Slytherin" is going to affect him. I like the whole necromancy magic thing, but is Dumbledore going to allow that? And will Cody get any special tutoring for his art?

Author's Response: Thanks again. No special tutoring for Cody, what he is looking for is to be part of the "normal" wizard world. I like Ravenclaw, too. But, from my view...Michael Corner is a classmate in the class behind Harry Potter, not in the same class. I think HP Lexicon disagrees with me. Too bad.

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