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Name: SEAMUS_124 (Signed) · Date: 10/17/06 3:56 · For: The Descent
=), i loved it, it was worth waiting for =), cant wait to go read the sequal if its written, going to check, great writing, keep up the work, Seamus.

Name: emoprincess26 (Anonymous) · Date: 08/14/06 13:06 · For: The Descent
Again, that wasy spectacular! The details you used really added to the story, and I could see it all happening in my mind...but please tell me there's going to be a sequel! You just can't leave it like that... :)


Name: emoprincess26 (Anonymous) · Date: 08/13/06 18:36 · For: Strange Feelings
Well, I've finally found more time to read. And I'm still really enjoying your story! I like how you add loads of details, making everything so believable. And that was an interesting little twist at the end of this chapter.

Name: emoprincess26 (Anonymous) · Date: 08/13/06 13:32 · For: Point of No Return
I think your story is absolutely fascinating so far. Normally I don't really go for the dark/angsty fics, but I am absolutely engrossed with this. Your characters are very well developed, and the plot is excellent so far. I like how you introduced Hermione and used her to tell more about necromancy, and I find what you said about Ginny intriguing and I'd like to know more now. I guess I'll just keep reading...


Name: shadowwings182 (Signed) · Date: 07/16/06 16:41 · For: The Descent
very good! are you going to add more? that just cant be the end...

Name: LittleDarlin909 (Signed) · Date: 06/01/06 16:17 · For: The Dangerous Decision
Wow! This is a really cool story and Cody is a great character. Though I could've done without most of the graphic sexual situations, I quite enjoyed the part where Hermione teaches Cody about, um, "whomping the willow" :-D Overall, awesome job! Can't wait to read more.

Name: Halfbloodme (Signed) · Date: 04/21/06 5:50 · For: The Descent
yes! Finally you continue! Well done, I nearly removed the story; I'm so happy that you updated
it! Thanks!

Name: Halfbloodme (Signed) · Date: 04/21/06 5:50 · For: The Descent
yes! Finally you continue! Well done, I nearly removed the story; I'm so happy that you updated
it! Thanks!

Name: sadako (Signed) · Date: 03/28/06 17:06 · For: The Descent
Wow, finally. It's great. I can't wait for the sequal.

Name: Trevor Delgome (Signed) · Date: 03/19/06 6:55 · For: The Descent
How sad. Don't know if Cody will survive this. Are you going to write a sequel soon? I would definitely read it! Great story, by the way!

Author's Response: Yup...."The Necromancer's Return" is in the works now....

Name: Zooby666 (Signed) · Date: 11/17/05 3:15 · For: The Secret Curse
dude...........cmon! itds been like 3 months!

Name: Zooby666 (Signed) · Date: 11/03/05 2:54 · For: The Secret Curse
OMG, can u plz add next chapter i wouldnt actually mind reading the end of this story, as it is great. =)

Name: Trevor Delgome (Signed) · Date: 10/10/05 18:57 · For: The Secret Curse
Great story! Ties well in with Rowling's world. Haven't been able to review before since I just registered today. Anyway, can't wait for the next chapter!

Name: Trevor Delgome (Signed) · Date: 10/10/05 18:55 · For: The Secret Curse
Great story! Ties well in with Rowling's world. Haven't been able to review before since I just registered today. Anyway, can't wait for the next chapter!

Name: BlackClaude (Signed) · Date: 09/12/05 21:42 · For: Point of No Return
I'm afraid I'm going to start repeating myself praising your characters and descriptions, so everything I've praised is still wonderful. :) I'm intrigued by the very real separation between Cody and the other students, especially on the Hogwarts Express where you contrast the children saying goodbye to their parents for a term and Cody alienating himself completely from his ancient family history. You do a great job having him walk the line between innocence and wisdom. I loved this line: "A tiny gnawing sense of darkness was present – barely distinguishable. It intrigued Cody immensely." And I laughed out loud at "Perhaps her hair could have used a bit of work."

You worked the explanation of necromancy in very smoothly. Sometimes things like that can seem too "narrated," but Hermione's swallowed-a-textbook manner works perfectly in that regard. The explanation in this chapter furthered the story, as did Lurrid's introduction. Very ominous indeed; since I've grown to like and identify with Cody, I got a similar sinking feeling when his future friends were threatened. It's a terrible position for him, but the way he disposed of Lurrid gives me hope that Cody will outsmart him in the end.

Author's Response: WOW! I'm really humbled and flattered by all your great comments. Thank you for taking so much time reading and writing. I really do need to get online and write that last chapter....

Name: BlackClaude (Signed) · Date: 09/12/05 21:11 · For: Lurking in Shadows
Once again, your characters and imagery are excellent. You made Knockturn Alley feel like the normal place to be and Diagon Alley seem silly and frivolous, just by letting the reader into Cody's head. His loneliness was palpable, as was his power when he was attacked. I loved the way you described the scene from what an outsider would see; it added an interesting perspective. The tie-ins to Chamber of Secrets are cool, too. I imagine Cody would have nothing but utter disdain for Lockhart.

Cody's character is developing very well. You're good at showing and not telling; for instance, the way he was confused by Colin trying to shake his hand, but also the way he grabbed it before Colin could withdraw it. It goes a long way towards showing how unused to pleasantries he is but how he's willing to learn to ease his loneliness. Also, "Cody smirked at the boy’s innocence." It's obvious that Cody may be underdeveloped in some ways, but frighteningly wise beyond his years in other ways.

Obligatory grammar corrections: "they’d seen" should be "they'd have seen" and "as firm as ever" should be "as firmly as ever." Also, I think the "can" in this sentence is a typo: "The person was dressed in gray robes can covered his entire body."

Now as for the nudity at the end, I can see how it may be off-putting to some people, but you did a good job with it. Sometimes sex and nudity and in fan fic can become unrealistic, but that seemed perfectly reasonable for a boy who knows both too little and too much about sex. And the final sentence was a striking display of how far from normal development he is. Another great chapter!

Name: BlackClaude (Signed) · Date: 09/12/05 20:37 · For: The Dangerous Decision
Your imagery is amazing; I knew from the first few paragraphs that your story was something special. The setting was described exquisitely and the characters are already rich and interesting. You portrayed Cody very well; just from one chapter I got the sense of his strength and maturity, yet also his insecurity, and the timeless nature of his magic. Necromancy is a fascinating subject; I think that the darker side of magic will do well in the HP universe. I'm very interested to see how it fits into Hogwarts. One grammar thing to watch out for: “Come for you lessen?” The raspy voice said. Here, "The" should be lowercase because it is a continuation of the sentence. Also: "What little hair he had were long, stringy strands." "Hair"and "were" don't agree since hair is singular; you'd probably need to reword that. Same with "A tiny set of spectacles were," the "were" should be "was." There are also a few adjectives that should be adverbs, such as "he snapped his boney fingers menacingly loud" and "with absolute no assistance." So that was a few grammar things; I'd just take an extra look before submitting or get a good beta reader. Your story, description and character development, however, are flawless so far. I'm very impressed and can't wait to read more!

Name: Halfbloodme (Signed) · Date: 09/07/05 8:05 · For: The Secret Curse

Author's Response: I will, I will..thanks for reading. I'm all hacked off, because in Book six Michael Corner turns out to be in Harry's year, not Ginny's...dammit. Now I have to change a bunch of things.

Name: sadako (Signed) · Date: 07/01/05 10:15 · For: The Secret Curse
i bit confusing, but i still wonder how it will fit in with the story from the book.

Name: shadowwings182 (Signed) · Date: 06/19/05 14:08 · For: Forest Fight
PLZ update soon!! I wanna know what it is!!

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