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Name: Traggles (Signed) · Date: 07/01/06 17:25 · For: Harry's Worries
That is a very good story. It's nice that Lupin told Harry that he, Mrs. Weasly and Sirius care about Harry and want to protect him.

Name: Tinka Blinka (Signed) · Date: 03/16/06 8:59 · For: Harry's Worries
interesting...very interesting i like...i like... good, yes very good... ya, so, keep writing cause ya, all of the above.

Name: x2pttrclue32 (Signed) · Date: 09/10/05 15:59 · For: Harry's Worries

Interesting story...

Again, I like the mood that you set in the story...you could feel the...sadness in the story, which is good. :D Some people don't really have that setting, so it's not as interesting to read.

I enjoyed your intro into the story the most, the second paragraph. The way you wrote it was, in my opinion, very JKRish.

However, I thought, on the whole, that the story was a bit confusing. I wasn't really sure where it was going or what Harry was worried about (as mentioned in your summary). I think you could have explained it a bit more in the second part of the story. I understood the fight that Molly and Sirius were having, and the confusion Harry got from it, but I didn't really feel as if I could understand Harry's thoughts. Despite that though...I thought Harry was pretty much IC. I don't think you overdid the angst. :D

And now for something little...I noticed that a few times, you had some formatting problems...it sort of confused me...just remember to put a blank space between each new paragraph. :)

Like I said at the beginning...it was a very interesting story that enjoyed very much. :)

Name: Friday The 13th (Signed) · Date: 05/22/05 16:32 · For: Harry's Worries
Short and sweet. I think that is exactly how Harry was feeling. I mean- he loves Sirius but Molly is like somewhat of a motherly figure to him so- whats a guy to do? I like the little touches you added like Sirius messing with Harry's hair, it really pulls it all together and makes it seem real. 10/10

Name: FerretsGirl (Signed) · Date: 03/25/05 9:38 · For: Harry's Worries
Ok I guess. I don't want to be a put down so I'll give you a 10 ok?

Name: Kelsid (Signed) · Date: 03/16/05 16:20 · For: Harry's Worries
Very good, and interesting too. I look forward to an update.

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