Reviewer: Windy Silvermist
Date: 06/23/09 15:48
Chapter: Chapter 14: When the Going Gets Tough

AAUUUUUUUUUUUGGGGGGGGGGGGHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!! How could you?How can you kill your own creation like that. That is sad. Anyway why would Lord Voldemorts horecrux be in a hat?????? That was not worth Giselle dieing. Meanie Meanie Meanie. I feel better now. I hope you finish the next chapter soon so I can find out what happened to Wendy. I hope shes alright. Anyway good story meany for killing off Giselle, yadda, yadda, WRITE, yadda, yadda meaniebobeniemonkeybutt.

-Windy who is rather upset

Reviewer: saveginny417
Date: 02/10/07 14:25
Chapter: Chapter 1: Prologue

OK, just reread the whole thing, and OMG. Steph is amazing. I've said it before, and I'll definitely say it again, but I mean it every time. I also just realised Halle, Mille, and Giselle all have double l's in their name...but whatever. Hooray for Steph!

Author's Response: LOL! I never noticed that! Maybe I should make it a super-awesome plot point!

Reviewer: murgatroid
Date: 01/23/07 21:31
Chapter: Chapter 14: When the Going Gets Tough

wow, i just read this again as part of my Murgie Review Special, and i havr to say, this is the best chapter ever. I love it. Even though Giselle dies and all. It is just so well written and set out and everything!!

Anyhoo, a little birdie told me that updatification is on its way? (well, not really a little birdie. actually, it was you =) )

Author's Response: hahaahaa! *is a bird* Technically, I'm a sheela >.> it will! soon!

Author's Response: hahaahaa! *is a bird* Technically, I'm a sheela >.> it will! soon!

Reviewer: mylovelyminion64
Date: 11/07/06 5:46
Chapter: Chapter 14: When the Going Gets Tough

Well i needed a new account cause it wouldnt send through a new password and i had forgotten my old one.... GREAT STORY!!!! i realise that u killed her off to add affect to the story.....but now wot r u going to do......with love manda

Author's Response: Hee. I will sort it out. And yes. I'm not in bed. I'm a rebel like that =) Thank you, Mandy Moo, for reading through. *hugs* ♥

Reviewer: Yammo
Date: 10/27/06 21:02
Chapter: Chapter 14: When the Going Gets Tough

This is an awesome fic! Giselle, Halle and the rest sound like wonderful people. I like your narrating style too, it's very nice and well-paced. I like Ron and Hermione's relationship... it's so endearing. (:

Author's Response: Why, Thank you for such a nice review! I've been feeling rather down about this fic lately, and I can't quite seem to write the ending, but your comments, THANK YOU! ♥

Reviewer: saveginny417
Date: 09/28/06 15:18
Chapter: Chapter 1: Prologue

Steph's back. YAAAAAAAAAYYYYY!!!!

Author's Response: JULI! *spins round in a circle and loves* I'm back! ♥

Reviewer: murgatroid
Date: 09/20/06 5:14
Chapter: Chapter 14: When the Going Gets Tough

HEY STEPH! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! !
Guess what??? i only have 6 more days of school left, EVER!!! WooT!!
I swear i havent been stealing the red drink again...
So anyways, where was i? oh yeah, WooT WooooooT!!!!!!!
And there was something else i was going to say...... um..........

OH! New chapter! is there one coming ? ? ^_* and there was something else.........

nope. its gone oh well. Message To ALL Peeps WHo Think Caffeine And RED Is Great STuff : You are actually RIGHT!!! but it does funnythings to your brains...

oh btw, did you hear what Bindi Irwin said at the memorial Service for her Daddy today? **crycrytearsniff**

Author's Response: Hey Kali! You've been on the red drink, love. =D. The chapter's coming slowly; I have part of it written, but a crucial part I'm yet to write. With Holidays starting this weekend, I should be able to write Chapter 15 and keep you lot happy.

Thank you for sticking by me after such a long break; I love you for it!

Reviewer: Fly to Dawn
Date: 09/05/06 10:50
Chapter: Chapter 11: Illusions in Christmas Crackpots

What an amazing chapter - full of humour, full of fun, and of course full of wonderful writing. The way you write gives a light-hearted, joyful touch to the chapter, though I know some chapters can be very dark. The difference between the two can be even described as shocking - but somehow you can write them both in one story. Also, I think your writing is....modern, if that's the right word. Sort of like pop music if you think JKR's world to be classic music. And I think it's perfect. Of course in reality pop and classic would never go well together as far as I know, but your style, your writing, makes a brilliant Post-Hogwarts' world, and it's still linked closely to the original HP world. Bewitching.

Malicious Intentions is, I think one of the most creative Post-Hogwarts-Next-Generation stories out there. I feel that most of them can be somewhat cliched. And I think that's because many authors tend to have Voldemort killed, dead - and the world is at peace. But in Malicious Intentions, Voldemort's alive, if not a little weak, and that adds the spice to the story.

First, some errors - ".... She picked up her books and returned slowly to the Ravenclaw Common room....." It was just that one. All of the other 'common room's in this story weren't capitalised.
Also, "....Isn’t that the home of kangaroos and Billywigs and crocodile’s?...."
'Crocodile's' should be 'Crocodiles'.
In the last few paragraphs about the teenage girl in her bedroom, I found one typo: "...She dropped here hands to the keyboard.... " 'Here' should be 'her'.
And "Singular. Solitary. Lone. Whatever way you want to put it, Halle Weasley was alone."
Since this story is in the past tense, I think 'want' would be better as 'wanted'.
One last thing...it may just be me, but I feel that this sentence is a bit awkward, with a lot of commas, although I loved the metaphors you used.
"Somehow, the noise from the Great Hall had drifted up several levels, nearly reaching the Astronomy Tower, making Halle feel about as wanted as an ant at a picnic.
I would maybe change the last comma into a dash.

Onto the juicy bits that I loved! The jokes in the first few scenes were very nice, and I couldn't help smiling a it as I read the story. I thought Nick's joke wasn't bad either, although I could really imagine everyone groaning at him! It was a brilliant way of showing us the Christmas merriment, and I enjoyed it as much as the three girls.

I also loved your description of the Ravenclaw common room. It sounds very unique and certainly very Ravenclaw-ish. The fact that Da Vinci painted Mona Lisa when he was at Hogwarts' is a nice, magical twist which I loved.

My favourite part of the story was, though, the scene with Miles and Halle. First, Miles is a great person - I would fall in love with him if he ever existed. And he's a clever Ravenclaw, a childhood Shakespeare. “How much did you miss me? Enough to kiss me?” he rhymed playfully. That line is just amazing. Miles is such a great OC!
His stories about Australia were very original, and felt fresh. In fanfiction, you get all these American witches and wizards...but never Aussie! The ancient magic of the Aborigines really makes me shiver....I think you would have to write a story about that too ;)
She loved hearing of other cultures and types of magic.
Halle's enthusiasm for knowledge really shows that Ravenclaw is a good House for her. But of course, she's a true Gryffindor. It tells us how we can have lots of different qualities from each House.
Halle Weasley would be his, sooner or later.
How I love this line! I think Halle and Miles are perfect for each other. *starts shipping*

One thing I wasn't sure of was when the Winter holidays ended and when the lessons started. I was a bit confused there...

The last few paragraphs about Gryffindor Tower getting re-constructed was certainly very happy. It made me smile to see the three girls back safe and sound. The last song was a nice, heart-warming one which was perfect for the occasion.

One question I have...it's about the formatting. (Sorry, I'm curious)
Sometimes you break the paragraphs with the < h r > tags, sometimes you divide them with the three asterisks: * * *
Is there a particular reason for that?

Otherwise, I enjoyed reading this chapter immensely...it's now officially my favourite chapter out of Malicious Intentions!

Author's Response: Dawnie, It's taken me so long to reply to this, and I absolutley love you for this review. It's kind, helpful and so completley wonderful you've surprised me into silence.

As you know, I'm fixing Malicious Intentions for the QSQ, and thanks to you, this chapter will be easier than most.

Your suggestion about Aboriginal magic has really got me thinking. I can only say, though, that I wouldn't do the true magic justice :)

The * * * and the < H r > tags hve some differences. The * * * means the same people, but a different time, and the < h r >tag indicates new people. I hope that clears it up and I haven't slipped too much :)

Again, I cannot thank you enough for this review, you almost made me giddy with happiness... okay, well, you did :) ♥

Reviewer: JewellPotterFan
Date: 08/28/06 11:32
Chapter: Chapter 1: Prologue

Hey, great story! Don't have time to read the other chapters at the moment, but i will soon! ;*)

Author's Response: Thanks! I hope you come back soon!

Reviewer: Klaine
Date: 08/17/06 13:10
Chapter: Chapter 14: When the Going Gets Tough

i have really enjoyed this story. it is written very weel. can't wait for the end!

Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: Klaine
Date: 08/17/06 12:59
Chapter: Chapter 14: When the Going Gets Tough

i have really enjoyed this story. it is written very weel. can't wait for the end!

Author's Response: Thank you for the kinds review! Reviewers make the worl go 'round :):) ♥

Reviewer: saveginny417
Date: 08/13/06 12:51
Chapter: Chapter 14: When the Going Gets Tough

You even told me someone was going to die! back in like November or something... man, am I dumb...

This is taking far to long to sink in. You'd think I'd be over the death of a fictional character by now.... alas, poor Giselle! *is sad* 10/10 anyway, though, Steph! *I finally wrote an articulate review. Aren't you proud of me?*

Author's Response: You'd think I'd be over the death of a fictional character by now.... *giggles* I heart you Juli. And I *did* warn you, teehee! I am oh so proud of you!!!

Reviewer: lily_evans34
Date: 08/11/06 11:41
Chapter: Chapter 1: Prologue

Steph! This is amazing! I can't believe I haven't read this before now! The plot's soooo cool, I can't wait to read more! *goes to read next chapter*

Author's Response: Rach! Thanks for stopping by! I love when I get Turnips reviewing, it makes me fele so connected! You might notice that I chnaged the plot after chapter 3, when I decided to kill someone :) Thanks for stopping by!

Reviewer: ligiligirl
Date: 08/10/06 10:40
Chapter: Chapter 14: When the Going Gets Tough

Well, I can understand it a little bit, and judging by that, killing her off does nothing, plot-wise. It actually makes no sense whatsoever. If I read your explanation correctly, there is now no point to this story, because you need all three to do the stuff, and without Giselle, Halle and Mille are just two cousins who happened to be born on the same day. I assume that this shall be explained in later chapters, but untill then, I don't think she's dead (at least not completely).

I would be glad to beta for you. Maybe I'll learn to understand it along the way. But I don't care if you say no, so long as it gets fixed.

-gilly (Jill-ee)

P.S: Do you pronounce Halle like Hal-ee or Hey-lee?

Author's Response: In the beginning, killing Giselle may have added nothing to the plot. There is a sequel planned, that much I can assure you of. I only hope that you find that more to your … taste, I suppose. I won’t discontinue this story bust into tears, flame you, report you or even follow you up. I won’t even ignore you, because your opinion counts. The story line was changed after chapter three, as a result of loosing more than seven months worth of work and over 20,000 words. To you this may no be deemed important, but to me, this was an incredible blow. I didn’t think I could write the same story, so I altered the line to my liking/ I admit, the previous chapters have been childish, especially chapter 3, but I was a green writer, and if you’re a writer yourself you would understand.

I have added in hints as to the outcome of the “three” and I have no worries whatsoever whether you choose to accept that explanation, but it’s in there, and has been for about a year now, since publication.

As for your offer to beta, I do not think that will ever happen. You may be a PI accredited beta yourself, as am I, but I do not think much of your manner. You could I suppose be exceptional good at plot development, and I know I’m rather bad, but you really should consider as how you come across to readers and authors.

Giselle is most definitely dead, and it’s pronounced Hal-lee. The girls refer to her as “Hal” at some times.

And, despite your crude way of putting it, you criticism has been taken into account, and again, if you feel you need to reply to this Response, don’t spam my page with unnecessary flaming, contact me via my author’s page.

Reviewer: ligiligirl
Date: 08/10/06 10:28
Chapter: Chapter 14: When the Going Gets Tough

OK, Lurid, here's the thing. I like this story, I really do, but the last two chapters have been so confusing that I have no clue at all as to what's going on. PLEASE, PLEASE get a beta to edit this. Go through the PI beta listings, or SOMETHING, PLEASE. There's a lot of stuff that I didn't comprehend. and your (unintentional, I'm sure) overuse of itallics in all chapters didn't help. I don't mean to be rude, but I really, really want to finish reading this story, and editing it seems to be the only possible way.

PLEASE!
-gilly

Author's Response: Okay.

PLEASE, PLEASE, refrain from assuming I don't already have a beta. She is wonderful, and not nearly as nastily pedantic as you. Perhaps Nasty is the wrong word, and I apologise. An author making constructive criticism or even just plain old criticism about my story does not bother me. Honestly, you write, to learn to write better. The italics are indeed unintentional, a small typo on my behalf. But you, an author who I assume has just ignored my obvious (thank you, beta!) comment at the end, to insult one of the most wonderful beta's, that is quite annoying. You cannot pretend that you have not noticed my "Thanks to Lori" comments. If you had missed them, simply because an author's note is beneath you as far as reading goes, then you have also missed some very important comments I had made. If you do not wish to continue reading this story then it will be no blow to me, by all means, go ahead. I'm considering your comment, and might I also add - Capital letters come across as anger, shouting, or a particular author thinking they are supremely superior, catch my drift? If you must reply to this Response, PLEASE if you must; contact me via my author’s page. – Lurid.

Reviewer: murgatroid
Date: 08/09/06 21:12
Chapter: Chapter 14: When the Going Gets Tough

ok *breathe*, now that i have *breathe* calmed.. down *breathe*, i will have a chance to say something.

O.M.G. you killed a character. Thats strong, Steph, are you proud? im sorry i haven't already reviewed, but i stopped getting emails!!!! i know, traumatising... So one day, i go online to check, and most of my faves have been updated, several of them more that once!!! agh!! any way, hi, how are you? havent talked to you for ages!

Stuff this, im sending you an email...

Author's Response: I know about the email thing, how annoying is it? I didn't even get an email ot say this was accepted! I just got 12 reviews, lol! *loves* wrote the funeral many months ago, probably more like a year. I crfied writng the funeral... it was... sad. It was before the second chapter got rejected so many times becasue her hair was originally red, like Ginny's. So more than a yera ago, Giselle died. I just had to ... get the story up to speed. :)

Reviewer: murgatroid
Date: 08/09/06 21:01
Chapter: Chapter 14: When the Going Gets Tough

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Author's Response: *hands chocolate*

Reviewer: _ ilovegredandforge _
Date: 08/08/06 20:13
Chapter: Chapter 14: When the Going Gets Tough

I cannot believe that Giselle is gone! I'm so sad! It was an awesome chapter besides that, but Giselle, dying to save Harry... I can't even talk about it. Great Chapter though. And the baby being born, Janus, what an interesting name. Halle must be excited. Oh man, Giselle... But, now there's only Millie and Halle, are they still as powerful without Giselle? I guess I'll have to wait. Great story!!!!
-Catie

Author's Response: *evil snickers* You shall see (RE: power of Millie and Halle) Janus' name came form Fantastic Beatss and Where to find the,. one ngiht I went off in search of a Male Wizards Name. He was the one who faked him death by Lethifold :D Thanks for the review, Catie! ♥

Reviewer: saveginny417
Date: 08/07/06 19:02
Chapter: Chapter 14: When the Going Gets Tough

I know I'm mucking up your review page. sorry, Steph. I can't express more than one thought at a time.

I think I will just go read Contemplating Love and come back and actually review this when I'm sane. good idea, eh?

Author's Response: :) Contemplating ove with definetly give you our Miles fix.

*drools* Miles....

Reviewer: saveginny417
Date: 08/07/06 19:00
Chapter: Chapter 14: When the Going Gets Tough

you... killed... AH!

Author's Response: I'm sorry! It turned out differently to what I Imagined, that's for sure. I had her dying from chapter... 3 or 4? when I got writers block from the first time, anyway :):) Oh Juli, words cannot express my... feeling? That you wrot ethis review?? ♥

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