Great story! Kudos on an awesome chapter! I loved how Lily was standing there listening to Sirius and James' conversation! I really love how you've captured the emotions of several different individuals in the story. It's great! Can't wait for an update!
Author's Response: Thanks for your lovely review! It's great to hear you're enjoying it... And yes, Sirius and his big mouth - how awfully embarrassing for James!
Update on the way I hope?!?! Cant wait to see more of the story.. oh how I love seeing the boys together. I like that having the chapter's spaced out in time really lets us see how the boys have changed over the months. Amazing Work!
Author's Response: Yep, the update should hopefully be up within the next few days. I like that you like it so much, and that the time-development is working out properly - thank you! I think the next chapters will mainly focus on the boys (I think), though with at least one interlude from Mrs Potter. Yay - my 49th review!
I really liked how you showed the interaction between James and Sirius and someone that they respected. I loved the end where Siririus waited for James.. I just noticed that in the long paragraph where McGonagall was thinking about how things would be, if your read through there are like 3 sentences in the same form and tense and then one isnt. Sorry I cant be more specific lol! I just wanted to point it out! I loved it! The boys are just great together, you perfectly captured the way I imagined their uniforms would look, the way they would respond to McGonagall etc. It was great! Im really excited for an update!
Author's Response: Wow thanks! Yeah - that paragraph was a quick edit - I'll see if I can fix it, as I hate to see mistakes in my own writing! I loved describing the boys from a teacher's perspective - I know a lot about rebellion in uniforms, so decided to apply it here! And it's quite easy to get an insight into their relationship from the eyes of a respected teacher - in the canon, she always seems to have known James very well. I'm glad you're enjoying it and like my portrayal of this era, as I know it's sort of different from other marauder fics. Update will be up shortly, I hope!
I thought this chapter was really good, but maybe a little short. I dunno. Maybe that's how you write yours. They're definately not boring, if you're worried about that. Please update soon!
Author's Response: Thanks! Update will be arriving soon (hopefully). Glad you're enjoying it so far, and hope to hear from you with subsequent chapters!
I really like your story so far... I hope Green is just as good!
Author's Response: Thank you - yes, read Green!
‘Horace Slughorn often said that James Potter displayed all the symptoms of an overdose of Felix Felicis’ hehe. And you slid Slughorn in too! I love little things like that =) The interaction between McGonagall, Sirius & James is very good, really in characters for all of them. I never really thought about students other tan Snape and Bellatrix etc being into the dark arts, but of course there were others. Although, I don’t think it would be possible to steal books from the restricted section. Harry tried & couldn’t, and there’d probably be lots of old spells &c on them. But it doesn’t exactly matter so..*shrugs* Aww, the end bits v. sad. Nice chapter, I like things from McGonagall’s PoV, they’re unusual and so kind of refreshing. Oh, cool, first reviewer.
Author's Response: Yeah, I had to get old Sluggy in somewhere! He doesn't really seem to have fond feelings for James in HBP, so I thought I should put that in. I'm glad the interaction worked - I tried not to make it too stiff - after all, they are hauled into offices quite a lot! As for the Restricted Section... I hadn't really thought of that, to be honest, though Harry tried when he was eleven, so older students undoubtedly know ways around those spells. And Bellatrix and Snape at al were the extreme versions of those "interested" students - like the Blacks, there may have been a large number of families which were in support of Voldemort, just not actively. There has to be a reason why the ministry is so weak! So anyway, thank you so much for your great reviews - I love feedback! (woah, this is quite a long response!)
Wooh, 2 more chapters to read =D Ahh…bad Sirius, don’t smoke. Actually, that’s got me wondering: do wizards have cigarettes? I’m fairly sure we’ve only seen them with pipes. I like the description of the sun setting. V. atmospheric. Aww, I feel really sorry for Remus, worrying about transforming =) I really like this chapter: go MWPP! Oh, and it's good (as has been said before) how Peter is not a creepy little outsider. It's so annoying when people show him as a tag-along: he was there friend! So, yay for friend-Peter
Author's Response: Hey, thanks for such a nice review! Yeah, smoking is an awful habit - but Sirius is quite the rebel. I assume they have cigarettes - if not an original wizarding passtime, there would be strong influences from Muggle-borns, and Sirius who would want to go against the anti-Muggle sentiment of his family might relish the idea of acting like one! And Remus has always seemed like a bit of a worrier - though who wouldn't be apprehensive about roaming around their school as a monster? Glad you liked the portrayal of Peter.
WOO-HOO! The flow between the boys was absolutely perfect! I felt like you totally captured their personalities, and I loved the way you worked in Lily and her latest boyfriend. I like the boys' personalities very much, especially because so many other stories show Wormtail as a horrible sniveling sidekick, which the boys obviously wouldnt have put up with for a decade! And how Prongs is a "deer" friend, for a moment I almost thought it was an error and then when I caught on I laughed soo hard! Im soo glad that you updated and I cant wait to see more scenes of the Marauders together. Excellently done my dear!
Author's Response: Dear Kerian,
Wow! Thanks for such a great review! Yeah, it took a while to get back to the Marauders, but there it is! I get annoyed when Peter is portrayed as a blatantly horrible person - especially as there had to be something there for James to base his trust on. There will definitely be more scenes with them together!
Aww, poor Mrs Potter. It can't be good that Lucius is the only person she's seeing on a regular basis... You got her emotions across really well, it's v. sad how she barely knows her son :( Keep writing, I'm impatient to see where this is going :)
Author's Response: Thanks for your lovely review! Yeah, it is really sad that she barely knows her son anymore, but I suppose that can happen easily, especially because James has been away at and completely immersed in school for so long... and I hope you won't be impatient for too long - there's another chapter in the queue!
Is there an update on the way? *on my knees hoping you say yess!*
Author's Response: Yeah, it's in the queue - you'll read it soon!
YOU UPDATED!!!!! I could sing! :) :O :P
Author's Response: Great! Thanks, keep singing!
jolly good story
Author's Response: Thanks, Snail!
I loved it!! Poor Mrs. Potter, she doesnt understand that James is doing his best to take care of her! I like the way you explain her isolation, and her growing feelings for a "friend". The way you added what she felt and thought about each comment regarding James was very good. I would like to know if the Potters have house elves though, and I can't wait to see James Sirius Remus and Peter together! Great update!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! Yeah, Mrs Potter's really lonely at the moment - perfectly understandably! I'll explain in one of the upcoming chapters about the house-elf situation... and you'll see the marauders in the next chapter - definitely!
Can we hope for an update soon? I love the story!
Author's Response: Ha ha, I've just updated! Chapter 13 should be up shortly!
Author's Response: Now it's up!
Can we hope for an update soon? I love the story!
Author's Response: Yep, hopefully! I haven't had a chance for a while now - but it's all brewing in my head, don't worry! Chapter 13 will be up really soon, I promise.
I'm kinda wondering what Lily's reaction will be if she sees James. Great story by the way. :) :P :O :D
Author's Response: Thank you! Keep reading and you'll see...
OO!! Soo sorry to have dissapeared for awhile, but you have done quite well! I loved the chapters- and the story is realllyyy getting going! Great work- his meeting with Dung was perfect! Poor James has himself in a real mess! Well done!
Author's Response: Thanks - I've finally moved it on, haven't I! I like writing Dung - he's so smelly (and very different to what James is used to)!
I really liked this chapter, especially the description of Lily at the end (and wondering *why* she's paddling in the lake at dawn). I always thought Mundungus was about the same age as MWPP, but how portrayed him still worked. When I came on and saw there was two more chapters I was like Yay! :D Looking forward to updates.
Author's Response: Thanks! I like this chapter too, because I suppose it got more developed - he finally left home! I never really thought about Mundungus' age, but he always seemed older than say, Sirius, so I made him a few years older than James. I hadn't planned him to be there, to be honest, he just appeared! And that poem at the end inspired the scene with Lily in it - she's quite adventurous in this fic, I think, and paddling in the lake at dawn just seemed to fit - I'll develop that later, I promise! Glad to hear your views!
!!! Evil, evil....git. He imperioused his nephew and would murder his own sister. Bloody hell. I always actually thought that Lucius cares about his family (Narcissa, Draco(even if he doesn't show it)), and didn't think a sister would be any different, but your portrayal of him is really powerful and interesting.
Author's Response: Yeah, I agree, I don't think Lucius is as one-dimensional as I probably made him out to be - you may see a different side to him later... thank you for your review!
This is a really good story line but you obviously spent ages on James's time at his house - if you'd've cut it to two or maybe three simpler chaps, then more people would've perservered to read it. Its good though. Keep it up! I hope to see James with Sirius again. I will check out and review Green now.
Author's Response: Yeah I know, I didn't mean to make him stay so long at his parents' house - it just happened! I didn't know what to cut out though, but I think a lot of what happened there is probably going to be relevant. Thanks for your review!