That was beautiful.
omg. that was a beautiful story, i cried so much. you are an excellant writer!
This was an excellent story! I like your description of torture: no gory, unnecessary detail, but no sugarcoat, either. I like Merona and how you portray her; way too many characters are described as fearless heroes, and the heroism of conquering one's fear, or doing something in spite of it is lost. I really liked the smooth transition from life to death, and the fact that she had to forgive the tormentor of her childhood to move on was very well done. I like how she accepts her mortality and that allows her to be released from ghost state. I give you 150%!
Thank you so much for a wonderful story. I enjoyed it a lot. I liked how you did not sugarcoat the torture; it is what it is. I like the self-sacrifice, sometimes one must die so that many can live. I like how Merona stands up to her jailers and fears, how she keeps her cool head in the face of fire and tells Dumbledore what happened. I love the smooth transition into death, and the acceptance of death. Thank you!
Brilliant. I loved it. You never realy think of the others who must be in the Order, and the work they do and the sacrifices that they make. It was incredibly well-written, descriptive. The ending was surprising - just right. Keep writign!!! I want to read more!!!!
Wow. *sniff, sniff* I liked the end. She truly did give herself up for the order. Hooray for Hufflepuffs and steadfastness!
Another brilliant story! Great Job!
wow... that was amazing. you showed your reader that regardless how unimportant you are, you can still make a difference, and she did, didn't she? Amazing. 100,000,000,000/10
I can't believe it over! so sad. I had little tear. n/j..... Oh well I guess voldemort will get his....
Author's Response: Yeah, hopefully Voldemort will get "his" eventually...
Aww! That's the end, isn't it? *Tear* I really enjoyed this chapter, how you made it so she forgives Giselle and wanders around as a ghost for a while before revealing she's dead. It was just so well writen. So she sacrificed herself for the Order? Aww, that's so sad! I simply loved it.
Author's Response: *Hands kleenex to wipe the tear.* Yeah, she pretty much did sacrifice herself for the Order. I'm happy you loved it, thank you for your review.
Well that was mean of you! lol! j/k. I liked it allot. Is the story done? *sniff* if it is . . . oh well, life must go on . . . lol!
Author's Response: Yes, the story is done. I'm sorry. I'm glad you liked it though, thank you for your review!
oh. thats so sad. i was a bit confused at the beginning of the chapter but it kind of eplained itself in the end. so, she died. does that mean thats the end of this story? well done, it was really well written.
Author's Response: Yes, that is the end, I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thank you for your review.
I absoutly LOVED chapter four. It was just ... WOW! So suspencful and sort of unexpected. I couldn't help but realize that you have referred to chapter five as being the LAST CHAPTER. WHAT?!? Are you serious? It's done?! I really can't wait for it (the 'surprising twist') but ... how can it be over. I'm sorry - I'm just a little over-emotinal at times like this. I seem to be loosing my head. Anyways, I do hope it's quite lengthy and I want to wish you good luck on it. Thanks for writing such capturing and breath-taking story. (I'll be back once the chapter is up).
Author's Response: Yeah, I'm afraid Chapter 5 is the last chapter. It was just right. And there really isn't anything to add. Though I'm glad you are enjoying it. Thank you so much for your review!
Yay! Update! Nice. very nice! lol! I like the idea with the candle, I hope it works! Well type your little fingers off! I need an update!
Author's Response: Thank so much for your review! I'm glad you liked the idea with the candle. I've tried starting the fourth (and possibly final) chapter, but every time I do, I keep getting writer's block. It doesn't help that I have a chem. final coming up. But I'm going to try and work on it over the weekend!
Popping by for a quick review =). I like the way you headed with this, the mystery surrounding this mission was very nice, and I like the way you described your character's emotions and such were very nice. I noticed a few run-on areas, nothing too serious, but places where a comma was used where a new thought was sort of beginning. I liked the imagery you used throughout, though I didn't like that you used "dunno" during the dialogue. It seems like it would be an Americanism. The dialogue in this chapter was brief, and left me wondering, so I'll be reading on to find out more. A very good engaging opening =)
Author's Response: Yay! A SPEW review! Thank you for your review, I'm glad you enjoyed it. Is "dunno" really an Americanism? Hm...I just thought it was just "don't know" slurred really fast together and used in both countries frequently. Thank you for pointing that out!
omg! pure genious!!!1 i LOVE IT!!!!!!! plz plz plz update *adds to favs* :P
Author's Response: Yay! I'm glad you like it! And guess what? I DID update (and it got accepted super fast!) Hope you like the next installment! Thank you for your review!
Lucky... I want to meet Voldemort. I want to kick Bellatrix and then take her bread and eat it in front of HER face! mehehehehehehehe! 10!
Author's Response: Guess what? You DO get to meet Voldie in the next chapter. Mwahahaha. THank you for your review! (and the 10.)
This is a cool story! Please keep writing it! lol! 10/10 for you! And your story is going on my favorites list!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoy it! Don't worry, it'll continue, I can't start something without finishing it. Chapter 3 will be up shortly...
Simply brilliant! Please continue!
Author's Response: Thank you!
Very good. You seem to be a great writer and beta. Keep up your amazing work. Oh and please update soon.
Author's Response: Thank you! And don't worry, the next chapter is 'In Queue'.