Reviews For Dance With Me
Reviewer: DinosaurSkateboard
Date: 05/21/07 19:31
Chapter: Dance With Me

wow is all i can truly say to describe the beauty and passion of this sad sad tale

Reviewer: Luna_Lovegood3
Date: 05/20/07 20:38
Chapter: Dance With Me

I am not a H/Hr shipper--but this story made me melt from the inside out!

Reviewer: Dani Marie
Date: 05/20/07 12:37
Chapter: Dance With Me

Aww! That was a sweet story! I was nearly in tears! Fantastic writing!

Reviewer: immortal_evil
Date: 05/20/07 11:21
Chapter: Dance With Me

Very nice story. The turn of emotions in the middle was very well done. Congrats on being featured.

Reviewer: LadyAlesha
Date: 05/20/07 7:36
Chapter: Dance With Me

What a sad and beautiful story. I loved every sentence of it! The beginning was great and your descriptions during the wedding reception scene were superb.

"It's beautiful out here," she whispered.

"Yes," Harry replied softly, staring into his wife's eyes intently, "it certainly is."


Your description up to this point was already fabulous and created a wonderful atmosphere, but these two lines of simple dialogue captured the mood even more perfectly. I donít know why, but the simple words they use here in contrast to the rather elaborate picture your description paints made the atmosphere seem even more real and tangible.

I like how Ron doesnít leave Hermione alone on such a painful day, but tries to help her deal with the loss of Harry, even though he himself is still trying to deal with it. Dancing with Hermione next to her and Harry in her pensieve must have been hard on him, seeing Harry alive in her memories and yet knowing that he is dead canít have been easy, but it shows what a great friend Ron is and how strong his friendship with Hermione and Harry is.

The night air was absolutely perfect. There was not a cloud in the sky, and hundreds of tiny candles emitted a warm glow apon the wedding guests smiling faces.

Thereís a small typo in this sentence, Ďabsolutelyí is spelled with the Ďeí after the Ďtí. Then in the second sentence it should be Ďuponí, not Ďaponí that word doesnít exist as far as I know.

During their seventh year, Hermione and her close friends said 'I love you' to each other almost everyday. It became a natural thing for them to say to each otherÖ

Maybe this is just me, but I find it really hard to picture Ron, Harry and Hermione saying ĎI love youí to each other all the time. It sure shows how friendship can grow into real love when Harry suddenly changes the words slightly, but I find it a bit hard to believe.

"Hey," Ron said quietly as he saw her eyes open. "How are you doing?" he asked cautiously. He knew this was her first anniversary without Harry.

I feel the last sentence of this paragraph is slightly redundant. Of course Ron would know that itís their anniversary and with Harry dead for only a few months I donít think he could forget either that or that Hermione is alone on the anniversary.

I didnít mean to sound like I didnít like your story, because I honestly did. Itís very emotional and made me incredibly sad, but your writing is also very beautiful!

Reviewer: amsterdam
Date: 05/20/07 3:01
Chapter: Dance With Me

such a moving story and clee would be a good author

Reviewer: Ginny_Plays_Piano
Date: 05/18/07 21:14
Chapter: Dance With Me

Ok.....that started out H/Hr and kinda ended up R/Hr. KInda cheesy.

Reviewer: weirdwendelin
Date: 05/15/07 20:05
Chapter: Dance With Me

i like the pairing off of hermione and harry.. I actually did a story where the ywere together a few years ago before the 5th of 6th book came out.. What made you do this one now after the 6th book?

Reviewer: R_Ravenclaw
Date: 05/15/07 17:46
Chapter: Dance With Me

I don't ship H/Hr, but that was so cute...it was so well-written. Good job!

Reviewer: cocomaloco
Date: 05/15/07 16:48
Chapter: Dance With Me

Aaaaawwwwww That is just the sweetest yet sadest thing, very convincing use of the dream twist, sometimes it just isnt plausible but it works here. I cried,lol. Ace story!!!

Reviewer: Hermohninny
Date: 05/14/07 21:45
Chapter: Dance With Me

i'm crying....that was so sweet....and i don't usually read h/hr fics at all...but that was so good...

Reviewer: Rictumsempra
Date: 05/12/07 15:11
Chapter: Dance With Me

Although I'm more of a Ron/Hermione shipper, it was very touching. I loved it, great job!

Reviewer: hansangel93
Date: 05/11/07 20:17
Chapter: Dance With Me

that was great! i creid because it was so good!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Reviewer: Mischief_managed01
Date: 05/11/07 15:54
Chapter: Dance With Me

AWWW im cry that is so sad

nice way to tie the weddig in to the story LOVE IT

Reviewer: JustLikeHermione77
Date: 05/09/07 18:57
Chapter: Dance With Me

awww.. that's soooo sad!! great story!

Reviewer: Sophia Loren
Date: 05/09/07 18:26
Chapter: Dance With Me

Oh. My. Goodness. That was very sad, indeed. I liked it, though. :)

Reviewer: Wicked Wench
Date: 05/09/07 4:40
Chapter: Dance With Me

Wow! I was a bit surprised when this was a memory. What a beautiful lament! You captured her sadness well.

Reviewer: Harry_Ginny_Love
Date: 05/08/07 16:10
Chapter: Dance With Me

AHHH so cute, yet sad!!

Reviewer: liquid_silver
Date: 05/08/07 14:44
Chapter: Dance With Me

this is so touching! i love the imagery. i don't see how you'd be able to continue this, but if you think of any way, please do!

Reviewer: swordfish0
Date: 05/07/07 20:58
Chapter: Dance With Me

OH MAN! That was definately a tear-jerker. Except, I don't think Harry and Hermione will ever end up together, but if they did... oooh, this is really good.

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