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Name: BookWorm530 (Signed) · Date: 02/19/12 20:10 · For: Dance With Me
Wow what a shift in emotions in just a short one-shot...completely happiness and love, instantly changed to mourning and sadness. Very impressive plot and writing on this fic!

Name: Silver Selana Moon Potter (Signed) · Date: 11/20/10 10:38 · For: Dance With Me

Name: flamingfawkes (Signed) · Date: 10/19/09 21:44 · For: Dance With Me
i almost cry every time i read this one! it's soo sweet and sad!

Name: ringobeatlesfan4 (Signed) · Date: 07/11/08 20:00 · For: Dance With Me
Hey! I read your bio, and you said you didn't really find a good Marauder story yet, and, as a strong lover of the Marauders *Sirius*, I decided to let you know a few if you didn't hear of any yet:
Kickin' It at the Top by Soap
Recipe for Disaster by fg_weasley (actually, any by fg_weasley)
Love a Duck! by Schmerg_The_Impaler
Caffeine High by Chaos Illusion (chapter 2 is Marauders, chapter 1 is just as good though)

Now, I shall review 'Dance with Me'!!!

I normally never read H/Hr fics, as I like canon ships (except for Draco/Ginny; Luna/Neville; Sirius/Lily; and any OC romances) but this was really good! It's going on my faves!!!! {BeccA}

Name: MerrryD (Signed) · Date: 05/17/08 10:23 · For: Dance With Me

Okay. So, WOW. Your fic was amazing. It was very heartfelt and sad.

Just somethings that I noticed:

Lovely never never change

This doesn't make sense. I think that you mean Love, never never change.

She awoke and shifted and her neck when it began to tingle with pain from the position it was in.

Read this sentance through. Notice every word. Now, tell me why it says, "She awoke and shifted and her neck when it began... lol. I'm pretty sure that you just accidentally added an extra "and."

"Me too Hermione," he said gently, "me too."

There should be a comma before Hermione.

That's it for my nitpicks.

I love how you tell the their story and their feelings for each other in the song. My eyes started to water as I read it. It was beautiful!

"Hermione, wake up," it said again.

Aww. This broke my heart. I honestly thought that Harry had come back.

"Dance with me," Ron whispered as he watched Hermione's eyes follow the memory of her and Harry as they walked out onto the beach.

I orginally thought that Ron was just going to play the song and dance with Hermione in her room. I really like that he took her back to the wedding reception, so that she could be with Harry again.

It was comforting, being held by Ron, and for the first time in months, she was back with her boys.

I love this line. I love how it shows that she doesn't just miss Harry, but she also misses being part of the Trio.

Hermione's gaze remained glued to Harry, and she could have sworn he stared right into her own eyes and mouthed 'I love you.'

Aww. I get goosebumps everytime I read this line. It's so sweet! And sad. My eyes also well up everytime I read it.

You convey the emtions of being sad and lost extremely well through this piece. I'm guessing that at the time you wrote this you were feeling a little sad and lost too. Its great the way that you were able to take these emotions and write a beautiful piece about them.

Great job!


Name: Binka Fudge (Signed) · Date: 05/12/08 19:13 · For: Dance With Me
I loved this, and thats one of my favourite songs. But I am thoroughly depressed now. That last bit reminds me of the end of a Queen video. Great weepy fic.

Name: Pissenoffanis (Anonymous) · Date: 03/21/08 3:59 · For: Dance With Me
Awwww *sniffles* that was so bittersweet... It really reminded me of a line from a song "You paid me well in memories..." I'm glad Hermione looks upon her memories as the happiest moments in her life, not the most painful.

Great one-shot!

PS: Woohooo I'm #100 :)

Name: harrypotter02181994 (Signed) · Date: 02/04/08 17:55 · For: Dance With Me
I really liked this story and I would of cried but I didn't. 'Why?' you ask, well it's because this story is a Harry/Hermione shipper and I'm no big on those. But even though I don't approve this ship, I really do like this story.

Name: Mariangelo (Signed) · Date: 01/06/08 13:50 · For: Dance With Me
This was an incredibly bittersweet story. Just as one believes that Harry and Hermione are going to sail off into the sunset, you pull the reader into another reality, entirely. Very clever and well executed.

It was comforting, being held by Ron, and for the first time in months, she was back with her boys.

This line moved me as I believe this is just how Hermione would have felt.

Your story was short, sweet and you've written a very romantic piece. Well done.

~The Marauding Cupcake, Gryffindor Review Crew

Name: Niadora (Signed) · Date: 11/18/07 22:42 · For: Dance With Me
This is so beautiful and sad...lovely work...and I love the song too...

Name: Heiress_of_Insanity_ (Signed) · Date: 10/31/07 15:24 · For: Dance With Me
Well, I must first say, I don't ship H/Hr in the LEAST, but this story brought me close to tears. I really love the last line of the story:

Hermione's gaze remained glued to Harry, and she could have sworn he stared right into her own eyes and mouthed 'I love you.'

It's so heartbreakingly sad, but very sweet too, no matter who the characters are =) Excellent job!~


Name: hermyOniny94 (Signed) · Date: 10/15/07 5:48 · For: Dance With Me
btw, PLEASE write(in this case, type) more fanfic about the harry/hermione ship:) i'd love that! i'm a hopeless(well, not exactly), h/hr maniac:P pls write more h/hr!!! plus, a happy ending please... i don;t wanna cry again! i cried many times here... on this website, i mean....T.T lol, yea, KEEP THE H/HR WORK UP!!! I'LL REVIEW ALL OF THEM!!! if i got time, and if you actually write them:) thanks and pls, make happy endings aboout h/hr... JKR didn't put then together, but thats all about her. pls, pls, pls.........

Name: hermyOniny94 (Signed) · Date: 10/15/07 5:38 · For: Dance With Me
SOOO SAD!!! omg, no wonder its was the featured story, people now have a taste of nice, but sad stories... T.T i cried. you were great! this touched me, my heart and soul... you were great! it was really sad, yet it was great! Keep up the splendid work!!!

Name: Tails (Signed) · Date: 09/26/07 18:01 · For: Dance With Me
Oh my... this has never happened before but your fic made me cry lol. It's so sad... you just keep doing this to me with you and your stories lol. Keep up the fantastic writing!

Name: hermione_at_heart (Signed) · Date: 06/23/07 9:51 · For: Dance With Me
This is such a beautiful one-shot. The beginning is so perfect that when you let on it was a dream, it was even more sad. It is a wonderful piece of writing though and the imagery allows the reader to feel exactly in the moment alongside Hermione.

Well done!

Phily :)

Name: Hokey (Signed) · Date: 06/09/07 12:58 · For: Dance With Me
Oh god, my insides are just *aching*! I'm a hopeless Harmonian, and this was written with such realistic emotions that I couldn't help but get sucked in. I'm in tears! This is a very very good fic, you should be proud of yourself! *dabs eyes*

Name: mooglelover333 (Signed) · Date: 06/08/07 20:50 · For: Dance With Me
Oh wow. For sucha quick read, there is so much emotion in this fic. I think your transitions from Pensieve to 'real life' and 'real life' to dream are all very smooth, and I think the inclusion of the lyrics is marvelous. I've never really been a Harry/Hermione shipper, but reading this could be very convincing. :D

And I can't wait to do a banner for this for the BA monthly challenge! I just hope I can duplicate the same degree of emotion in it as in your words.

Name: tonks_the_dreamer (Signed) · Date: 05/28/07 17:01 · For: Dance With Me
aw, thats so sweet!

Name: MagicHappens7 (Signed) · Date: 05/23/07 15:46 · For: Dance With Me
amazingly written! so cute and so sad =[ but amazingly awesome! good job!

Name: Lasweetie (Signed) · Date: 05/22/07 11:18 · For: Dance With Me
Wow. This is a really amazing fic. I loved it. Favorites!

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