Excellent job, you really captured the nature of a sonnet as well as still portaying an image, and feeling. This really was very well written, the verse flowed smoothly and the rhyme was belivable. Your word choice is excellent. I love the line, "Await the dawn for madness to be sane." The only think I might consider working on is a couple places where your thoughts seem fuzzy, for example, "moon at full last through night". Perhaps the word order here merely was switched around, but the line doesn't read as well as the rest of them. Grammatically (even for a poet) it doesn't make sense. Overall- Bravo!
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! I've looked at that line (moon at full...) and you're right. It seems to be missing something, so I'll try and work on making it make sense. I've always had trouble getting my point across clearly- either I hit something right on or can't get the right words to flow. Anywho... that's just me rambling. Thanks again for the review!
Excellent job, you really captured the nature of a sonnet as well as still portaying an image, and feeling. This really was very well written, the verse flowed smoothly and the rhyme was belivable. Your word choice is excellent. I love the line, "Await the dawn for madness to be sane." The only think I might consider working on is a couple places where your thoughts seem fuzzy, for example, "moon at full last through night". Perhaps the word order here merely was switched around, but the line doesn't read as well as the rest of them. Grammatically (even for a poet) it doesn't make sense. Overall- Bravo!
Beautiful! I just love Shakespeare. I admire poems like this. I myself have difficulty in following meters so rather not go there ^_^
P.S. You've inspired me to go massacre a bit of Shakespeare (just for fun) *L*
Author's Response: YES! I've corrupted another mind! Thanks for reading my poem and I hope you enjoy doing Shakespear a bit of damage (it can be quite entertaining at times)
This si good, I didnt really understand the last line ut that's probs not ure fault, it's becos i'm quite slow. :)
Author's Response: I admire your honesty about the last line. I've never written a sonnet before so I don't expect my first try to be perfect. Thanks for reviewing!
I really enjoyed reading your poem, it was cool! Check mine out sometime - you can maybe give me tips!
Author's Response: I'll definitely check your poems! I'm looking forward to reading them when I find a chance!
AWESOME!!! Definate 10/10! I love Shakespeare; I even memorized some of his sonnets. "Await the dawn for madness to be sane." is my favourite line in your incredible poem.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I really love that line too. It just worked with what I was trying to portray in my poem.
this is a really nice poem! i just submitted a lupin poem... but its no way near as good as yours! i really love poetry. people say its really overrated...but this sure as heck isnt!
Author's Response: I'll keep an eye out for your poem! Lupin is one of my favorite characters. I read nearly anything about him.
Damn good, given how hard it is to write a poem that keeps to such strict rules. I'm a huge Shakesperean sonnet fan, so I have to say I wasn't sure what I'd make of it. The iambic pentameter slipped on a couple of lines, which broke the rhythm slightly, but I've found it's near impossible not to have to break from that occasionally. Trying to find words that are at once beautiful, convey what they want to and contain the right number of syllables is very hard, so well done!
Author's Response: Wow. Thank you very much! I'm quite new at writing Shakesperean sonnets so your comments mean a lot to me!
That's very good. I don't really like poems that are like that - I'm a sucker for rhyming couplets- but I think that was really good!
Author's Response: Then I thank you for taking a chance at something different! I like couplets too. Most of my poems (sadly none of which have any relation to Harry Potter whatsoever) are written in couplets.
Oh, me like! Me like very much!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading my poem! You're so kind! This day just keeps getting better and better!
