The description in this was fabulous - I loved the way you built up the atmosphere of the day by depicting the beautiful landscape and the daffodils. Severus was surprisingly romantic with his perfume, but it fitted perfectly with how his character changes because of love. The proposal itself was done brilliantly - it was not overly mushy and so again, very in character for Severus. Finally, the ending was very sweet; it's obvious how in love Severus is to know, without understanding, that Maeve is saying she loves him. This story left me with a wonderfully warm, fuzzy feeling and a deeper appreciation of Severus Snape. Well done!
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This was a wonderful story! I first read "Snape's Birthday", which I quite enjoyed. I love how this story fits together with that one, they are a very nice pair. I also like how you started each piece - very slowly, moving forward without rushing, almost suspenseful (I especially noticed this suspenseful beginning in "Strange Meeting", which I also read). Your characters are so well done, particularly Severus but especially your original character Maeve. She is a great character and seems very real in the sense that JKR herself could have written her into Hogwarts Castle. You also have an amazing way with words - your descriptive language is beautiful! And your dialogue is very natural and easy to read. What I really liked about "Maeve's Birthday" was the proposal. I was not expecting that, and it was wonderfully done! Both birthday stories had a terrific sense of style and atmosphere and were so easy and enjoyable to read. Amazing work!!
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This is the first I've read about Maeve and Severus, but as you said in your summary, it was enjoyable just on it's own.
Your descriptions of spring are wonderful - the sentence about Maeve not having to wear an extra layer was very creative! The long sentences flow really well together, and the movement of Severus touching Maeve's hair was written so delicately - you got me hooked from the very first paragraphs!
The present from Severus was a perfect choice. I wondered what it might be, but a bottle of perfume! It's a wonderful choice.
The proposal caught me off guard, but it was my favourite part of the story..clever Severus!
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cool-i never thought that anyone could like snape, but it was awesome anyway!!
Author's Response: I know. He's so unlovable! And thank you for the review!
Really, really liked this. only one slight criticism. I'm very impressed that you know some Irish (where did you learn it?) and although "Ta gra agam duit" (I'm not bothering with the fadas) is correct and means "I have love for you", as a native speaker, I think people would generally not use that phrase, and would be much more likely to say "Ta me i ngra leat" or "Taim i ngra leat" which means "I am in love with you". Still ... your knowledge of Ireland and all things Irish is most impressive.
a slight correction:
Love collided with the spiral(l)ing freedom of her spirit as it escaped the confines of her body.
As always I love your descriptions but the line that struck me is: “I won’t deny you have a sharp tongue but real cruelty involves much more than that. You have never hurt anyone, have you?”
because it's definitely true ... although sometimes people are deemed cruel because of the things they say. It's what they do that defines cruelty. And somehow she indirect struck him where it hurts because he had done things to people...
Lovely piece ... the emotions between Snape and Maeve is evident and subtle. I wish I can write romance the way you do. ^_^
That was very beautiful. I really liked it. The descriptions of spring sounded really,really good. I particularly liked Severus's proposal. I thought that was unique and very different. Great job.
Very detailed descriptions. Wonderful allusions. I enjoyed this very much, not the way I would picture Snape in a relationship. Great job on showing different sides of Snape. His sweet and kind side showed but his dark, kind of ominous side peeked through as well. Creative story. -- 8
Tomorrow is a national holiday, so I decided to keep Severed Soul for that occasion, as I will have nothing to do for two days! But until that I'm reading your companion pieces and I really like them.
Something far more elemental was needed to bring fire and ice together without melting one or freezing the other and now its work was done. That was such a powerful imagery that I got a tingly feeling, after reading it.
I also like how Severus proposed. It was sweet. Well, I've never thought I would use sweet and Severus in one sentence, but look what I had just done! *hihi* Thanks for sharing this with us!
Cute and fluffy with great description. The only thing I didn't like is that I couldn't really find the Snape we see in the books through Harry. However, it was nicely done. Rating this a 7.
Author's Response: Harry would never have seen Snape in this light! LOL So in a way it's good that you didn't see Harry's Snape. I must admit, I was a little freer with his characterisation than I would have been in HPDL...this was always meant to be a fluffy thing and is very different to the proposal scene that made it into the main fic. :-) Thanks for reviewing!
One of the best stories I have ever read here. Desciribtions are fabulous; Snape is well-drawn. To me, writing Snape in romance is a risky play.. I'm amazed.. I've been seeing your main fict, Daughter of Light, and intended to read but then give up, because I'm not available for longtime screen reading; After reading this I'll start. Two days per chapter maybe, but I'll read them.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review, Fuzzyink! I agree, Snape and romance is dodgy ground... but he insisted upoun it. LOL Hope you like HPDL as much as you did this one.
Well I will be keeping my fingers crossed that both make it to the end of the other story. They are just soo soo good together. Thanks for the reply - its so nice when authors take the time to do this - it makes it worth while leaving a review.
How sweet. I hope you will be able to bring this into your main story. It would be excellent. Keep up the great work.
Author's Response: I really want to bring this into the main story but the timing is wrong...a bit like the other one-shot. I'll have to see if they both survive until the end of the fic before I decide whether to incorporate aspects from this one-shot. *Keeps her fingers crossed*
What an interesting little scene. I love your spring spirit and I never thought I'd see Snape propose and still be so firmly in character. Nicely done.
Hmmm... sighhh... You make Snape so beautiful without losing the essence of him. In scenes like this, I feel as though I could fall in love with him. And he gets the girl. You're a cruel woman, Maeve, I'll forgive you if only just keep writing this powerful story.