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Name: byebye (Signed) · Date: 06/21/11 14:45 · For: Chapter 9: Letters over Breakfast
Love the Shakespeare references!!! As well as the entire story lol =]=]

Name: ravenclawslostdiadem (Signed) · Date: 03/10/08 17:14 · For: Chapter 11: Ambition Decisions

Name: ravenclawslostdiadem (Signed) · Date: 03/10/08 16:24 · For: Chapter 7: Siobhan, Spiders, and Summoning
Poor Harry! But nice story. I have a friend named Siobhan!

Name: erinotoole (Signed) · Date: 12/15/07 20:53 · For: Chapter 20: Bend and Break
"Bend and Break"...not the song from Keane? If it WAS made in reference to Keane--props to you: here's to good music!

Name: erinotoole (Signed) · Date: 12/15/07 20:09 · For: Chapter 9: Letters over Breakfast
*laughs* i can't begin to tell you how much i LAUGHED at the mention of "Rosen Krantz" and "Guilden Stern"...thank you for being educated!!!

(i'm sure you've heard that a million times, but there you go...)

Name: red haired mom (Signed) · Date: 05/26/07 11:40 · For: Epilogue
That was a very good interpretation of the prophecy. I am not sure that I would go so far as to say that Voldemort is already dead and holding onto physical form though. I liked the way the final battle played out though. It was really good, and the life debts are rather strong magic.

The epilogue was really funny, but you didnít tie up all of the loose ends. Such as was I right about Harryís injuries being caused by Katie. And why in the world didnít you let Harry go tell Sirius that the war was over. You didnít even let him go tell the portrait about putting Bella back in jail. Maybe you have another sequel and I just havenít found it yet. Maybe you are writing the next story in line, but I kind of feel cheated at the amount of information you have left out.

If you havenít, or if you are not planning to, please reconsider and write the third story, or at least a one shot to finish the loose ends.
Anyway, other than all of that, you did a good job and I thank you for the entertainment.

Name: red haired mom (Signed) · Date: 05/26/07 10:39 · For: Chapter 35: The Fall
Made up animals? I tried to find the Granian, in the Lexicon, and in Fantastic Beasts and Where to Find Them. Couldnít find it, so I am assuming that you made it up. If so, good one. I would like a little more information about it though.
Swords, bows and arrows, sledgehammers. What about guns, and other projectile weapons that are far more accurate, and deadly?
Dumbledore? Okay. He had to die sometime. I just hope the others are okay.
One more small criticism, there seem to be more typos and grammar mistakes as the story progresses. I can only assume that it is because you were typing faster to finish the story. Of course as my old Drill Sergeant once told me ďWhen you assume, you make an ass out of u and me.Ē Maybe I am just too much of a nitpicker.

Name: red haired mom (Signed) · Date: 05/26/07 9:32 · For: Chapter 31: The Special Times
In your authors notes you have said that you want the criticisms as well as the compliments. Well as far as compliments go, you are doing an excellent job, you have created original characters, and along with them you are portraying all of the original characters just as they should be. The plot is advancing, and the funny things are funny, the sad, are sad, etc.
The criticisms I have are small. The scenes are not flowing from one to the next. They have a static feel to them. And I am sorry, but the Order has way too many Aurors in it to allow Christopher Bell to remain free. He would have to be turned over to the Ministry.
I still like the story, and I am going to finish reading it, I can only hope that the static nature of the last few chapters was a fluke.

Name: red haired mom (Signed) · Date: 05/26/07 7:55 · For: Chapter 25: Confrontations and Avowal
There are worse things to think about than some girl kissing Harry.
Hermione having a date with a boy, who in HBP was definitely a blood purist, just seems strange. I know you made him different in this, but itís just strange.
Ron typically acted jealous, and canít get over the rivalry of Gryffindor/Slytherin.
Katie took the news rather well about Siobhan. And Harry taking all of her pain, I guess thatís why he cut his finger, and why his leg was hurt. I wonder if anyone will figure that out?
Just glad to see that Harry finally got the better of Bella and it meant she was captured. Letís just hope she doesnít find another way to escape.

Name: red haired mom (Signed) · Date: 05/25/07 23:33 · For: Chapter 20: Bend and Break
You have put so many things into this that I have no idea where to start, or finish for that matter. I really like Siobhan, and her friendship with Harry seems to be a good one. The Halloween Ball sounds like a good idea for inter-house unity.
Ron and Hermione seem to be falling apart at the seams. But then you have them break up. Why? I know that Ron can be a complete jerk at times, and a brainless oaf, when it comes time to be thoughtful. But when all is said and done, he really does love Hermione. Now I know that you have done some pairings that are not strictly canon, but that is one couple that deserve to be together, so I am begging you, please do not let them stay broken up for long.
Harry has been writing in his journal, but Katie hasnít been writing back. Hopefully she will have written back soon and he can read a long letter from her. Also he needs to let Ron and Hermione in on the engagement.
Of course you have already finished this story and I am telling you things that I think should happen, which when you think about it doesnít make much sense does it? So I guess I will just continue with the reviews, and stop with the advice.

Name: red haired mom (Signed) · Date: 05/25/07 21:54 · For: Chapter 12: Snake Among the Lions
I am very glad you decided to write a Slytherin who isnít a Death Eater wannabe. Most people write all of them as pure blood manic idiots.
Ron needs more of Dr. Ubblyís Oblivious Unction applied to the scars on his arms. Thoughts do leave deeper scars than anything else, according to Madame Pomfrey. Anyway good chapters so far. Laughing a lot, and getting mad right along with the characters. Which means you are doing your job very well. Keep it up.

Name: red haired mom (Signed) · Date: 05/25/07 20:08 · For: Chapter 6: Trusting Dumbledore
I may be one of a very few, who believe that Dumbledore is not the greatest wizard to have ever lived. Sometimes I have referred to him as the man behind the curtain, (Wizard of Oz). He is the puppet master of the Order, and of Hogwarts. Never caring how many die, or are hurt, just so Harry can live and defeat Voldemort. All the while, asking for forgiveness for an old manís mistakes. I wasnít even that upset when he died in HBP.
I know Harry believes in him, but I wish and hope that somewhere in Deathly Hallows that J.K. allows his true colors to come to light. Whatever they may be.
The first six chapters here were very well written and I like that Harry is getting better at dealing with his grief. The wedding was funny, and the reception was great. Ron and Hermione Head Boy and Girl, who didnít see that coming?
Harry and Katie getting engagedÖWonderful! So far you are doing a great job with this sequel, and I canít wait to finish.

Name: I so want 2 b magic (Signed) · Date: 05/16/07 10:45 · For: Epilogue
HAHAHAHAHA!!!!!! brilliant story but i would have like to see harry and katie get married. i have also just thought.... this is the first story where harry doesn't end up in a hospital bed after defeating voldemort. nehows brill story i would have commented more but my sisters account wouldn't log out so there you have it. agaiin brilliant story.... can't believe that i didnt know there was a to harry's sixth year..... which i have read before but i haven't read this one ahwell, you are a brilliant author but do ron and hermione get back together or do they go off with siobhan and liam?

Name: potter_mad_4_eva (Signed) · Date: 05/16/07 10:35 · For: Chapter 40: An Act of Mercy
i love how you did that and how you interpreted the prophesy its a brilliant idea

Name: potter_mad_4_eva (Signed) · Date: 05/13/07 14:19 · For: Chapter 19: Acceptance
erm... iwas goiing to say something hee but i forgot. great story though, i like the way its going

Name: potter_mad_4_eva (Signed) · Date: 05/13/07 14:01 · For: Chapter 17: Light is Cast
i like your take on imortality eing worse than death..... i never thought of it that way

Name: potter_mad_4_eva (Signed) · Date: 05/13/07 14:01 · For: Chapter 17: Light is Cast
i like your take on imortality eing worse than death..... i never thought of it that way

Name: I so want 2 b magic (Signed) · Date: 05/13/07 7:27 · For: Chapter 4: Harryís Promise
ok quite an odd twist there but i kinda like it

Name: The_DarkSide (Signed) · Date: 04/22/07 4:38 · For: Chapter 12: Snake Among the Lions

Name: fasterfreddie (Signed) · Date: 03/22/07 13:03 · For: Epilogue
good story gotts even though i tend to be an h an g kind of guy it was very enertaining

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