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Name: hermione4harry (Signed) · Date: 07/27/05 9:30 · For: Friends
Great story so far, I read it all last night but I came back to review for ya! I hope you update soon, I can't wait to see what Hermione does next.

Author's Response: Thanks! Glad you liked it!

Name: Emmarocks4 (Signed) · Date: 07/26/05 12:32 · For: Friends
Wonderful story, and the last chapter had only one problem: its length. I just wish it were longer, and the ending of the chapter leaves a lot to be desired. It just keeps me hoping for the next chapter to be up soon. Please do post it ASAP, because I can't wait to read it. And I agree with Vader that writing H/Hr after HBP is to be commended. I love those two little words: "what if?" Keep up the good work. 1,000,000 out of 10.

Author's Response: Thanks Emmarocks ;). I'm sorry you thought the chapter was short, but very pleased as well. I'm trying to update as soon as I can. Thanks for the review!

Name: Vader (Signed) · Date: 07/26/05 6:49 · For: Friends

Good job on another nice chapter in your story, mspadfoot89. Vader applauds the fact that you have continued with your H/Hr story in the aftermath of HBP, which, combined with comments from JKR herself, largely left the hopes of H/Hr shippers in shambles. Itís good to see, since we wonít be getting our way in the books, that weíll still have a few good fan fics to read.

Of all the H/Hr stories Vader has read, your portrayal of Hermione is one of his favorites. You seem to have a pretty good sense of her. You did a very good job describing how she seemed to be locked in on Harry all the time and how she sort of lost touch with everything else. The part where Anthony had to snap his fingers in her face to get her attention did an especially good job of driving that point home. Good job!

One thing Vader wondered about, however, was whether or not you had Hermione and Anthony handle their break up a little too maturely. Now, Vader doesnít mean to say that at 16/17 years old they are incapable of an amicable break up. The fact that they both agree to end it and go their own ways is fine by it self. Even the parts about how they ask each other if there is someone else, or whether or not they feel the same about each otherÖthat was all good. What threw Vader a little bit is Hermione telling Anthony that he didnít do it for her spiritually anymore. That came off to Vader as something more mid to late twenties (at the earliest) than late teens. Does that make any sense? Also, the fact that Anthony decided to help Hermione sort her boy problems out, Vader felt, was a bit of a stretch too. Well, itís just an opinion.

Vader thinks your beta did a pretty good job, because he couldnít find much in the way of grammar, spelling, or punctuation errors. The only things he found were sentences he might have reworded. For example:

She didnít really understand what was happening to her and was hoping Anthony would help her find the answers she was looking for.

Vader would have reworded the end of this sentence to say, was hoping Anthony would help her find some answers. Something like that just seems a little less wordy. Additionally, the following:

Silence again.

Vader would have put something like, silence fell again or silence fell over them again. Is it even a sentence as it stands now? Vader isnít sure. Again, more of a suggestion.

Overall, this was another enjoyable installment in your story and it left Vader looking forward to your next chapter. He hopes you continue writing despite the revelations brought by the HBP. Great work as always!

Author's Response: Thank you for the long and detalied review, Vader. Reviews like yours really help me write better. As for HBP, alas, so very sad, but funnily enough HBP and the interview gave me the push I needed to keep going with the story. Anyway, I'm glad you liked this chapter, because I was kind of worried about it. I will consider your suggestions as well. Ah, it's nice to know I still have some of my old readers.

Name: Chels2012 (Signed) · Date: 07/25/05 6:00 · For: Indescribable Feelings
Really good! you writing style is just like jk rowlings.

Author's Response: Thanks!

Name: Chels2012 (Signed) · Date: 07/25/05 5:59 · For: Indescribable Feelings
Really good! you writing style is just like jk rowlings.

Author's Response: Wow! That is a really great compliment! Thank you!

Name: AmazinglyDazZled (Signed) · Date: 07/24/05 21:23 · For: Friends
I loved this chapter! You don't know me, but I've been reading silently for quite some time now! I absolutely love this fic, I love the way the characters are protrayed and how it is all set up, it's AMAZING! Anyway, I can't wait for an update, it's an excellent story, and keep up the awesome work! *grins*

Author's Response: I didn't know I had silent readers! Well, thnak you and I'm so happy you enjoy it. And I will try to update sooner this time!

Name: xstill_crazy_bout_ux (Signed) · Date: 07/24/05 19:03 · For: Friends
This is a good story!!!!!! In real life, Hermione should've realized her feelings for Harry before but this is a romance story so there needs to be a bit of a struggle in it.

Author's Response: Thank you! And maybe Hermione would have realized her feelings for Harry sooner, but I don't know if she would have acted upon them. Thanks for the review!

Name: Mermione (Signed) · Date: 07/13/05 12:13 · For: Distance
This is one of the top ten best pieces of fanfiction I have ever read-from mugglenet or anywhere else. Great work and please update! :)

Author's Response: Aw, thanks! That means a lot. I'm trying to update soon, but since the mods aren't reviewing any stories for a couple of days, I guess you'll have to wait a little bit. Thanks for the reivew!

Name: kernkraft_21 (Signed) · Date: 07/05/05 8:40 · For: Distance
hope to see your update soon. cant wait to read it

Author's Response: I'll try to have to have it up as soon as possible, hopefully before HBP comes out. I apoligize again and thanks for sticking by with this story.

Name: Nyqueens18 (Signed) · Date: 07/05/05 0:24 · For: Indescribable Feelings
You are amazing!! Congratulation on such a wonderful story. Im such i big support of the hole harry/hermione relationship i just love reading these fan fiction about them and let me say that your's fantastic. I loved the romance and drama in this story. I'm ashamed of saying this but you made me cry! You did a great job transmitting to the reader harrys and hermiones feelings. Please don't keep us waiting post your next chapter up real soon. It is the only way i keep myself alive while HBP comes out J/K. Thanks again for such a wonderful story and hope to see the next chapter up soon! caroline

Author's Response: Aww, thank you so much. I'm sorry you cried, but I'm happy to hear I can evoke such emotions. Thank you again. And I'm very sorry it's been so long, but honestly, I'm still waiting for my beta to return it, because she has been very busy lately. I apoligize to everyone who is interested in this story.

Name: Beth Brown (Signed) · Date: 07/01/05 13:42 · For: Indescribable Feelings
This was written rather beautifully. The beginning wasn't slow at all. Every story needs a set up and you've managed to accomplish this perfectly. Harry's inner turmoil isn't OoC at all and the conversation between them flows perfectly. The only negative feed back I can give you concerns the part that states "So thatís how they spent their night..." Starting this sentence with "So" makes it sound as if you're listing things. I think it takes the better part of the narrative out of the story. Other than that everything is absolutely perfect.

Name: Beth Brown (Signed) · Date: 07/01/05 13:42 · For: Indescribable Feelings
This was written rather beautifully. The beginning wasn't slow at all. Every story needs a set up and you've managed to accomplish this perfectly. Harry's inner turmoil isn't OoC at all and the conversation between them flows perfectly. The only negative feed back I can give you concerns the part that states "So thatís how they spent their night..." Starting this sentence with "So" makes it sound as if you're listing things. I think it takes the better part of the narrative out of the story. Other than that everything is absolutely perfect.

Author's Response: Thank you so much. It means a lot to me that you would take the time to leave a review. I'm happy you liked the narrative as that is sometimes one of my weaker points. And also thanks for the suggestion.

Name: missmj (Signed) · Date: 06/17/05 6:47 · For: Indescribable Feelings
OOh! Brilliant! I love it! I like how you captured Harry's emotions- not OOC. It's all very believable. I can't wait to read the rest! You get a 10!

Author's Response: Thanks!

Name: TNT_Angel (Signed) · Date: 06/11/05 15:29 · For: Indescribable Feelings
:D Its coming! ITS COMING! lol....I could just guess song titles until you tell me which one it is and I figure out what the next chapters all about, but i've decided not to annoy you more than I already have. :D Bye bye for now!

Author's Response: Sadly, it's not a song title for this chapter ... or the one after that. Hope that's not a big dissapointment. Anyway, thanks for remaining loyal to this story!

Name: kernkraft_21 (Signed) · Date: 06/06/05 6:11 · For: Distance
keep goin this is great story, i cant wait for the next one

Author's Response: Thank you! Next chapter will be up soon!

Name: TNT_Angel (Signed) · Date: 06/05/05 18:58 · For: Indescribable Feelings
:D me again! Hi!! Hey, when do you think the next chapter will be up?? Hopefully soon. Just a thought... if Hermione finds out her bf is cheating you should call the chapter "Behind these Hazel Eyes"by Kelly Clarkson, that video was pretty inspiring chorus goes something like this : 'Here I am, once again, im torn into pieces...cant deny cant pretend, just thought you were the 1, broken up deep inside... But you dont get to see the tears I cried, Behind these hazel eyes'. If Harry comes to the conclusion that he cant live without Hermione then you could call the chapter "Incomplete" by the backstreet boys.....'I try, to go on like I never knew you, im awake but my world is half asleep, i pray for this heart to be unbroken, but without you all im going to be is INCOMPLETE!' Okay, enough of my mindless rambling....

Author's Response: Awww, both of those songs are really good and I like them, but I have other plans. *hint hint wink wink*. Hopefully the next chapter will be up soon, my beta has it right now, so... Not too long though. Thanks for the suggestions!

Name: synger (Signed) · Date: 05/13/05 19:11 · For: Distance
hey, Agian great job. I havent been on for a while and I really liked your chapter. I have to say though that having harry distance himself from Hermione was a daring move. any way I hope they get together soon. umm Please update soon Synger R:9

Author's Response: Yey! Thanks, glad you liked it!

Name: maddie78 (Anonymous) · Date: 05/06/05 21:29 · For: Distance
*pant pant pant* I just read the whole story, and it is unbelievable! I totally could feel everything, I almost cried! I know that sounds really lame, but it was just too amazing. I think it's so awesome, and when I got to the end of this chapter I was like "NO! NO! MORE!" so PLEEEEASE update soon! I love your story soo much!

Author's Response: Aww, thanks maddie! I'm thrilled you liked it so much and especially that I made you feel everything! Unfortunately, it will take me some time to post the next chapter, because I still have to send it to my beta and you know, with finishing touches and everything. Thanks for leaving a review!

Name: living_in_shadows (Signed) · Date: 05/04/05 20:27 · For: Distance
Ok, about the OOC thing - I kinda like it when that happens - shows a different side to the character when done well (which you did - I didn't really think it was OOC) But anyway, I love your story. I just went through a little something like that a few months ago, except I was in Harry's shoes. The bit about the scratched wound - beautiful. I loved it. It described everything Harry was (and is) going through perfectly. The fact that I can relate to that and go "that's kinda what happened to me!" is good. I think if you can get the kind of... human reaction that would happen is awesome. This is one of the few H/HR stories I read, and I love it. Good job, keep up the good work!

Author's Response: I'm glad you got my meaning about the OOC thing--though of course it's not something that should happen often, in fact it should only happen once in awhile. Also, the bit about the scratched wound, I also know how that feels and I can relate, which is why I put in that metaphor. I'm really happy you liked it and I hope you didn't get as hurt as Harry did!

Name: SecretKeeper (Signed) · Date: 05/03/05 20:08 · For: Distance
Well, I feel rather unimportant compared to Vader! Quite the review he left, eh? I do agree with his assessment on this chapter. I love this story, and I check for updates daily. You write very well, and it's always a pleasure to read more and discover how you'll intrigue us next! Harry's letter to Hermione portrated him as slightly OOC, in my humble opinion. Vader touched on that, and I concur. But I admit that, compared to most stories, you're still on track. Besides, who am I to talk? I have a Hr/D story! That's bound to be OOC. Your style and ability to incorporate emotion far exceeded my expectations. I'm forever reading mediocre fics that always end up disappointing me. You've yet to do so, and I'm just as happy as ever. It was rather heart-wrenching to read, as my feelings went out to both Harry and Hermione. You've done well in setting up the story. You didn't simply plunge into it, but instead eased us along and molded your plot. Great job. The grammar/spelling freak in me was also happy to see little to no errors. Your sentences flow with ease, making it an absolutely lovely read. I was happy to read the ending, of course! As always, I'll be watching and waiting for more. Don't let the OOC comments get you down- this is still a brilliant story, and I'd be the first to let you know if anything seemed too detrimental to it. Update quickly!! I'm just hopping with anticipation!

Author's Response: Well, let me start by saying I'm absolutely thrilled that you enjoy this story and I'm so happy that you like my writing as well! Well, I've read a lot of fanfiction before I started writing and I decided that some were better than others. I mean, I've never liked stories that sort of just let things happen without a reason. I'm trying very hard not to do that myself, so it's nice to know I've accomplished a liitle bit. Now, for the OOC part, I think characters develop throughout the years, which is why I put in that little part with the letter. However, I do appreciate all of your comments and they help me improve for later chapters. Again, I want to thank for leaving such a detailed review! They make my day!

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