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Name: tarawent (Signed) · Date: 03/27/05 21:00 · For: Narrow Escape
I'm on pins and needles!!! I can't wait for the next chapter. You're doing great!!!

Author's Response: Thanks! Glad you liked it!

Name: synger (Signed) · Date: 03/27/05 15:29 · For: Narrow Escape
another great chapter. I am really enjoying your story and i check for updates every day. I love how you didnt let harry wrap his arms around Hermione in the closet. (even if i did want him to) he needs to tell his feelings to Hermione before he drives me crazy (lol to late for that ) any way great job. keep up the good work. I awate the next chapter. R:8

Author's Response: Happy you enjoyed this chapter as well! Well, luckily Harry has a lot of self-control, which is a good thing because he would have freaked Hermione out if he didn't (lol). As for his confession that's in about two chapters, so I hope you can wait until then.

Name: WritingHarry182 (Signed) · Date: 03/27/05 10:18 · For: Accidentally in Love
I think your story is quite good, I hope you update very soon! Keep up the great work!

Author's Response: Glad you liked it and thanks for reviewing!

Name: Moonwitch (Signed) · Date: 03/24/05 12:01 · For: Accidentally in Love
not one of your best?? Are you kidding me?!!? This chapter was a very good one!! I agee w/ Vader on this one. The charm scene was perfect, like the rest of the chapter!! Update soon!!

Author's Response: You have no idea what all of these reviews mean to me! I'm so happy you liked the story, expecially for this chapter, so thanks! I'm going to be updating soon!

Name: Moonwitch (Signed) · Date: 03/24/05 11:37 · For: Eyes are the Windows to the Soul
I'm sorry I haven't been able to leave any reviews lately, school is killing me!! Anyways, I agree w/ everyone again. I'm truly enjoying your story!!! Your stile of writing is so easy to understand, and makes it perfect for me to picture everything you're writing!! Please keep it up!! Update soon!!

Name: fifthyear (Signed) · Date: 03/23/05 21:44 · For: Accidentally in Love
why..why does there have to be men like Anthony Goldstein...why...maybe because Hermione hits so close to home with me...but I have to say your story is great...keep it up...woot O.o

Author's Response: Sadly it's true; people like him do exist and I can relate too. *sigh*. Anyway, glad you liked it. I'm going to be submitting the next chapter today and hopefully it will get validated. Thanks again!

Name: fifthyear (Signed) · Date: 03/20/05 19:49 · For: Indescribable Feelings
Quote (as close as I can remember): Rubbish, Harry, I do not snort!...You had me from the first chapter, but seriously you had to go and put in that little seciton of witty banter. Awesome Read...Please send in your next chapter soon...you'll have me dreaming about this one for days! ...10

Author's Response: I'm not quite sure if you posted this review in the right story. I don't think it says anywhere in my fic "Rubbish, Harry, I do not snort,". But if you really read my fic and enjoyed it, thanks!

Name: synger (Signed) · Date: 03/20/05 17:25 · For: Accidentally in Love
k i know this is my third review but if you dont put more up soon im going to drive myself crazy trying to figure out what the plan is so please UPDATE

Author's Response: I want to thank you soooooooooo much for all your reviews. You have no idea what they mean to me! But I'm afraid you'll have to wait just a couple of more days for an update. I really hope you that won't drive you away from this fic. Well, thanks again!

Name: PhysicalGraffiti (Anonymous) · Date: 03/20/05 5:54 · For: Accidentally in Love
I like that you dedicated a full chapter to emotional development. I think you've created a solid ground for the rest of your story by doing so. I LOVED the Charms scene; very dynamic. When their eyes locked... *sigh* Well done. I'm curious about this plan of Ron's as well. I do like that you're keeping Harry In Character by having him bottle his feelings- he does that a lot, really, and it was true to canon. He's a shy, modest type with girls, and it's great that you're not making him bold/overly romantic. You're on a good path- don't quit now! Write away! I eagerly await your next update!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review! Harry will change a little bit and I hope that doesn't ruin the whole Harry-has-to-keep-his-feelings-bottled-up thing. I'm trying to keep him as in-character as I can. I will try to update soon.

Name: synger (Signed) · Date: 03/19/05 21:39 · For: Accidentally in Love
I totally agree with vadar along with my review and I cant wait for more. R:8

Name: Vader (Signed) · Date: 03/19/05 15:22 · For: Accidentally in Love
From your A/N: “However, I feel it is definitely not one of my best chapters.” Vader thinks you may have done far better here than you realize. There is some very good tension in this chapter and some brilliant description of feelings and sensations. Let’s looks at some of Vader’s favorite parts: “Suddenly, for the first time, Hermione felt a curious sensation, as though eyes were on her. But the glare was not unfriendly. She slowly turned her head, trying not to seem obvious and met a pair of astoundingly green eyes, now boring into her own.” This, along with the rest of this paragraph, Vader thought was very well done. In fact, Vader liked the whole part while they are in Charms. Vader could see Ron sitting there trying to restrain his laughter while Harry stares dazedly at Hermione, who is in turn clueless. Vader has been in Ron’s shoes before watching one of his best friends stare at a girl like that. It was pretty funny. You did well to capture those feelings. One the constructive end of things, Vader noticed some redundant phrases and words coming up. The best example is the word realized. Vader thinks you used it like 5 or 6 times in the first couple of paragraphs. You’re easily a good enough author to come up with some alternate ways to say the same thing. Overall, Vader liked this chapter very much. Thanks for the update, and Vader will wait anxiously for more!

Author's Response: Thanks you so much for the kind words. I'm really happy you liked this chapter as well. As for the word 'realized' I know I use it so much but truly, there's hardly a word out there that can take its place completely. I will try to find a good substitute, though. I'll try to update soon!

Name: synger (Signed) · Date: 03/19/05 15:01 · For: Accidentally in Love
even if its not one of your bests its still an awsome chapter I have been checking for days for a new one and Im happy that its finally up. please post another one soon. great job.

Name: synger (Signed) · Date: 03/18/05 17:14 · For: Indescribable Feelings
please update now Im getting so anxous for the next chapters. I cant wait any longer this is killing me

Name: PinkDiamond87 (Signed) · Date: 03/18/05 6:48 · For: Eyes are the Windows to the Soul
hey relli good story im not much of R/Hr shipper so ya i relli liked it update soon pls

Author's Response: Glad you liked it! Thank you for reading!

Name: lovestruck90 (Signed) · Date: 03/17/05 22:36 · For: Eyes are the Windows to the Soul
*joins in applaudes* i really do think you can figure anything out just by looking into someones eyes *dreamily thinks about who i like* Great chapter cant wait for more!

Author's Response: Lol. That's true, which is really why I wrote this chapter this way. Anyway, thanks for reading!

Name: synger (Signed) · Date: 03/17/05 17:02 · For: Eyes are the Windows to the Soul
well done. cant wait for more. i agree with the other two reviews this has the perfect balance. any way cant wait. update soon.

Author's Response: Thanks for reading! I'm happy you liked it! Chapter 4 is on it's way ... I only have a bit of fine-tuning left.

Name: synger (Signed) · Date: 03/17/05 16:51 · For: A Saturday of Freedom
just as good as the first chapter great job.

Name: synger (Signed) · Date: 03/17/05 16:38 · For: Indescribable Feelings
well done! that was an awsome story! cant wait to read more.

Name: PhysicalGraffiti (Anonymous) · Date: 03/14/05 15:20 · For: Eyes are the Windows to the Soul
*Joins Vader in cheers* Really lovely. I agree the pace was nice; not too slow, but definitely sufficient detail. I love how Harry is handling this- it's still In Character so far, as he's not being blatant or excessively romantic (thank Merlin). I thoroughly enjoyed the tension at the beginning as well, very subtle hints were dropped there, and I love that. Really well done! KEEP IT UP, and update ASAP, for I'll be watching!

Author's Response: Thank you so much. I'm really happy you like it!

Name: Vader (Signed) · Date: 03/14/05 12:20 · For: Eyes are the Windows to the Soul
*Stands up and cheers for another very enjoyable chapter* I loved the breakfast scene at the start of your chapter, especially when Hermione leaves and Anthony suddenly finds himself in shark infested waters (so to speak). And, I love how Harry couldn't look at Anthony...of course If I were Harry, I wouldn't be able to look at either one of them. I just loved the tension in that scene. I also liked the part at the end. I thought you did a great job capturing the feeling, the electric like feeling you get when you get close to someone you like...or touch them. Very nice. And, I hope Harry is only dreading what he saw in Hermione's eyes because he's afraid something bad will happen to her because he happens to like her. There are a couple things I wondered about, reading this chapter. First, the part in the middle, where Harry goes to see Dumbledore. I wondered if that part could be expanded a little more to give a little better idea what’s going on. I wondered, given the situation, if Harry would be paranoid about whether or not they (meaning Dumbledore and the other teachers) are really looking for something specific as opposed to a routine check. Just my thoughts. I'm sure it will be explained in future chapters. Ron also seemed a little too quick catching on to Harry’s feelings about Hermione. Not a big flaw, I guess I just always saw Ron as a little thick about things like that. I don't know that he have caught is so fast, even though it is his best friend. The pacing of this chapter was excellent! It was a very nice read! Eagerly looking forward to your next installment. Keep up the good work!

Author's Response: Thank you for reading and reviewing and I'm so happy you liked it. Now, let's see. It will be explained why Harry is dreading his feelings for Hermione. As for Harry's meeting with Dumbledore, there's no real significance Voldemort-wise, but it will be important to the romance. As for Ron, I only made him that quick because I figured dating Hermione would have made him a little more clued in. I want to thank you so much for the constructive criticsm and I do hope you enjoy the other chapters!

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