Reviews For Phases of the Moon
Reviewer: Magical Maeve
Date: 02/25/05 7:23
Chapter: Reunion

There are so many things to like about this chapter. Firstly Remus and his mother's desperate attempts to cure him. You can imagine the torment he has had to undergo and the chains.*shudder* I have a natural predisposition to defending Snape and in this scene I understand why. I liked the way you had Remus compare Sirius to the family he was fighting, hatred breeds hatred...be it from the Black family to Sirius or from Sirius to Severus. It's like a vicious circle and you bring that home in this chapter. Your writing is very good. Effortlessly producing atmosphere, setting and dialogue with very neat grammar. I noticed a few Brit-picky details, mainly the use of car for carriage. Train compartments are always referred to as carriages. If Briticisms are an issue for you I recommend you get a Brit-picker. That was the only thing I found to crit though, everything is is perfect. Looking forward to seeing where you take this.

Author's Response: Ah, Briticisms... I didn't pay as much attention as I should have. Thanks for picking out the "car" thing; I went back and changed those to carriage. Thanks so much for your great review, it means a lot to me!

Reviewer: harry luvs ginny
Date: 02/22/05 14:53
Chapter: Reunion

This is very good! The way you actually do include Peter as one of their friends is great! In most other MWPP fic I read Peter is either stupid or never there. Your description really draws me into it. I felt like I was actually in the train with the Marauders. You really did well on Remus' part also. Very realistic and good job!

Author's Response: Thanks very much!

Reviewer: Binks
Date: 02/21/05 14:27
Chapter: Reunion

You should write the next chapter soon. But if you don't let me remind you why you should: James and Sirius still have their I-can-do-anything-and-still-get-away-with-it attitudes. Remus is in this story and I am such a huge Remus Lupin fan. The other stuff I told you before this story was up. And because I know every jinx in the Harry Potter universe and am not afraid to curse you. Just joking—I hope.

Author's Response: LOL! I've never been so happy to be threatened. :) Thanks for your support; I'll be asking for your beta services again soon!

Reviewer: Rita Writer
Date: 02/20/05 12:19
Chapter: Reunion

I really like this as a first chapter. Everyone is well in character. Sirius and James still have that nice big ego. ;) Please post the next chapter soo. - it's not good to keep the readers waiting!

Author's Response: Yay, my first review! Thanks, I'm glad you like it. I'm working madly on the second chapter now, so hopefully it will be out soon!

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