Hey, wow first to review this chapter right. This got accepted pretty quickly. Bet you're happy you didn't have to wait as long as I did. I already told you how much I love this story but let me just say it again: I Love This Story. The ending was great, the start great, the middle...well I already told you about what I thought of Sirius. Sorry if this review doesn't help much but I already told you most of what I thought.
Author's Response: You're off the hook for a long review since you help me so much. :) Thanks for reviewing and especially for betaing!
I like, I like! This story is turning out wonderful!!! Can't wait to read more. Please, please, please update!!!! P.S. I love the thing going between Remus and Lily. That will make James mad.
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you like it. Stay tuned for James's reaction in the next chapter.
Great fiction! I was wondering if you made a mistake about Remus not being in the Prefect carriage, but apparently you covered that up. Lily is portrayed very strongly and I really like the little bit of Lily/Remus. I was wondering if there is going to be some confrontation with Bellatrix and Sirius... Since he left the family. All in all I am very impressed with the fic and can't wait for more.
Author's Response: LOL! Not really a mistake, more of a cop-out. I knew that I didn't want him in the prefects' carriage, so I threw my author weight around and said "Well he was sick, so he was allowed to sit wherever he wanted. Sure! That's it!" Thanks for the review; I'm glad you're enjoying it. :)
great story! really interesting and I love how you depict Lily. Keep writing!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review!
This is exactly the type of Remus/Marauder fan fiction I've been looking for... it's brillant!!! I was absolutely breathless when Lily and Remus were talking, and I have faith that she'll eventually find out. I laughed too, when Sirius told Remus's tale of courage and dashing; your story is really worth reading. This is heading right on my favorite's list! 10
Author's Response: Wow, thanks! Keep watching Lily; she's crafty. ;)
Good chapter! I really think you managed to show Sirius and James at their immature worst, even though we know they're not bad people. As someone else (I think it was kaltaru) said, I like how you give Peter a personality instead of shoving him into the background or avoiding him altogether. However, I think my favourite thing about this chapter is Remus' inability to confront his friends for what he clearly feels is wrong. I've always felt that Sirius and Severus are more similar than either of them would like to admit, so I was impressed by Remus' observations in the same line. Severus' reactions to being drenched in pumpkin juice as well as the reactions of the other students made me feel so much sympathy for him. I look forward to reading more.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! It was only while writing this that I realized how much Sirius and Severus were alike. (Which pained me, because I do love him!) I'm glad you liked it. :)
The first chapter was excellent but this one was amazing. I loved Remus' dream at the beginning, that set the atmosphere nicely for the sense of loss and longing we see later on. I want to slap Sirius...oh one line I particularly liked was the way his victims laughed along because they were just pleased to be part of Sirius and James' exciting world. That was a really telling remark. I'm enjoying your portrayal of Peter and am really looking forward to seeing how you develop him. He is quietly confident in these scenes and I think that is necessary to his betrayal of them. I don't think Sirius would say 'son of a bitch'. That's very American. That was the only thing that stood out as being misplaced in the whole chapter...oh and the fact that Madame Pomfrey is always Madam Pomfrey. And there was a comma in the wrong place but that is really nitpicking so I shall stop there!! The fact that Remus has so much understanding of his condition and the people around him is one of the greatest tragedies. He sees the fear in Madam Pomfrey and that must be so awful for him. The atmosphere you created in the Shrieking Shack was marvellous. His resignation to his fate was heart breaking and the description of the transformation was one of the best I have read....actuially this is shaping up to be one of the best Lupin fics I have read. The photograph was a nice touch and I thought his reflections on James and the others were very accurate. they are close friends but they can't really understand what Remus faces each month. Normally I would pick out a few lines I liked but there are too many of them to mention in this chapter. Your writing is beautiful, painful, atmospheric and whizzes along so fast the chapter is over before you know it. Brilliant, I love it.
Author's Response: Thanks for the Briticism suggestions! That's still a weak spot for me; I need to watch more Monty Python. I changed 'son of a bitch' and fixed Madam Pomfrey's name. And thank you so much for your review!! I am truly flattered! I think you're a fantastic writer, so I'm honored by your glowing words. :)
Oh, yay, one of my favorite characters, Lily, makes an appearance! I really like how strong you've made her. It's as I've always imagined her to be. The part where she has mudblood on her forehead leapt out at me. I instantly thought, How horrible! Did you get that idea from Order of the Pheonix when Marietta was hexed?
This chapter is fantastic, moving along smoothly from one area to the next with no stumbling blocks. If you had any errors, I didn't detect them, but then I wasn't looking, but rather I just enjoyed the story for what it was.I loved Sirius's speech and story-telling ability. You've inserted so much life into your characters and they seem so real to me. I really look forward to your next installment and I'm glad you write faster than me. I looked at one of your reviews and noticed you said that this chapter was hard to write. For me, the harder the chapter was to write, the more people liked it, so hard is good. I wouldn't mind seeing you in SPEW. Your story deserves to be read and reviewed well. Keep wriiting!
Author's Response: You'll be happy to know that Lily's going to be around a lot more. The poor thing gets pestered a lot by James. :) The Mudblood burn was partly inspired by OOTP, and on a darker note, partly inspired by the Star of David badges from the Holocaust. I figured that Bellatrix would want to brand her "inferiors" to maintain diviseness in the school. Thanks for your great review, and for your recommendation to be in SPEW!
this story is so incredibly cute, I love it so much. It's exactly the kind of Remus Lupin fic I was looking for. Please update!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'll update as soon as I can.
Animal magnatism, ha! Oh goodness. My sides are aching from laughter. That speach Sirius made, hilarious. lol! "With a sword in one hand and his wand in the other, he slaughtered the first beast..." he made it sound so overdramatic. I love it! And I sense a bit of teenage love brewing in Remus. This is the perfect example showing how brilliant a writer you are; last chapter, you made me cry and this chapter, well you know! I am eagerly awaiting the next installment ...Sean
Author's Response: :) I'm glad you liked it! I was afraid Sirius's story might be too over the top, but then again, Sirius is over the top. Hopefully you won't wait too long for the next chapter, getting these reviews makes me want to write faster!
"No, please no, not this time, he thought desperately, clinging to his thoughts as they slipped away. Iím Remus, my name is Remus, please donít forget this time." Hang on... I need a tissue...*wipes tear from cheek* All I can really say is wow. There...I have no words. Give me a second.......... The pain and the agony and the fear and the anger; all of it was so tangible. When he thought about how James, Sirius and Peter didn't really know what he went through and when that thought led him to a moment of selfishness, something he prides himself on not having normally, I felt his pain. Then, I read the quoted passage above and my heart broke for him. Wonderfully, baeutifully, magnificently written. You truly have a gift.
Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much! I'm so flattered; this review made my day!
This is the first maurader fic that I have read. I tried to stay away from them because there is sooo much that we do not know about. However, I was drawn into this story from the very beginning. You add a human quality to your characters that makes them very believable; not many ff authors have that ability, but you pull it off brilliantly. The characters are just how I pictured them to be, James and Sirius leading the charge, Remus letting them have fun but still questioning their motives to himself, and Peter wanting to be a part of the action but at the same time feeling nervous. I am very excited about the potential of this story. Wonderful job! ...Sean
Author's Response: Thanks for the great review! I actually chose to write about the Marauders because we know so little about them. More room for exploration and artistic license. ;)
I think the conversation between Remus and Lily was cute because of the crush it looks like he's developing. Though Lily ends up with James, it's nice to see Remus with a crush on a girl who actually sees him as a friend. Maybe it's the way the chapter was written, or maybe because I really want to see my Remus (Yeah, he's mine.) admire somebody, but I thought this chapter was the best one out of the three chapters which was hard to chose because they were all written well. Hope chapter four is longer, hint hint.
Author's Response: I'm glad/surprised you liked this chapter the best because it was my hardest! I'll try to make the next chapter longer, but it's turning out to be even harder than this one. (So maybe it will be better?) Thanks for reviewing, and thanks for betaing!
I love Remus Lupin fics. This one is spectacular! Keep it up!
Author's Response: Thanks so much!
Nice story! I like how you are writing Remus. And his thoughts before transformation. I'd like to know who was that person, in the end.. Can't wait for next chapter! P.S. This story is finished and you only "put it here", or now you're only writing it?
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I'm writing the story as I go, (currently on chapter 4), but I have a general plotline established to keep me in line. (I know, the best laid plans...)
Oh...that is the most saddest thing I have ever read, poor guy....I just wanted to reach out to him and give him the biggest hug I have ever given someone! Maybe even a kiss on the cheek...Oh..the dream is confusing, but sweet how he worries about this girl, and worries for his friends, and everyone around him. Goodness this sad little guy has a lot to think about, I have always fealt extremly upset for him, when I found out he was a werewolf. This story makes me feel so motherly, like I want to comfort him through his transformation, even though I couldn't...This really is a wonderful, and powerful story, I have put it in my favorites and will be checking for the next chapter frequently.
Author's Response: Wow, thanks for adding this to your favorites! And thanks for the great review. I'm glad you felt so strongly for Remus. I just want to give him a big hug and kiss too!
I... Er... Wow. I think you've made a convert out of me about Remus. I've always liked him but I've never pursued his stories. I'll be following this very closely now.
I love how powerful it is. I felt so sorry for Remus as he waited, being angry at his friends and yet fearful of the sun going down. I'll never think of werewolves the same way. I also loved your description of the transformation and the horrible pain he went through. I don't know why, but I had never considered what it must be like to go through that.
This is an excellent chapter. You're developing Remus magnificently. The phrase "We might hold a mirror to your mouth." confuses me though. I'm not sure what it means. But oh well. I'm absolutely loving this tale. :)
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm honored that you liked it enough to convert. :) It's funny, Sirius was always my favorite character but now Remus is by far. I was worried that the mirror line might be confusing... It's a trick from detective stories. If you don't know if someone is dead or not, then you can hold a mirror to their mouth. If they're alive, then their breath will fog it. So basically Sirius was saying that Remus looked dead.
Everyone is saying how much they like Peter's personality, and how James and Sirius still have their giant egos, but this is a Remus Lupin story right! I love him just as much as the other guys. There are no weak points in this story. I hope this isn't offending or anything, but I laughed out loud at Peter's entry, I was just so suprised at the way he acted! Sirius, James, and Remus, all being cute in their own ways, a perfect story if you ask me. Make it a long one if you can. I mean, James and Sirius need to learn to act more mature, Remus needs a girlfriend to help him through tough times, and Snape needs to be put in his rightful place, the lesser, non-achiever place. Not to mention, Lily and James relationship, I'd like to see what you make Remus feel about that. Yes, you really do have your work cut out for you, better get writing, this is too good of a story to go to waste. Sorry, I talk too much. lol Goodbye for now, have a marauder day! ;)
Author's Response: Laughing out loud isn't offending at all; that's a great compliment! Thanks! :) I don't know if James and Sirius will mature in this story, since we've seen how they acted at the end of fifth year in OoTP. (Not much improvement!) As for Remus with a girlfriend? Well, we'll just have to see... ;)
Thank you, thank you, thank you, *thank you* for writing Peter as a Marauder and as a human being that people liked. I in general don't like Marauder Fics just because of the Peter factor. But this is what I like to see. No one knows just when Peter made a decision to betray the Potters and turn to the Dark Lord. Who knows, it may even have been after he became secret-keeper. There are so many possibilities for his character and I like the way you've chosen to portray him. Now, I know this story is about Remus, but Peter is what kept me drawn in. He's funny, sarcastic, fun-loving... Just what you might expect of a Marauder. Good job and keep it up! :)
Author's Response: Wow, thanks! I feel like I'm in the Peter Pettigrew Liberation Front. :) I'm glad you like his character; I will do my best to keep him a true Marauder. I think you'll like the beginning of the next chapter. ;) I just submitted it, so hopefully it will be validated in a couple of days!
Wow! I like this MWPP story very much! You write very realistically. I also like how you give Peter an actually friendly personality, unlike other stories. Hurry up writing the next chapter! :)
Author's Response: Thanks! To be honest, I didn't want to write Peter at first, but I didn't think I was "allowed" to leave him out or make him a jerk. But now that I've written him, I like his character and I think he's an interesting part of the group. But he's definitely a challenge to write!