Despite what other people said I think that the no quotations etc. really show how it is a little lid telling the story. It is very cute as well!!
I'll just say what everybody else has said ... punctuation and quotations are a must. But the rest of the story was SO FANTASTIC, that it completely makes up for it. I loved the Nymphie biscuit, and the Sirius and Remus sandwich. Fantabulous story. You're very talented.
I thought this was very beautiful and powerful, with the message and shown from Nymphie's POV. I loved your style, very unconventional and rhythmic. It was just beautiful, much more than just some fluffy romance.
awesome story keep up the good work!!
That is probably the cutest darned thing I have ever read! Usually, I'm a stickler for 'conventional' punctuation (quotation marks and so forth), but this was easy to real and flowed really well. I love the snowmen, and the way little Tonks is... little Tonks. Very sweet!
That is probably the cutest darned thing I have ever read! Usually, I'm a stickler for 'conventional' punctuation (quotation marks and so forth), but this was easy to real and flowed really well. I love the snowmen, and the way little Tonks is... little Tonks. Very sweet!
I love the little kid point of view.
That was very cute, how you had it from "Nymphie's" POV. It's also very clever. 9/10 from me.
very cute..... :D
Awww that was so freaking adorable. Now I'm getting all teary-eyed for reasons unknown. Maybe it's just because the story was so cute and fluffy. *rambles and gushes* Okay, well anyway, I adored it; I'm off to read more of your works :)
So sweet! Nymphie was such a doll! It was a cute litte fic so light and fluffy but with an important underlying message that was beutifully portrayed. one small peice of advice is that it was a bit hard to understand without quotations but overall really good!
awww, that was beutiful. i loved it!
That was beautiful. I love how it came from Tonks' perspective and combined childish innocence with Sirius/Remus love. I can't think of anything to work on.
Oh *cool*, a fic from little Tonks PoV! Why is it Andromeda going to Hogwarts? 'Nymphie, Sirius says, God, don’t shout right in my ear.' Hehe. And the snowmen. Aww, this is so sweet! And I love how it's a innocent kids PoV of it. V. cute. Maybe you could do a Remus/Tonks and have something to do with the snowmen? Lol, just an idea. Great fic 10 <)=-]
A little confusing with the wording at times..not always knowing the difference between narration and dialogue, but overall very very cute. It was quite a different take than what is usual. I really enjoyed it. :)
Very nice! It's not everyday you get a story like this from a kids point of view! Though the punctuation made my head hurt.... 9!
So lovely! Love the childs view of things, and the way Andromeda explains Sirius and Remus' relationship! Very good!
Oh, wow!!! Deciding to do a slash fic from a child's perceptive was absolutely engenious! *adds to favs list* This is amazing, and you should be very proud of yourself! :.) 1000/10!!!
this is really cute. i dunno how you got the idea of wrting it all from tonks point of view. but its really coool.
