Reviews For I Loved Him First
Reviewer: babekitty_92
Date: 08/03/06 1:56
Chapter: You Just Want Lily

Poor Petunia. I am not a fan of her character, but I really like this story, therefore I feel sorry for her. But well done, it's great, keep it up.

Author's Response: I'm so pleased you're reading (and enjoying :D) my story even if you don't like Petunia in canon! Thanks for the support!

Reviewer: babekitty_92
Date: 08/03/06 1:51
Chapter: Snape's Revenge

mmmm, very good as usual, I really like this story, it's interesting. Well done

Author's Response: Once again, thank you! **I heart reviews!** :)

Reviewer: babekitty_92
Date: 08/03/06 1:46
Chapter: James vs. Snape

hee hee, nice chapter, although as much as I hate Snape, i felt sorry for him. You've really captured Petunia's personalitly in my view, so well done. 10/10

Author's Response: Thanks! You're right... Snape does warrant a bit of feeling-sorry-for... even if he is a greasy git... :D It's good to see someone else liking my interpretation of Petunia's character when she was younger!

Reviewer: babekitty_92
Date: 08/03/06 1:37
Chapter: James

oh no, she's going to be so jealous of Lily, isn't she? Well done though, I can't wait to read more. It's very interesting. :)

Author's Response: Sorry I didn't respond to this (or all reviews after this one) for such a long time! I was in Mexico for a week... without internet... *gasp*. Anyway... oh yes. the jealousy has definately just begun! Thanks for the review! Glad you're enjoying my fic!

Reviewer: ronnyc718
Date: 07/31/06 2:32
Chapter: Meeting Luisa

"That's why Petunia sat in the library, her books spread out on the table on a warm Saturday morning. She had the common room almost to herself."

The common room reference doesn't make sense.

When you were describing Luisa, before you mentioned who she was dating, I was already thinking that she reminded me of Luna. Great job with the characterization there.

Author's Response: Whoops... as I said, Petunia used to be a Gryffindor... but I figured Hufflepuff fits better. I'm so happy you liked Luisa! I happen to love Luna, but can never characterize her. Not that Luisa's supposed to be just like her. Oh well, 'nuff rambling. Thanks for pointing out the common room thing!

Reviewer: ronnyc718
Date: 07/31/06 2:24
Chapter: Young Love

In the 8th paragraph, it says "one" where it should say "once." Then, a few paragraphs down, it says "young overs."

I love when you say that James giggled. It's kind of an un-James thing to do, but at the same time, every boy giggles when they hear words like "mating." Hehe... :) It's great there.

"But you do love me, right?" James finally asked.

"As I said, I guess I do. Yeah. Think so."

"Great!

"You're so uncertain!" Petunia joked.

This section is a little confusing as to who is speaking.

You're so right about the fluff, though. Aww...

Author's Response: Thanks for all the help! I'm so glad you're enjoying the fluff! 'Fraid that's the end of the fluf for this story, though... *muhahaha*... I'll go fix those things now...

Reviewer: ronnyc718
Date: 07/27/06 23:12
Chapter: First Kiss

Yay! Gosh, this is such a strange ship, but you make it work so well. Yay for fluffy, happy chapters!

Author's Response: Thanks! Glad you appreciate the fluff... :) There's more coming in the next chapter...

Reviewer: ronnyc718
Date: 07/27/06 23:08
Chapter: Outbursts By The Seashore

Lupin is one of my favorite characters. You write him really well - of course he would be the one to write Petunia. That also shows that she really is friends with the Marauders.

Lily is almost written like a Mary Sue, but that's what's needed here, so good call. I've never read her written in an unlikable manner - very weird, but again, perfect here, because that is how Petunia would see her. You do a good job of keeping this in Petunia's point of view.

Lily's friends are written well too. The whole trip, they talk about her as though she can't understand them (like she's some kind of exhibit at the zoo).

*looks frantically around for something to change*
Umm... Apparate is usually capitalized.

Author's Response: I'm glad you think it's okay that Lily seems so shallow. While writing it, I kept thinking that Lily couldn't have been like that; but that's how Petunia must I seen her. I really appreciate you pointing out the little things. I'll go capitalize Apparate now. :)

Reviewer: ronnyc718
Date: 07/27/06 23:00
Chapter: You Just Want Lily

Oh, poor Petunia! She really does have a self-esteem problem, doesn't she?

Reviewer: ronnyc718
Date: 07/27/06 22:56
Chapter: Snape's Revenge

I'm feeling a little silly trying to beta this - it's really good. The plot is so original.

The only thing I noticed in this chapter was that the first paragraph says it's been two days since the incident and then Snape says it was yesterday.

I adore the way you've written Remus!!

Author's Response: Thanks for betaing, anyway! :) Also, thanks for pointing that out. I'll fix it right away. I'm glad you like Remus, too! He's one of my favorite characters and I was afraid I wasn't doing him justice.

Reviewer: ronnyc718
Date: 07/24/06 2:19
Chapter: James vs. Snape

Ooo... I like how Petunia keeps justifying everything James does, just because it's James. I wouldn't change anything in this chapter. Great job!!

Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: ronnyc718
Date: 07/24/06 2:12
Chapter: James

I'm so intrigued by this story! Great job with Petunia's thoughts. There's a couple of nitpicky canon things I noticed. It says Petunia went to the table with red and gold banners, but Hufflepuff's colors are yellow and black. Also, how could she see James and Co. in the common room when they're not in the same house?

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! Oh oops, you're right. I had her in Gryffindor at first, but then decided to change it. I'll fix that up! Thanks!

Reviewer: Leahr
Date: 07/23/06 23:26
Chapter: The Final Irony (Epilogue)

Wow, wow, wow. Fabulous, excellent, superlative story. The ending absolutely shocked me. That last paragraph- couldn't believe it. No, Petunia, don't do it!

I think you are very good at character development, don't worry. James was great, and that line at the end of one chapter about how they were all happy really gave you a feeling of, "but not for long." with an evil cackle. Peter's sinking was so depressing- if whe had only told them, everything would have been so different. And if Luna had told Harry about Petunia earlier... Oh, and Luisa living still was a brilliantly evil finishing stroke. And how you made Lily be all mean and shallow, instead of Miss Perfect as she usually is, was great. Why did she stand up for Snape, though? You never said. I think this is a great story and you should definitely write more soon.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! Yeah, I enjoyed writing the "really happy chapter ending"... I was cackling... how did you guess? :) I'm glad you noticed all the "what ifs." I love adding them. Yes, I am a Shakespeare fan, again, how did you guess? :D I'm not sure about the standing up for Snape, though... I guess, since Petunia doesn't know, I didn't include it.

Reviewer: XxJaneBanexX
Date: 07/20/06 0:43
Chapter: James

This story was just absolutely fantasic! I had some cleaning to do and whatnot but I couldn't stop reading.. I got yelled at but it was worth finishing this fic! I don't usually read stories like this but this was truely amazing! Good Job =)

Author's Response: Thanks so much! Sorry you got yelled at... I can't honestly say I'm sorry you read the fic, though... :D

Reviewer: lilyevans91
Date: 06/11/06 10:07
Chapter: The Final Irony (Epilogue)

oh. my. god. this was SO SAD!!!! i was in tears by the end! this was a wonderful portayal of the marauder era and then "harry's time" through the eyes of petunia. it was very sad and it made me want to just go up to petunia and hug her, which is saying a lot, cause i don't normally like petunia. the point is, this was a very powerful story for me! great job, i'm very impressed.

Author's Response: wow thanks! i must admit, the petunia in canon is not my ideal person either, but i think that's just the appearance... anyway, thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: mrsfelton92
Date: 05/18/06 17:32
Chapter: The Final Irony (Epilogue)

this is utterly amazing. the plot liine, the story, how everything ties together.......i love it....i really do......u r an exceptioanl writer an u deserve every writing award ever given. u rock. i love u for this. this is in my favorites. i love u! (srry it took so long to review, i didnt check 4 a while.....)
this is amazing. i will never forget it. never.

Author's Response: i don't know what to say... thanks for reviewing, twice at that! i'm really glad you liked my story.

Author's Response: three times, i mean! :D

Reviewer: newo_ikkin
Date: 05/03/06 17:06
Chapter: The Final Irony (Epilogue)

wow. great story.

Author's Response: thanks!

Reviewer: hpfreak_bw
Date: 04/30/06 2:05
Chapter: The Final Irony (Epilogue)

VERY GOOD!
i think you have a good sense of what petunia's life was all about!!
write more!!!

Author's Response: i just love thinking about minor characters in the HP series and about what their life could have been like... thanks for the review!

Author's Response: lives

Reviewer: nikster
Date: 04/29/06 6:29
Chapter: The Final Irony (Epilogue)

This was a really good fan fiction i hope to read more of you fan fics

Author's Response: thanks! i'm glad you liked it!

Reviewer: GinnyRox
Date: 04/28/06 22:02
Chapter: The Final Irony (Epilogue)

I thought the ending was really sad. You did a really great job on this fic and I hope you'll write more!

Author's Response: thanks! it's hard to believe that i'm done with this story... i've been working on it for more than a year now! thanks for your continuous support, though!

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