Reviews For I Loved Him First
Reviewer: babekitty_92
Date: 09/05/06 21:10
Chapter: Bad Outlook

Ohhhhhhh, poor thing. That was really good writing though, I wanted to cry it was so sad. well done. you definitley hit an emotional pin point. well done. 10/10

Author's Response: Thanks so much!! Emotions are my specialty!

Reviewer: babekitty_92
Date: 09/05/06 21:05
Chapter: At Luisa's House

Oh no, I don't like Petunia but that's so sad! And Luisa too! I really liked her character, she was so cool! I hope she doesn't die!!! well done though, it was great, 10/10

Author's Response: :) You'll see in the end! Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: XPadfootxlivezxonX
Date: 09/02/06 11:14
Chapter: James

wow i like it it has a twist i already feel bad for her lol well i am gonna read the rest its really good even

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! Wow.. I'm pretty obvious, aren't I? I didn't mean for you to feel bad for her.. *yet* - *evilgrin* I'm glad you like it so far!!!

Reviewer: babekitty_92
Date: 09/02/06 8:01
Chapter: It's Been Her All Along

OOHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! That was the best, well done!!!!!!!! The bets chapter that you have written by far. well done. 1000000000000000000/10

Author's Response: *blushes and grins* Wow, I got lots a points!!! :D :D :D I'm glad you liked this chapter. I enjoyed writing it, even though it's kinda depressing for ole "Tunia... :)

Reviewer: babekitty_92
Date: 09/02/06 7:57
Chapter: Peter's Secret

Ooooooooo, suspense. Well done, I love it, it was brilliant. 10/10

Reviewer: babekitty_92
Date: 09/02/06 7:42
Chapter: Peter Pettigrew

very nice, very nice. well, I can't say much because it's the same as always; it's great, and i love it. well done 10/10

Author's Response: Thanks so much!!

Reviewer: babekitty_92
Date: 09/02/06 7:31
Chapter: O.W.L.s

oooooh, tnetion is going to mount and-oh! I can guess what's coming this time I think, but this chapter was great, as are everyone I have read so far, well done. 10/10

Author's Response: Thank you!! I'm so happy you like my fic so far!

Reviewer: babekitty_92
Date: 09/02/06 7:26
Chapter: Meeting Luisa

okay, so after I wrote that theory I figured I was wrong, but anyway, the story: It was really good, as always, I like that there is another girl, it's really good. well done. 10/10

Author's Response: Thanks so much for another nice review!!! There had to be some problem in the end, didn't there? I'm not usually a very sappy or happy-ending-ish person (although I enjoy reading happy endings, just not writing them. I don't know how :D)

Reviewer: babekitty_92
Date: 09/02/06 7:18
Chapter: Young Love

oh, young love! but it will end so-Hey! i just realised!!! Is James and Petunia going to break up and then he chases Lily again? Eh, either way i love the story, it's great.

Author's Response: Can't tell you that! ;) I'm glad you appreciate the fluff! Sometimes, I just feel like fluff. Like a cotton candy craving (ccc... :D).

Reviewer: ronnyc718
Date: 08/20/06 21:14
Chapter: A Story of Betrayal

Wow. Just... wow. Definitely never saw that coming.

I would prefer for Dumbledore to know for sure that Petunia's father was under the Imperius Curse, but I don't know if that interferes with the rest of the story. I think that's my attempt to make Petunia's life a little more bearable. :(

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I'm (guiltily) thrilled that you're able to feel for Petunia so much... :) :) :)

Reviewer: ronnyc718
Date: 08/20/06 21:06
Chapter: Really Dead

Okay, the most tragic thing in this chapter was that Petunia's mom was holding a picture of Lily. Great detail!

And James makes total sense in this chapter: he makes a big deal about being there for Petunia now, after ignoring her for months. That really proves he loves her, even if not romantically. Read with sarcasm. I'm so glad Petunia didn't let herself be drawn into his words.

At the beginning of the chapter, Petunia's denial was done in such a believable way - good job!!!

Author's Response: :D :D :D Don't know what to say, except thanks for your continued support and for such nice compliments!

Reviewer: ronnyc718
Date: 08/20/06 21:00
Chapter: All Alone

That dream is so well-written! Great job with it.

I don't really see Dumbledore being so blunt, but he might be with Petunia: she's the type to deal with stuff that way. I'm really surprised that months have gone by without Petunia telling someone about Peter.

You expressed Petunia's thoughts so well - this is now one of my favorite chapters!!

Author's Response: :D I'm glad you liked this chapter! I enjoyed the dream, too... Queen Lily... :) Anyway... you're so right about Peter! I really need to work on it. Maybe I should just change it so that she tells Luisa about what she saw right before Luisa has her fit? Then Luisa can't tell her the significance of it, but Petunia will have told someone about it. It is about strange that she just seems to forget it, isn't it!

Reviewer: ronnyc718
Date: 08/20/06 20:50
Chapter: Bad Outlook

"Leaning back in her seat, Petunia allowed herself to think over her first day at Jamie's house for the thousandth time." This is right before the first break, and I think you must mean Luisa's house.

"Of course she had completed her assignments and had not forgotten a anythin, but her professors appearance had greatly surprised her." "anythinG" and "professoR'S"

I like this chapter. You express Petunia's anger and helplessness very well. I don't know if this is something that should even be changed, but I think it's strange that she hasn't thought anymore about Peter being a Death Eater. Does she not yet realize what a big threat Voldemort is?

Just a thought - don't know if it's particularly helpful or not.

Author's Response: Thanks for pointing those things out! Originally (as you might've noticed if you've looked at older reviews) Luisa used to be named "Jamie." But that was just too similar to James and it was confusing, so I changed it. I fixed the "anything" and "professor's" - Can't believe I had two careless errors in one sentence! *blushes* I'm glad you liked this chapter - I like to show the more passionate side of Petunia now and then - after all, she is Harry's aunt! About Peter - yes, I figured that Petunia, having grown up with (supposedly) muggles and her only real contact with the magical world being Hogwarts, which Voldemort never dared to attack, she would have been sheltered from the knowledge of his terror - especially since she didn't really have any friends during her first four years there, so she would've had no one to talk about it with. And she has "more important things (she thinks) going on right then - Luisa, James... Besides... I kind of needed her not to tell anyone *is guilty about the glaring lack of logic* I'll see what I can do, though. Thanks for pointing it out.

Reviewer: ronnyc718
Date: 08/20/06 20:42
Chapter: At Luisa's House

Sorry it took me so long this time to get back here. By the way, thanks for reviewing my story!!

This sentence is pretty close to the end: "Luisa was thinner, her skin was a pale, milky color, and she moved gingeryl, as though every move hurt her."

Gingerly needs to be fixed.

Author's Response: It's fine if it takes you a while - I realize that this fic is quite long and you have other priorities. Reviewing your story was a pleasure! I really liked it! Anyway, thanks for pointing out "gingerly" - I fixed it!

Reviewer: ronnyc718
Date: 08/05/06 18:00
Chapter: It's Been Her All Along

Grr... Oh, I'm so mad at Lily!! And James!!

Even though this chapter is really sad, I would say it is one of the best written so far. I love the line where Petunia corrects James about her name.

Reviewer: ronnyc718
Date: 08/05/06 17:48
Chapter: Peter's Secret

Oh no, I don't have a good feeling about James staring at Lily...

This chapter shows a side of Petunia that we see a lot of in the books: she's great at listening on conversations and she's really nosy, but here it's helpful instead of annoying.

Author's Response: *Grins evilly at throwing in nasty hints* Thanks, once again, for the great review! You've been such a huge help so far and I have no doubt my story will be much better by the end! I'm happy (by the way, does anyone know how else I can put that? Besides glad, pleased, happy, relived, enjoying... :D) you see a bit of the canon Petunia in this fic... I like to think my Petunia is the same person... only different... :)

Reviewer: ronnyc718
Date: 08/05/06 17:42
Chapter: Peter Pettigrew

"lycanthropy" - nice use of a cool word.

Man, Peter's a little paranoid. That's so how I see him being.

And Sirius' excitement is done well too - and of course, Remus is the one being practical as always. You really do well with these characters. You said somewhere that you were a little worried about that - don't be. :)

Author's Response: Hehe... I love that word too... lycanthropy... anyway... As usual, thanks for the helpful review! I'm so glad you agree with how I portrayed the characters... I was a bit worried about that! :D

Reviewer: ronnyc718
Date: 08/05/06 17:36
Chapter: O.W.L.s

I don't think I would like the nickname "Tunia" either. It makes me think of tuna... ew.

In the letter from her mother, it says "However, that is not why I am writing this letter to tell you..." I think this should be two sentences.

Great job, as usual! You included some great details on the O.W.L.s. Very impressive. :)

Author's Response: Thanks for your continued betaing! Writing the O.W.L.s did take quite a while, so I'm very glad you liked them! I'll fix that sentence!

Reviewer: babekitty_92
Date: 08/03/06 2:08
Chapter: First Kiss

hee hee, so cute! Does Lily find out about the kiss, what happens? oooh, next chapter, here I come!!! well done!

Author's Response: You've left so many reviews that I've run out of replies... ;) NOT that I'm complaining!!!! Not at all! All I can say is, though, thanks for the reviewS!

Reviewer: babekitty_92
Date: 08/03/06 2:03
Chapter: Outbursts By The Seashore

Poor Petunia, no one will understand! Ohhhhh, poor thing... wait! this is Petunia! Anyway, that was great, I loved it, so well done.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review!

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