Amazing. It was so...interesting, I think, is a good word. I've never even considered something like this, with the Trio all into music and instruments. It was so beautiful to read about their love for it and how they found peace with it. You write so amazingly well that I can find no fault, except perhaps you make my own writing skills pale in comparison. But alas, such is life. The Bloody Baron was a nice touch; I think he was a good choice. We don't see a lot of him and even though he's got a minor part in this, it was nice nonetheless. Wonderful, great job!
it was really good i enjoyed it alot. bad name though.
Not again! *glares* *sigh* Suffice it to say I love that song. Now...
I've heard stuttered versions of the canon, in fact, and I'm completely sure Hermione's is original. But it makes sense - it's so smooth, yet broken. And the way you related colours to everything was poetic in itself. But the nights are polished onyx and bruised purple, with streaks of burnished gold and polished amber. Plus the copper, gold and silver.The only thing I really frowned on was the fact that Hermione taught Ron to play the flute so easily. It's completely different from the violin and piano. It does add more to the dreamlike tone, but surely he couldn't learn that fast... Nothing I learned while playing the violin helped me while playing the flute, except for notes, and even that was different, since flutes obviously play much higher. Perhaps he struggled with it, patiently trying to learn as Harry and Hermione master the violin and piano.
Ron told of the dreary trudge of the day as he gently blew out "Allegro Con Brio." I don't know that song off the top of my head, but "allegro" means fast, and "con brio" means "with life." Is that such a good choice to play? *shrug* But the "Linus and Lucy" fit Harry so well, as he laughed with joy.Your writing is beautiful, so different than the storytelling tone of most authors. Authors? No. More like a poet. I loved this one, and it's on to reading more! Great job, Seren. Keep it up.
Darnit. It cut off half of my review. I think it's a coding problem, so I'm only posting the second part.
I can't get enough of your fics - I've been reading for about an hour now. (And don't forget yesterday too!) I liked this one especially just because music is my life (besides Harry Potter, LOL) and I can connect to it a lot better. It made me smile to see Harry paired with the piano, Ron with the flute, and Hermione with the violin... it suited their natures so well. Though it wouldn't have been horrible if you had paired Hermione with the piano... Hehe, just kidding. ;)I know that feeling of releasing, of telling stories when you play music of any kind... it's the best therapy in the world. The emotions all felt perfect as you described Hermione playing at the beginning. Another day had burned through her, another day had tried to tear her down, and Hermione coped by letting life slide into her fingertips. Exactly!
Oh, one small thing I noticed... it's Pachelbel's Canon in D. :D
Oh my word, this is stunning. I play the cello, so I know about the feeling of music. It was such a good story and left a mystical mark on my heart. Keep up the good work in your writing. Once again it was stunning.
In my opinion, one-shots are the best type of story because they're always the ones that seem to touch you the most. And this is the best one-shot I have ever read, so this is obviously the best story ever written. You were very descriptive and I liked the way you used music in this! (play the flute and lovin it) Keep up the awesome writing! ^.~
Oh, wow... What a piece of work, Seren. You really outdid yourself with this one. Your descriptions were amazing and it was almost as if I could feel them coming off the page. (Now that's what I call visualization at its best.) I loved that the idea for this story came from music, being such a music buff myself.
Hermione's emotions are very articulate. I completely understood her having left everything behind, but having a reminder; her violin. (I went through my own identity crisis not long ago and used my violin for comfort. It gave me a new appreciation for my instrument.) I found it a wise decision on your part when you used Mozart and Beethoven as your example composers. Not because they are most familiar to your audience but because Hogwarts is such an old school. It really gave me peace of mind to know that compositions by such excellent composers would be echoing in the halls of Hogwarts. And you having Hermione play a stuttered version of "Canon in D" really brought back memories for me.
There was only one thing that bothered me, and that was when Hermione was said to have taught Ron flute. Unless she's very versed with flute, it would be quite hard to teach the notes. Though, they are in the same clef, the notes are very different. Clarinet translates a lot easier. Mainly because a violin can tune a perfect A from a clarinet's A.
Also your note at the beginning talking about the tense shifts worried me, but I didn't notice them at all. This story flowed so well, I didn't notice. Great job.
Anyway, before this turns into a novel, my last comment is about the music the Trio played after the battle was over. This part in particular was the most poignant to me. When you described the bruised notes and sickly heartache, the composer that immediately came to my mind was Dvorak. I don't know why, but I had to stop and listen to "New World Symphony." Same with the part where Harry played "Linus and Lucy." I had to stop a moment and listen. (Oh, how I love Charlie Brown!)
Anyway, lovely work as usual. This is defintely going to be one of those stories I'll be reading over and over.
Your descripitions are sublime... what a wonderful piece this is.
Nice, very descriptive. It takes on a whole new path that Voldemort does not have to be destroyed by magic, but could also be by feelings.