Keep writing! i dont usually write these but u deserve more then 9!
this is good. really. PLEASE UPDATE! this will be such a good story, if u update! :):):)
Author's Response: Thank you! I just re-submitted the third chapter after it got rejected so hopefully it'll be up soon. Thanks again for the review and check back soon for an update!
i luv the part about the challenges. You kept everyone in character so well! good job!!!!!!!!!! :):):)
Author's Response: Ah, well, thank you! I'm glad you liked that part. Thanks for the review!
Hey! This turned out real great huh?! If you still need help with the rest of it, then I'm happy to help. It's really really really great!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: I'm glad you like it! Thanks again for the help. I'll probably be in contact again quite soon if the next chapter gets rejected I'll be sure to pm you!
This is a great story! If you don't get a response it's probably because the system is being weird and keeps logging people out. I love Lily's personality, I never pictured her as being extremely fierce or angry all the time. There's one thing in this story that bugs me aa little, but feel free to ingnore it because I am easily annoyed. Somehow the word "Kay" doesn't seem very British, I don't know though because I'm not a Brit, but that's my opinion. This story is excellent and I can't wait for chappie three!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I'm glad you like the story. Your right, the word "Kay" doesn't sound very british. I think I'll go and change that. Wonder what would work though . . . I'll think about that. Thanks again for the review! Chapter 3 should be up soon. I submitted it early this morning.
sorry for not reviewing for this chapter untill now but i could swear i did , and yes this is a very good story , it is one of my favorites , pleeeeeeeesssssseeee keep posting if only for me , and one thing bugged me , you said she put her lips to her mouth to signal james to be quiet ,sorry but that really bugged me , i love the broom ride and that lilys afriad of heitghts , update soon pleese
Author's Response: Ooops, I did? Thanks for telling me. I'll go edit that now. Before when I was proofreading it I accidently put James pulled his broom from his pocket instead of his wand. I'm glad you like the story though. I haven't begun writing the third chapter yet but I'm probably going to start it today. I'll get it up as soon as I can. Thanks for the review!
i like it but it needs more . . . . just more so that means you have to update . i like how you say that james wants a challenge , no one else really says that . . .
Author's Response: Okay, I shall update as soon as possible. I'm working on getting it up now. It got rejected for grammar errors but I just edited it and re-submitted it so hopefully I'll have it up shortly. Thanks for the review!
I like it so far, although it's a little short. I laughed when James and Sirius slid down the banister, I always do that and I always get in trouble. Lucky them no parents...Sorry, getting off topic. This is a great start, I love how James says he loves a challenge. Can't wait for the next chappie!
Author's Response: Yeah, I agree it was very short. The next one is much longer and it should be coming soon. I'm trying to get it up as soon as possible. Lol I agree, sliding down the banister is quite fun. Thanks for the review!
Well, i read it like you asked me too and i have to say i like it!!! i loved the part in the beginning when James tells sirius he loves him and sirius goes like 'that is so wrong on so many levels...' great job!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I'm glad you liked it. Be sure the check back soon for the second chapter. It should be, hopefully, up soon!
I liked it! Though you do need more Lily. Everyone loves Lily! Update! Update! First to review!*does little dance and looks around* Pretend you didn't see that...*scoots away slowly*
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! I appreciate it very much! You'll definitely see some more of Lily in the second chapter. Along with James. I just finished it so I'm hoping it will be submited soon. Thanks again for the review!