Reviews For A History Lesson
Reviewer: Ashwinder
Date: 02/18/05 12:47
Chapter: [Do Not Go Gently Into The Night]

Very well written. I like how you had several students stand up and tell stories to inspire the others. For a moment there in the beginning, I was almost afraid it was going to be a one-woman show with Hermione. I like how you brought some of the more "minor" characters (Luna and Dean) into a position where they could be an inspiration.

From a characteristation point of view, while Hermione's certainly clever, she hasn't shown herself to be a brilliant orator as she is in the story. I think Ron comes across as being a bit to brilliant in that area as well. However, I recognise that this may have been done intentionally.

Minor nits: You have a sentence that begins with "300". It's generally better from to write out numbers at the beginning of a sentence. Ron's speech covers several paragraphs, and you close your quote on the end of his paragraphs, even though he's still speaking in the next one. There shouldn't be a close quote on the end of these paragraphs until you get to his last line "Don't they deserve a chance?" In this sentence: "My dad told me that the Nazi's found out" you want Nazis. There's no possession here. You also have a typo here: "So i asked my dad". Very minor stuff, and easily fixed.

Overall excellent job, though.

Reviewer: Dethen1
Date: 02/11/05 14:52
Chapter: [Do Not Go Gently Into The Night]

Can anyone find anything to criticize this story about? Its not often that a tear comes to my eye, here it is. If I could I'd give you a standing ovation right in your presence. But as it is, words will have to do. Excellent, heh heh, eeexcellleeeennnt. (Sorry, Mr. Burns snuck out there a bit.)

Reviewer: AlexisTaylor
Date: 02/06/05 21:52
Chapter: [Do Not Go Gently Into The Night]

It was quite beautiful. I love how you've incorperated some of the strongest poetry known to man, for the purposes of inspiration. I thought most one-shots were lacking in quality, but you've proved me wrong (thank you). I quite enjoy being wrong about my generalizations. Either way, good job. Now, of course, the characters would never speak like this until they are . . . well, more advanced in age, but this is obviously not your concern here. Consider taking the position of general. Americans can use a little inspiration now-a-days.

Reviewer: PotterSister
Date: 02/05/05 10:03
Chapter: [Do Not Go Gently Into The Night]


Reviewer: KhaGaM
Date: 02/03/05 5:32
Chapter: [Do Not Go Gently Into The Night]

Inspiring. You are a marvel. Period.

Reviewer: School owl
Date: 02/01/05 17:39
Chapter: [Do Not Go Gently Into The Night]

Great job. I'm am crying right now as I normally do when I read your stories. You are an amazing writer. 100/10!!

Reviewer: Atarwyn
Date: 02/01/05 1:25
Chapter: [Do Not Go Gently Into The Night]

That was so amazing! You are such an awsome writer!! You really made the speeches real for me! I'd give you a 50/10 if I could!

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