I like the start you have here. I liked the way you characterized Hermione, especially the part when she surprised herself by how much she was fussing over her appearance. A couple of suggestions I have: First of all, in Hermione's letter back to Harry, she asks for his address? I don't know, I just get the sense Hermione would know he lives at #4 Privet Drive by now. Maybe you could have her just ask directions? Secondly, do you think a teen age girl's parents would be a little more suspicious and uneasy about a boy coming to stay at their place with their teen age daughter for the whole summer holiday? Just something to think about. I would have thought, even if Hermione's parents like Harry, she might have had to talk them into the idea a little more. Ah, maybe that's just me though. Other than those couple things, I really liked the start you have here, and hope you post an update soon!
Author's Response: Thankyou for your advise ummmm... i guess i could have thought about that a bit more
that's a sweet one! was just a bit disappointed, that neither harry nor hermione gave the other one a hug (that nearly knocked him/her down ;) ). but anyway: this is a really cute story and i hope you'll update ASAP!!
Author's Response: thanks i will update soon
I really really really reallyreally really really really liked it! Great story!
Author's Response: really, really, really? why thankyou
Oh lovely. Absolutly lovely. :D
Author's Response: thankyou :)
Wow! Your story is soooooo good! Please update soon!
Author's Response: thanks heaps i just sent off the next chapter and hopefully it will be up soon
OOOOOOH!!! I really like it!!!!! Great start to the story. post the next chapter ASAP ok?:D
Author's Response: Thankyou sooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo much i didnt think anyone would like it... or read it