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Name: LoveYouAlways (Signed) · Date: 12/22/11 20:36 · For: Chapter the Second: Hermione
Brilliant way to describe what would happen if they ever found their love for each other before they do in the books.

Name: acciomagic (Signed) · Date: 06/19/08 19:41 · For: Chapter the Second: Hermione
This was sooooo cute!

Name: saneasluna (Signed) · Date: 02/25/08 20:47 · For: Chapter the Second: Hermione
“So…?” he asks quietly. “Does he ever get the girl?”

“Yes, actually,” I tell him. “Elizabeth finds out how Mr. Darcy really feels and how everything she detested about him —”

“Hermione,” he interrupts. “I didn’t mean Mr. Darcy and Elizabeth…”

His face and ears are now burning red. He puts his hand on mine, and I see him swallow hard.

“Does he ever get the girl?” he whispers to me.

All together now: Awwww! Loved it, into the favorites it goes!

Funny story, I got Pride and Prejudice from the library, but then I realized it was the child abridged copy, and now I want to go back and see if I can find the original...

Name: AccioMagic (Anonymous) · Date: 02/05/08 19:47 · For: Chapter the Second: Hermione
Very nice!

Name: heronarry14 (Signed) · Date: 02/05/08 10:34 · For: Chapter the Second: Hermione
LOVE it!!!! It is earning a trip to my favorites! I'm a total suker for Hermione and Ron fics, so this was perfect!

Name: RomioneLoverx (Signed) · Date: 01/16/08 10:28 · For: Chapter the Second: Hermione

Name: go go ravenclaw (Signed) · Date: 01/11/08 11:07 · For: Chapter the Second: Hermione
Well, well, well. Wonderful, wonderful, wonderful.

Name: jyzajyl (Signed) · Date: 11/29/07 17:57 · For: Chapter the Second: Hermione
totally cute and sweeeeeeeeeet. i love the tenderness. love it!

Name: jyzajyl (Signed) · Date: 11/29/07 17:55 · For: Chapter the Second: Hermione
totally cute and sweeeeeeeeeet. i love the tenderness. love it!

Name: Ritter (Signed) · Date: 04/16/07 17:59 · For: Chapter the Second: Hermione
Very nice story, I love it! Keep writing!

Name: iheartbloom8 (Signed) · Date: 02/11/07 15:33 · For: Chapter the Second: Hermione
OMG, this story is so sweet.

Name: Starmaiden (Signed) · Date: 02/11/07 14:00 · For: Chapter the Second: Hermione
Squeee! How adorable! I'm so glad I found this (I got interested, looking at your LJ fic meme).

I love the last part about Hermione imagining them kissing to stop an argument -- it's quite true to what we know of them! And the way Ron finally asked her out was so cute.

The split perspectives is always fun; even more challenging since you've done it in present tense. Very well, too; you didn't slip out of it at all, as far as I can tell.

I laughed pretty hard when I read what it was that Hermione caught those third years doing. It's a very...young-stupid-boy thing to do.

My thoughts return to rodent Ron. ... I could then carry him around in my pocket, and he’d never ask me for help with homework again.
It shows Hermione's exasperation, but also affection -- why else would you carry a small furry creature in your pocket all day?

It's interesting how Ron and Hermione know a lot about each other, but they've got several things wrong, too (mainly the feelings they have for each other). And their mistakes sort of echo each other (same feelings, silly things that endear them to each other).

So: wonderful story! I'm going to go read some more of your stuff!

Name: Oppungo (Signed) · Date: 01/31/07 14:47 · For: Chapter The First: Ron
I read this a long time ago, Jenna - before I knew you. In fact, I lost it a long time ago as well - again, before I knew you. Perhaps I should have done what Hermione did, and marked it to find my way back. But unlike Hermione, I don't think my Prince Charming would have left me a little note like Ron did - mainly because it would have been saved to my favourites list as my way of marking, and there's no way for my Prince Charming to leave a note there, a) because it's just impossible, b) because no one knows I'm on here, and c) because I haven't actually found him yet. But back to the story - which I am so glad I found (with a little help from the Lost and Found thread in the forums!).

The first paragraph was wonderful, really drawing the reader into the scene with all that wonderful description - and then that great break into the line which was the second paragraph: Ron's thoughts. I thought it was a really unique way of doing it, and it was very effective.

Initially I did think the forth paragraph should have been spilt up into sentences rather than with all the punctuation in there - but then I realised how Ron like it was, and I'm glad you left it that way.

The plot is absolutely lovely - it's funny how much Ron and Hermione do resemble Elizabeth and Mr. Darcy, and how cute of Ron for that to immediately come into his mind - almost as cute as his lack of self-confidence making him believe that Hermione hates him! Bless.

"It’s not the last minute, it’s not even eight yet ," Oh, that made me giggle! It's so obvious to all of us that Ron wants Hermione to help not only so he can pass, but so he can spend time with her - why can't she see that as well?! But then again, I guess he never notices that she dotted her eyes with hearts every time she corrected his papers either...!

I really liked how you had little things escalate into an argument, as that is how it so often happens. Complete with Ron's foot-in-mouth tendencies and Hermione overreacting a little - although I can't really blame her.

I did think it really good that you included Sirius' death and real issues in here - there isn't just Ron and Hermione's relationship in the world, and they know that, so it's nice to see that addressed here. It's also nice to see the admittance that they're scared - for of course they would be. They're still only children, and they literally have the weight of the world on their shoulders, as well as trying to get each other to like them! It can't be easy!

I found one sentence a little strange, "She walks over, with her hands on her waist," I would have said "her hands on her hips" as that's the general expression for the action I'm assuming you're envisioning Hermione doing here? Although I could be completely wrong, and it could be a Brit/American difference, but I'm used to hearing 'hands on hips' rather than waist. However, that didn't make too much sense, so feel free to ignore that.

"She’s irresistible when she’s mad, I just want to take her and kiss her when she’s like that. It’s probably not a great idea, though." *dies laughing* It's that wonderful use of the short sentence that slayed me there - it was so funny, so Ron, so wonderful. The internal argument that Ron went through I also found very amusing, as again, it was so Ron.

Another thing I really liked in your writing was all the little details you put in, like the doodles of Hermione's name written in hearts (aww!), Hermione "marching", the fire and so on - it really brings it all to life and just a joy to read. Well, the plot already does that, but that enhances it greatly! I wonderful chapter to a wonderful story - I'll review the next chapter soon (I hope!), but I just really want you to know that I love this story. A lot!

Right, well now that this is done, I ought to be off to rescue Prince Charming - hopefully I'll speak to you soon, and don't worry about any burn marks you might see - the dragon's tamer than it looks!

Name: WeasleysRule87 (Signed) · Date: 01/01/07 3:19 · For: Chapter the Second: Hermione
good story. i really enjoyed it.

Name: arwen21 (Signed) · Date: 08/26/06 1:55 · For: Chapter the Second: Hermione
Love it. I especially enjoyed Harry's reaction and how it suited the end of the stor.

Name: Crazy Rat (Signed) · Date: 08/03/06 0:45 · For: Chapter the Second: Hermione
oooh, me loved it. liked to see a more caring side of ron. 10/10!

Name: suckr4romance (Signed) · Date: 07/03/06 21:26 · For: Chapter the Second: Hermione
Very cute! I was in just the right mood for this, because I watched Pride and Prejudice yesterday. Ron got his girl; yay!

Name: chislarina (Anonymous) · Date: 04/29/06 22:01 · For: Chapter the Second: Hermione
This is one of the best ones i have read. I always wanted Ron and Hermione to get together.
Thank you for writing this great story!

Name: EvilRockess (Signed) · Date: 04/26/06 17:33 · For: Chapter the Second: Hermione
AWSOME sorry i get excited when i finish reading a good story. Congrats to you, you wrote one of my most favortie fan fics ever. Hope you keep writing! (i REALLY hope you do) lol Tootles

Name: ladymedc (Signed) · Date: 04/21/06 9:39 · For: Chapter the Second: Hermione
I quite enjoyed that little story. Thanks for sharing.

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