Reviews For Hormones
Reviewer: LunaLvegoodgirl
Date: 05/02/11 17:41
Chapter: Hormones

wow....just wow

Reviewer: ron lover
Date: 08/28/09 15:37
Chapter: Hormones

i like the characertization in this story.

Reviewer: Panda_Baby_51593
Date: 06/20/09 20:01
Chapter: Hormones

that was an odd story, but I liked it. by the way Wicked username...LOL

Reviewer: ronsbabiesmomma
Date: 12/08/08 18:06
Chapter: Hormones

"kept looking at him like a new Broomstick itching to be rode"

for some reason that line made me laugh out loud. i liked this story though. good job.

Reviewer: beatlemanial
Date: 06/19/08 19:28
Chapter: Hormones

nice story. ron/draco isn't explored nearly as much as draco/harry. i think i like draco/harry better just because it seems more canon-compliant to me. i can definitely see draco as gay, it explains his complete lack of interest in girls over the years.

Reviewer: beatlemanial
Date: 06/19/08 19:28
Chapter: Hormones

nice story. ron/draco isn't explored nearly as much as draco/harry. i think i like draco/harry better just because it seems more canon-compliant to me. i can definitely see draco as gay, it explains his complete lack of interest in girls over the years.

Reviewer: Rhi for HP
Date: 05/10/08 2:26
Chapter: Hormones

Hahhaha! The ending was great! This was well written and exceedingly entertaining. The first Ron/Draco I have ever truly enjoyed! :) Nice job!

Reviewer: summervacation01
Date: 01/26/08 8:36
Chapter: Hormones

great story its now residing in my favourites.
keep up the good work and you should right a sequel.

Reviewer: pandafan81
Date: 10/05/07 13:02
Chapter: Hormones

This is a very interestng story. Overall, it was told well. The dialouge is good and you didn't overobsess with the emotional side of things, as most people would.

I don't think you need to have "Draco's POV" or "Ron's POV" labled. I think that takes away from the story, like the author wouldn't be able to figure it out otherwise. Not to mention, you never see "POV" in any literature. I would simply seperate the sections with a few dashes or ***.

There are a few things I found while reading the story. Mostly little typos that only need a quick edit.

If Weasley wasn't so poor and Gryffindor I might of even tried to friend him.
Two things: 1. "might of" sounds too slang-ish for Draco. The Malfoys take pride in their airs from dress to speech. I thing "might have" would sound more dignified- something Draco would say.
2. "to friend him" This is a crit that I'm not really sure of. But usually friend isn't used as a verb. There's a very good chance that it is a common term in the UK, and if it is, ignore me. But it reminds me too much of social networking websites like facebook and myspace-- and we all know how Draco hates anything connected with Muggles.

It would take him, how long? Five minutes. These Gryffindor's don't know the meaning off good grooming.
"off" should be "of"

Denial isn't just a river in Spain,
ha ha ha ha! Love it

well when I saw looking I mean there's a smirk on his face and his expression is of great joy.
You're missing some commas here, around "..I saw, looking, I mean," I know that Ron speaks in phrases often, but the sentence would be much clearer if he said something like: "I notice that Malfoy is looking at me and there's this smirk on his face, his expression is of great joy."

The sleeves of his school shirt turned up until the elbow...
The sentence would flow better if "until" was replaced with "to". "...turned up to the elbow..."

Both boys kissed hungrily and moaning softly against each others lips, Draco trying not too but failing.
"too" ought to be "to"

...wondering if he should make a comment about what just happened but remembering that it was he was kissed him first...
This needs to be reworded slightly, maybe" "...remembering he initiated the kiss"

The bucket fell over and the water poured over the dungeon floor and because of the soap in the water, this caused Draco to lose his balance...
having "because" and "caused" in the same sentence sounds redundant. I would recommend something like: "The bucket fell over and the water poured over the dungeon floor. The soapy water caused Draco to lose his balance..."

It was only when a deep and annoyed voice spoke did either boy tore their eyes from the other.
Verb tense: "tore" should be "tear"

As for the story overall, It's believeable in a way. You don't really explain why they get together, other than the pure lust. But I liked that they didn't come together in other circumstances, like Ron getting revenge on Hermione or Draco wanting to "take what is Harry's".

And why is Draco wearing the eyeliner anyway? Is it a teenage Goth rebellion (too Muggle in my opinion)? Or is he flaunting his feminine side (too anti-pureblood)? Ron can't seem to contain himself once he sees the eyeliner, but I find that rather rediculous. I don't really think that eyeliner would add so much to Draco's beauty that suddenly Ron can't deny himself any longer. I don't know, I just don't think the eyeliner is as much of a catalyst as you want it to be. If Ron and Draco are going to fall head over heals for each other, I don't think eyeliner is going to make that much of a difference. I'd rather you focused on their attention and appreciation of each other's bodies and movements.

Like I said, overall, it is a good story. The characterization is good (you know, other than the fact that Ron and Draco go at it), specifically Draco's at the beginning. I really liked the touches of humor. I liked that it wasn't an agnsty fic, and that they didn't spend half the story arguing about what they did was "wrong".

Reviewer: Merlynne
Date: 08/24/07 22:50
Chapter: Hormones

Brilliant. I'm not usually a fan of slash, but this was so well done. I wish all romances were written as well as this. You've got talent! Such tension, steamy! Great work.

Reviewer: XdracosxdeathxangelX
Date: 08/09/07 13:07
Chapter: Hormones

amaaaaaaazing.^-^

Reviewer: Niki Libby Chang
Date: 08/04/07 10:12
Chapter: Hormones

You do know that is, like, my favorite story on the site, right? What is hotter than Ron and Draco? I love it!

Reviewer: hmsoctopus
Date: 07/11/07 23:41
Chapter: Hormones

:D Funny, funny stuff. I can picture the scene! Great fic!

Reviewer: SlytherinBlood
Date: 06/18/07 6:37
Chapter: Hormones

I'm normally not very much into same-sex pairings, but this was really - sexy:)
keep up the good work, and thanx very much for this story!

Reviewer: Padfoot519
Date: 06/06/07 18:36
Chapter: Hormones

ron/draco
ewwwwwww
but good story

Reviewer: Cindy Weasley
Date: 05/25/07 21:21
Chapter: Hormones

Umm...This may seem like a really stupid question but I need to ask it...Was Ron liking Draco before, or just then? And was Draco liking Ron before, or just then?

Reviewer: DragonPhoenix
Date: 04/11/07 1:30
Chapter: Hormones

dude i lvoe the idea of draco malfoy in eyeliner

Guys and Eyeliner= HOT

Reviewer: DragonPhoenix
Date: 04/11/07 1:30
Chapter: Hormones

**Love**

Reviewer: DragonPhoenix
Date: 04/11/07 1:30
Chapter: Hormones

dude i lvoe the idea of draco malfoy in eyeliner

Guys and Eyeliner= HOT

Reviewer: Babieblonde5629
Date: 03/31/07 19:48
Chapter: Hormones

um wow that was a really interesting fic. i mean ur a really good writer and all, but draco and ron? gosh it was written very well though

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