Thank you for a great story. Never believe that you are nor an author/or can not write a book. this was worthy of publication if any stories I have read were.
Ok. Harry saw Ginny in the mirror and Ron saw Hermione.Grendelhall is actually Tonks. And Sirius' cave is where the diary is.
Done 12:47p on 10/30/12 without reading further
Ok. Harry say Ginny in the mirror and Ron saw Hermione.Grendelhall is actually Tonks. And Sirius' cave is where the diary is.
Done 12:47p on 10/30/12 without reading further
Ok, now you've really got me hooked!
By the way, I thought the new diary gave Harry a new password to access the next diary.
Somebody needs to remind molly just who Grimmauld Place belongs to. The Weasleys do NOT own it, they stay there out of the goodness of Harry's heart and should remember that!!!
I loved it! It was amazing, almost worthy of JKR herself ^_^ Such funny moments and sad moments, loads of intrigue and excitement. You're an amazing writer. Fantastic. I'm sad that you're not continuing to Harry's 7th Year though, it'd would've been awesome.
And JKR's triumph is definitely in her getting people to read and write. She made me decide on that as a hobby and a dream job when I was just 6 years old ^^
Wonderful! I loved it, the whole story! This is defenitely a fanfic I will remember, possibly through the last battle which is one of the best I have ever read in fanfiction. There was the perfect mix of AU and authentic Potter-adrenaline:)
A very fun story. A bit disappointed to see that it is incomplete. The appearance of DH is really no reason to leave this story incomplete -- it is a different universe (so to speak) after all. That universe should see the end to Voldie.
Author's Response: Um...thanks for pointing out all the problems with my story, I guess?
When did the phrases in the diaries change? In ch. 20 the phrase at the end of the 1st diary was "Acclaronius" but here it is now "Umbria Existio". In the ch. 25 the phrase in the 2nd diary was "Arcana Fateorus" but is now "En Promptu Pronerius." In ch. 38 the phrase at the end of the 3rd diary was "Invenio Altus" but has become "Arcana Fateorus." This is confusing to me.
This is an interesting and fascinating story line. But I'm curious as to why the need to preserve Wulfric. Does the pact end when his life does? If so then it seems a merely treat and not a great power. If it is something enduring then shouldn't it pass from generation to generation? What if the pureblood supremacists had simply kept quiet for a hundred years or so till Wulfric had passed on and then attacked. Would the pact have been invalid and the needed help unavailable. I think as the mythology of the Half-Blood Prince had hinted at the beginning of the story, the search would have yielded a token of some kind that enabled Harry (as Heir of Gryffindor) to use the pact to compel the assistance of the Centaurs and Goblins. Oh, it also would have been nice of other races, particularly the Elves, had been included. Then Harry's invocation of the pact could have resulted in the freeing of the House Elves from their enslavement by tricery and restored them to their original, more powerful, status.
Perhaps Harry and Ginny getting together would've worked better earlier. But as you did it that would've been difficult, because it is the Mirror of Erised that helps Harry realize how he felt and his encounter with that wouldnt have worked earlier (unless perhaps you had him come across it as he was searching for the tower of the third diary). Anyway I think it works fine as is. Good job.
I've read a few stories with the Harry gets what he deserves for not likely Ginny line. It is one thing to have Harry act awkward around (but even that is rather ooc), but the notion of making Harry suffer is rather petty. Teenage girls may in fact be that immature. But it is also rather risky. I can imagine Ginny bumping into Harry at a Final Battle reunion 50 years later. "Harry, why didn't you ever get together with someone?" "Well, I never found the right person." "There was never someone you fancied." "Oh yes, I did fancy you back in 6th year." "Really. Why didn't you ever say anythiing?" "Oh, I did. I talked to Hermoine. But she was vindictive and felt I had to suffer like you had when you were crushing me. That seemed so immature to me. I just walked away because I didn't want to have any part of such pettiness."
Hermione and Ron following Harry would not 'retrace' his steps. That would mean they were going back the way they had come. As they had not come there yet, none of them could retrace their steps.
When Harry was stupefied (misspelled as stupify), he would be unconscious, you treated him as if the spell had been Petrificus Totalis
Amelia Bones would not be Mistress of Magic (you're probably thinking Headmistress to match Headmaster) but simple Minister of Magic. Margaret Thatcher was never called Prime Mistress but only Prime Minister.
The first time Harry was at the book case, he did not say Arcana Fateorus but repeated Acclaronius from the bookcase in the Ravenclaw dorms. That may be minor, but rather than appearing to have said them many time it appears as if this is the first time he has spoken them.
'He had sought out Luna Lovegood the first opportunity he had had and while she was certain her father would be delighted to run the interview, they already had the December filled and wouldn’t be able to get to him until January or February. Unfortunately he would have to wait until then.' -- This is not how newspapers work. If a big story comes your way, you pull lesser stories to make room for it if you need to.
And why is Molly allowed to take over Harry's propery. Grimmauld Place is his after Sirius' death, isn't it?
That's all I can say.
I've been surfing these sorts of sites now for roughly a year and a half.... I came to read yours as one of the profiles of someone said that they loved it as much as the real ones....
They were right!
You know, I was pissed at Deathly Hallows...truly was.
Sure, there were some good parts, like breaking into the Ministry....
But seriously, let's review:
b. Defeated by a expelliarmous
c. Stuck in a tent in the middle of nowhere, and yet at the same time happening to come in time and win?
*You know, it's interesting. I've never been a Harry/Ginny fan; for these reasons:
a. Harry explicitily hates why he's famous, and the attention it brings him. Yet who's the one who has bad a crush on him since BEFORE SHE MET HIM?
b. Harry/Hermione seem the logical choice. Let's see:
-First year, Harry leads Ron to save her from the troll as well as He. saying, those things to Ha. before he went through the final door to meet Voldermort.
-Second year, Ha. stayed with He. all the time she was petrified, when R. didn't. Her knwoledge enabled him to defeat the Basilisk.
-Third year: TIme turner.Enough said. Private adventure
-Fourth year: He. stays with Ha. and is loyal even when R. isn't. He. helps train Ha. for the tasks.
-Fifth year: R. and He.fight 24/7 and eventually curse each other. He. also becomes clingy to Ha.
-Sixth year: sort of died! But still somewhat clingy.
-Seventh year: Alone in a tent! He-llo! AND she chose Harry over Ron. Enough said.
I truly believe that what happened is that J.K.R. found a difficult situation that she couldn't think of a way to get her characters out of.... and thus, went with the easy way out and not her origninall intended plan.
:o and also 'You'll never be happy if you weren't fighting him, Harry' what G. says to Ha. at D's funeral.... HELLO!!!!
And throughout the adventures, ALL THE BOOKS G. has not been included... going through that much in one life, and then marryiong someon who DIDN'T experience it? C'mon!
The reasons that I say this are thus: Yours is the ONLY book that I've read that I considered the H/G relationship justified.... Not that I reckon it should happen, but as a reader I could accept it, instead of saying, 'Hang on!'
Also, yours is the ONLY book out there thus far that is written in the style of JKR herself. Plot, plan, DA, new ideas, secrets, mysterious, takes a year to discover, AND includes fun times.
AKA a true novel.
If you ever consider writing for real, PLZ let me know so I can buy a copy of your books!
And PLZ consider writing another novel to this one!!!!!!
My email is firstname.lastname@example.org
Once again, CONGRATS!!!
The tree is a very facinating concept, must look amazing in the minds eye.
How did you think of useing the name Donaldson it's not common only one writer i have heard of has it then again it is a Scottish name..Hence why it's mine lol...Must say it was fun runing into ones own name.
is there a sequel