You did the "Mom's" POV perfectly! I love this!
Its a very good story, how you write from Molly's POV. I think you could do a second part and I'm sure going to read it.
That was wonderful. I think it was very well written, very emotional. Aside from the few points Masked One pointed out, it's excellent. Ginny's evolution to the strong character she is now was very well portrayed. Great job!
wow man, that was mad!!!
There are two parts to this story: Molly and Ginny. I’ll address them as separately as possible, just so this review makes some sort of sense.
Molly first, then. By not mentioning her name, you placed her in the role of narrator. It focused the story more towards Ginny, and allowed the reader to slide over Molly to some extent. However, there were a few rough points there. I think the Molly presented here has too much of a bias towards Ginny, and not enough attention for her other children. She loves the boys dearly, and I don’t see her ‘blowing them off’ as much as she seems to in parts of this. Furthermore, there is a bit of a contradiction near the beginning. It sounds as though Molly wants a ‘girly girl.’ Why, then, does she name the child after a warrior queen? And why doesn’t she express even a passing disappointment when Ginny does all the things that annoy Molly when the boys do them?
Those points aside, Molly is well done. She sounds very much like a mother who cares dearly about her child. Her pride is so well justified, and perfectly tinged with worry. You did a wonderful job capturing that combination of emotions.
Ginny. Your portrayal of her as more of a tomboy was spot on. I really liked how you filled in the times between when Harry sees her. The passing comments of tea parties and shopping trips during her last year at home were sweet. And you justified her sudden appearance in Harry’s life during OOTP, where she seems to come out of nowhere. Her attempted strength at the end was spot on.
Nice fic. I look forward to reading more of your stories.
Wow...amazing voice, awesome portrayal...perfect 10..wow again!
You. Gave. Me. The. Shivers. Oh, my goodness, what can I say? I love it. Ginny is my absolute favorite character, and you wrote her perfectly. Thank you for the awesome, awesome read!