You are a very talented writer. Your characterization of everyone made me feel as close as I felt to Harry through the actual books or made me hate them like I hated Umbridge. The way you described the events of the night in Godric's Hollow was so perfect it made me cry. Never stop writing.
Amazing story! you really got the characters and the story out there. I have laughed and cried - it is one of the best fanfictions I have read so far. Thanks
I LOVED your story! Got hold of it through a friend last year ... and when I made an account here at Mugglenet I just had to review it!! Sirius as a vampire was really cute and funny, and Remus ... well wow! Scenes between him and Fenrir were really cool! And the ending was so sweet - well sweet in a very sad way! I do hope you continue writing ... you're possibly the best writer I've come across on this site so far! :)
This story was so powerful, I probably liked it better than veiled revelations. Your such a good writer I hope you keep writing! Pretty please with [insert choice of topping here]!
THE STORY IS SUPER!!!!!!!
I cried. I'm not joking. This is such a beautiful story, but (as always with Lily and James stories) it has a really sad ending. I loved it. Thank you so much for writhing it.
the story is brilliant... u really had everything right... erm i really feel bad for sirus... i couldnt stop crying everything i read a story abt james and lily dying... and sirius going to azakaban... haiz... peter only died in the 7th book.. i still dont get it y harry didnt allow him to be killed when sirius and remus wanted to... but this is really great story !!!!!!! i luv it..
If only Remus or Dumbledore or anyone had gone to see Sirius in Azkaban, even just to see him where they thought he belonged, they could have learned the truth and Sirius could've been freed. I know, I always want everyone to be happy, except the bad guys of course. Anyway, this was an excellent fic and there were quite a few original ideas that fit in so well with JKR's books. I particularly liked Sirius pretending to be a Vampire, very amusing he was. Keep writing.
I feel that James was perhaps a little reckless for insisting Sirius to be secret keeper and their readily agre4eing to a switch for Pettigrew was unwise as they had no proof of who the spy was. I guess you can tell i don't trust people. Also, I feel so sorry for Remus here, Sirius only devised the dupe because he thought Remus was the spy, couldn't he have gotten a secret keeper too? And Sirius is going to feel wretched when he finds out about Pettigrew, it's all so tragic. Brilliantly written.
I've said it before and I'll say it again, I HATE PETTIGREW!!!!!!!!! That last paragraph with the three Potters standing together watching the sky was so bitter sweet, and they only have thirty days left together. I hope they're happy ones.
Poor Remus, I can hear him sobbing, your descriptions are too good. Can't somebody shut that place down? And sending Lily and Dorcas in to that Vampire shop! Is Dumbledore mental? Surely there are other ways. Sirius must know now that Remus is innocent, so why haven't they guessed at Pettigrew's being the traitor?
I found this chapter so depressing. Don't get me wrong, it was so well written and probably exactly how they'd all act, I just find it so disheartening when friendships breakdown. I despise Pettigrew, what a git! It's not only that he's turned traitor, it's the way he's done it, setting them all against one another, making them suspect anyone but him. OOO I'd love to hex him into oblivian! And Remus knows, but can't prove it to anyone or he'll give away the marauder secret. Perhaps he should've told Dumbledore about the animagi, at least it might have proven Peter guilty, and saved Lily and James lives so Harry didn't end up with the Dursley's. Sorry, getting carried away.
Considering how easy it was for Voldemort to kill the Potters, it was quite obvious he was going easy on them, still don't know why though. I knew it was him the minute you mentioned red eyes in your description of the shop owner. I'm guessing he does want Lily for something, however as she is a muggle born I can't fathom why. If Snape was the one in Dumbledores office that Remus overheard, then Voldemort must already know of the prophecy, but the timing isn't right for that, unless you've arranged it differently. I'll just have to read on and find out.
I'm going to give myself ten minutes before i read on, I need to calm down, I'm in tears over this chapter. I really like this fic, you've written the characters really well and they all have distinct personalities and leap from the words. I can't list how many emotions i've felt while reading and I'm barely into the story.
This is a really great story. I loved how you worked in everything. My only complaint is the stuff at the beginning with Voldermort seemed a little anti-climatic. I loved the relationships you created and how you let Lily and Remus rock the house a few times. I understood why Sirius thought it was Remus and how Peter orchestrated everything. I think you've also written the best Peter-turning I've ever read. You made him so complex in these two stories. I loved it!!!! These are definitely two of my favorite stories, the Maurader-era stories I was looking for! I don't even know what else I can say to rant and rave about these! Just fantastic.
I love Slughorn. You should go back (if you can) and include him in Veiled Revelations. I'm a little confused on whether Remus knows Lily and James are with Dumbeldore or not.
James' patronus changed into a phoenix? Was that an accident? I also caught another error, but I'm not sure what it was. It was a chapter or two ago... Hmmm...
Author's Response: yeah, sorry about that! that was definitely an error, which i guess i didn't catch (thought i'd been thorough but there you go!) if you remember the other, do tell me, i'd like to go back and edit my stupidity!
Yay! Lily being a badass. I love it.
Oh my god. That was just about one of the sadest things. Harry's parent's death's all seem sort of disconnected from the series when you read it. But then this... and Remus thought it was Sirius! Its so sad. Now its over. Harry Potter is over.
wow.... i mean reli wow. that has gave me shivers, im so depressed now! aw i take of my hat for you , that was amazing, i really am impressed. loved all the back round stuff about Lupin. well done x