Tragic, yet heroic. Nice rhyming.
sad,beautiful,such vivid language i loved it
Sad, and pretty good. Good use of words.
I have returned because your star rating is still not high enough. Here is one suggestion I will make for your summary: Change "A poetry version of one of the possible outcomes of the Final Battle" to "A poetic interpretation of one possible outcome of the Final Battle".
Author's Response: Thanks for the suggestions. I think some of the rhymes seem off because when I say it myself I know what needs to be squished or expanded for it to flow. That doesn't work so much over the internet. Lol. Your summary does sound better; the other one was sort of an 'Oh crap, I have to put in a summary, don't I?'
Well done! The star rating for this is too low. It is deserving of a higher rating, so I hope this review will help a bit. Your rhymes were tight, and I can tell that you put a great deal of time and thought into this. There were some places in which the meter was off, but that would be quite easy to correct. Overall, it scans quite well.
It was sad, but I liked it anyway.