Reviews For Midnight
Reviewer: Kaiserin
Date: 09/02/10 12:11
Chapter: Chapter Three: A Farther Room

Very nice turn of events. The mirror thing. I'm very very curious what both Draco and Hermione saw in the broken mirror!

Author's Response: Thank you. I will definitley explore what they both saw, but it will come later on - as it's going to influence certain decisions that both of them make.

Reviewer: coolh5000
Date: 08/29/10 15:17
Chapter: Chapter Three: A Farther Room


Having just read the entire fic (I started off on MNFF and then moved to another site when I discovered there were more chapters posted - it would be great if you could get them up on this site as well) I am absolutely hooked. The tension you build is incredible and I am so immersed in the world you have created that when I finished, it took me a few minutes to realise that I wasn't actually in it!

Generally I am not a Dramione fan but so many fics of this type now are Dramione that I decided to give yours a go and it has definitely been well worth it. I am particularly enjoying how much focus you have given to the plot and other characterisations and have not laboured too long over forcing a relationship between Draco and Hermione. It is clear that it is going to come but it feels more like an organic process than romance for the sake of romance. And for the moment, they remain completely in character, with their traditional hatred still present, even if other feelings are beginning to surface.

Draco’s character in particular fascinates me, and I think the dark elements you have given him are excellent and fit perfectly in to this new darker world. He is a person who has been forced to do terrible things and it is right that Draco would be very different after this.

As for Hermione, I think the choice she made at the end of the war is interesting. It is hard to imagine her as one in hiding, rather than being there with the rest of them, keeping the order going. But on the other hand, she had no choice and there would obviously have been a complete lack of mercy from the DEs so I think her decision was probably the only one she could have taken.

You have paid so much attention to the details of the world you have created and it is a truly believable Alternate universe. I can really see this being the way Voldemort would have wanted things run. There is clearly so much thought behind every part of this. I think that in particular, the comments about Voldemort preferring pain and suffering to immediate death are a great inside into the mind of the Dark Lord.

My only comment would be that occasionally the transitions between characters were confusing. I would almost have preferred some sort of line break or symbol between characters and it would often take me a paragraph or two to adjust into the new voice, which would then change again almost as quickly, especially in the later chapters. Generally, I enjoyed the technique of showing us different characters and how their lives were intertwining with each other and I definitely think including them all helped build a clear picture of the world and everyone’s role in the story.

Anyway, I have really loved this story and I hope that perhaps this review will encourage you to post more chapters on here as I know many other people would enjoy reading it, and maybe also to continue on from the cliffhanger of the final chapter!


Author's Response: Hi Hannah! Thank you so much for such a thoughtful and detailed review. It's wonderful to get such considered commentary and you really made my day! I shall move the continuation of the story onto this site as well (I'd forgotten about it, to tell you the truth). I know Dramione isn't everyone's cup of tea, so thanks for giving the fic a go despite that :) Hopefully this is a story that happens to have Dramione in it rather than a story which is all about Draco & Hermione. The romance is secondary to the main plot, for me (mostly because the main plot has become rather larger and more complex than I ever intended, but I'm having tremendous fun with it.) I'm very keen on keeping the characters IC, so if anything goes wayward, please let me know! Yes, Draco has been in a position where he has had to make some horrific choices; and Hermione, I think, would not agree that he should have made those he did. I view it more that Hermione had no choice - she found herself hidden in the castle with no opportunity to escape for the first few months (as you can imagine how afraid Voldemort would be that Hogwarts could be used as a base / rallying point for his opponents), and later no way of knowing how to contact anyone. I have really enjoyed the world-builiding side of it :) I wanted to think through the way the world worked and how Voldemort control the world once he had it. After all, no use running the world if everyone else is dead. Ack! You are the first person to have pointed this out to me - I've just realised that has swallowed all of my breaks between characters. I do put breaks in - unfortunately I used symbols that FFN eats (~*~ is my usual break). I've gone back and amended all the scene breaks - they show in the editor for me, but not on the page the reader sees. Apologies for that. I shall go back to using my old break. I'm midway through the next chapter and going ot get stuck in today. Lots of turmoil in my personal life recently, hence the elongated break, but it's all settling down now, thank god! Thank you again for the review :D Halo

Reviewer: the opaleye
Date: 11/06/09 1:04
Chapter: Chapter Three: A Farther Room

Argh, I can't believe I didn't see that this had been updated! Another intriguing chapter. I love how you worked in the Mirror of Erised. Keep up the great fic and I'm looking forward to the next update. Hopefully I won't miss it again!

Reviewer: MaraudingMarauders
Date: 09/29/09 9:06
Chapter: Chapter Three: A Farther Room

Hmmm Very interesting ending, I am looking forward to reading the next chapter! :-)

Reviewer: ProfPosky
Date: 09/26/09 20:41
Chapter: Chapter Three: A Farther Room

Angsty, a very intersting level of angst to sustain, BTW. I'm waiting to see how he gets her in to see Victor, and what that whole story is.

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