Slytherin Quidditch Team
Flow, Focus, Characterization of Ron and Remus, Originality in Plot Setup
Time Management Issues, Didn't Address Challenge Prompt
We liked the description of the move that you started to give, but you were cut off. This story had a lot of potential but since you didn't get around to addressing the prompt or into the meat of the game, it was tough to judge. Try next time to get finished with a more substantial amount of the plotline. From what we saw, you guys were doing a great job, though.
Hufflepuff Quidditch Team
Description of Creative Quidditch Moves, Incorporation of Prompt, Good Characterization of Main Character (i.e. sarcasm), Creative Use of POV
Lack of Flow, Communication in Team, Mechanical Errors
Curse of Beater Bat was original, but wasn't carried through. We applaud you for going on and attempting this even after your original captain quit. Kudos for completing your story and the prompt. Work on making your styles consistent, because sometimes the character sounded like a different person from author to author, and make sure everyone knows clearly what's going on, so that will help with flow and focus. Also, make sure to spellcheck and capitalize as you go. Nice job, guys!
Gryffindor Quidditch Team
Focus, Incorporation of Plot, Use of Quidditch Moves in Setup
Telling Description instead of Showing, Overuse of Oz References (a bit), Use of Cliched Approach
We liked the quirks you put in your characters, if you could focus on your characters more you could add more flavor to the story. We enjoyed your fast pace and focus on the game. This was overall a strong story: not a lot was terrible. Your approach of a “timeout that brings everyone together/changes the game” was used by several teams in the last round, so it didn’t have the effect it would have had – it’s becoming a little cliché. We know you can write a good story; we've seen that. In the future, try to improve and show us a story that leaves us gasping for air. Start by making your characters ROCK OUT and having your plot be really, really crazy-creative.
Great job, guys.
Ravenclaw Quidditch Team
MWPP era, Focus, Creative Interpretation of Challenge
Some Characterization Issues, Flow, Not Enough Quidditch in the Story
We loved how much you wrote. We feel like you all got carried away with the story, though, and forgot it was the QWC. We were missing the actual Quidditch. A few of your characters seemed a bit OOC at times; Sirius and Remus were really good. Your flow in the moment was very good, but your transitions were jarring sometimes. Overall, great story and great effort. The biggest issue was simply the lack of Quidditch game in there! Good job, guys.